|Reviews for Sakura and the Whirlwind of Discovery|
| Bookeater-otaku chapter 14 . 2/23
Glad to have seen this project come to completion. It had its good points and its bad point but it was a whorty sequel to the first one. I say : Good jod.
I still think that there is a lot more stories that could happen at Hogward with the rest of the HP books especialy the later ones since you are tying up both universe to canon. But in the inbetween you could do a couple of one-shot where we could see Sakura back in Japan or visting Syaoran in Hong Kong. It would be interesting to see how you would tie up Sakura wants to learn and developpe magic along her normal school. When Syaoran come, she can obviously get some help that way but it could be more interesting to see Eriol give them some coaching (via mail or in person). But I see him sending them on a small quest to stop some trouble in the ming that experience is the best teacher. It would be more of his style too.
But one of the thing I would have liked in this story would have been more tie-in with Clow past at Hogward. Some secret left behing to uncover or some books on his theory to decifer or... something. The best I could come up wiht would be a proto-card or a proto-guardian, a precursor to Kero and Yue that he didnot had the knowledge to finish it yet and for some reason was hidden in Hogward. Since Kero is the sun and Yue the moon, Sakura could convert the new Gardian after much struggle into the gardian affected to her start power. Just a though.
And the definit lack of Yue appearance in this fic was a minus.
As for this chapter, the reminissing was great but sad for us reader who wanted to see more. The bit with Eriol was realy interesting and I would definetly love to see Eriol as a teacher for Hogward with is out-of-the-box thinking that would shock the student. Send them to another dimension to give them new perspective or a classic: trap them in a book rather than have them read it. He would be a GREAT teacher (students opinion wistanding). Maybe it could be you next story. It happen after the HP books so you dont have to worry about canon and you get to have fun torturing..euh, exploring Hogward and its students more.
But the bit about Eriol with is sword and the mention of a school completly lost me. I dont get the reference. Maybe some more info or clue would be appreciated. And what about the bit with the ring? I know it was a plot device to make Eriol disapear out of the picture but some more detail would have been fun to have. Maybe a hint droped here and there along the story or mention of it at the end. Was it something that had to to with the sword? If it was, it should have been mentioned.
Kaho interaction with Eriol was spot on. But I wonder what it was she was cross about wiht Flitwick. I am not sure if its a good idea for and author to drop bits that come out of nowhere that had little to the plot (especialy at the end). Was it an attempt to fleshout the character? If that the case it should have needed some more hints and small scene along the story for it to make sense or have an impact when placed at the end like that.
You should make more action scene in your fics, you are good at them as you are good to set them up.
Well anyway, good luck on your next project. Give us some teaser so we can expect something!
| nightelf37 chapter 13 . 2/19
The I figured it was Lockhart midway through the chapter.
| Galaxya chapter 14 . 2/17
I have just spent 4 days straight reading this story and its prequel, and I must say you did a great job of seamlessly weaving Sakura, and the others into the harry potter universe in a believable way.
The only thing that saddens me about these stories are, Sakura's original goal was to learn western magic so she could make her own clow card. We never got to find out how her time at hogwarts helped with that, or even if it changed her experimentation with it. And secondly though on a more minor note the circles that appear around Sakura, Yue, and Kero. Syaoran and Sakura never figured out what the meant, or even really what they did... A little more back ground into that would have been nice.
Again I really did like your stories, and if and when you decide to wright another installment in this series I will most certainly be reading it.
| Geoffro Madness chapter 1 . 2/17
I found tye end to this quite interesting. Good job! :)
| Dalilt chapter 14 . 2/17
Thank you for this story. I'm a little sad that it has ended but it can't be avoided.
Sakura already has the basics down so she'll be able to solve any future problem about magic.
I though that Eriol missing was something more important, in the end he was only studying elsewhere. Well he probably doesnt want to stay behind the times..
About the sequel, at least for me personally, there's no need to force it, even if it would be nice :) . As long as you feel pleased with the story, after all that's also important.
| Guest chapter 14 . 2/17
Thank you for this story
| butouidoru chapter 14 . 2/16
I just wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed both of these stories, and hope you continue adding to the series. If you don't, this is at least a good place to end things, but it seems a waste of so many good potential plot points. Either way, what you have written is delightful, and I look forward to reading more from you.
| Mazamba chapter 14 . 2/16
Id personally like to see your take on how Sakura and co would have spent the last few books fending Death Eaters off Asia. You could even go for a more experienced Sakura.
| Anon chapter 14 . 2/16
I really enjoyed this fic. It was fun and interesting as well as well written. I do hope to see another sequel, but this rounds out to a suitable ending all around. I do wonder about where Sakura is in the future books. Now would also be a good time to let her catch up on her mundane studies, if you wanted to skip a few books. Have fun and keep writing (even if it's on to new projects).
| animeandmangafangirl chapter 14 . 2/16
One of my favorite stories of cardcaptor sakura and Harry Potter crossovers. Love it to bits. Maybe write another story but in 5th year :) I would really appreciate it. Keep up your great skills in writing awesome stories
| thelch92 chapter 13 . 2/3
Hello Shareon, first of all I have to say that I love your stores, your concept, your writing and the way you mesh CCS and HP worlds together. But sadly I have some criticism to make, this past chapters have feel a little anti climatic, the problem (and this is just my opinion) is that you have turn Sakura, your protagonist, into an expatiator of her own story.
For example what was the conflict of this last chapter? She lost her cards and her memory. What did she do to get them back? Nothing, at least nothing that help to ultimately solve the problem.
I know you don’t want to break away from canon bot it may be what you need to improve your story as a self-contain work.
Or maybe you could have had Sakura and friends have a confrontation with Lockhart and that could lead to the climax in the book in some way.
At the end this is just (hopefully) constructive criticism, and I hope it help you improve what already is a great story, please keep the good work.
And lastly sorry if something is off, English is not my first language
| ShadowKissedGallagherGirlLexia chapter 13 . 1/31
I don't know if you remember, but previously, I commented on the lack of interaction between the Harry Potter characters and Sakura, Syaoran or Kerberos. You replied, summarizing that you would be going into that in later books (around fourth book was my guess, my memory is a bit rusty). Despite the slow progressing prospect of any interaction between the characters from either worlds, the quality of which each chapter is written is enough for me to willingly wait patiently for whichever book the characters will finally interact in.
As always, looking forward to your next update.
Pleasse Update Soon!
| Harem Lover 26 chapter 13 . 1/30
I think the gang should at least dueled with Lochart. It's would have explained why he took the cards to begain with
| Bookeater-otaku chapter 13 . 1/30
I am realy glad to have read this story. The first one of the optus was good and set a good base for your universe and in this one you managed to expend it. I still think you can take thing further and continue with even more.
The only thing that I felt was lacking in this one was the 'feel of an adventure' a little bit. Not sure how to explain it. You had all the elements but maybe it was in the narrative technique. But this is a fanfiction, where most of the time the chapter are built one after another rather than a book where everything is published in one block. Maybe with a little more action... But what would be fun would be to see Gloria and the others comming to Japan (Maybe in a stand alone short story)
Syaoran idea of a tutor sound wonderfull for both him and Sakura. Also I could see Eriol dropping there from time to time or with letters to give his grain of salt. And maybe Sakura could take the year away to learn about other type of Magic, or have other type of adventures and come back to the wizzard world later in the Harry Potter Series.
It was a good chapter, with an interesting twist and many elements but the climax was lacking and you still have some of unfinished plot points that I would like to see resolved. A confrontation with Lockhart would definetly have been welcomed to learn of his motive and plots he had for the card or how he knew about them.
| GoldenRat chapter 13 . 1/30
How did Lockhart even know about the cards to steal them?
I'll have to reread the series once completed.