|Reviews for Thawing|
| Melitot Proud Eye chapter 1 . 9/4/2011
I liked it very much; it's so difficult to find a good story about Soujiro's journeying, and yours is one of the best, in my opinion. Both his and Saitou's characterization were not only accurate, but highlighted their inner thoughts. Then there were the character development, the historical facts, the simple yet engaging narration.
Just a flaw: many typos and disappeared verbs/words. You might want to proof-read every chapter )
Hope you'll write about So again, someday!
| Ladidumm chapter 6 . 3/7/2011
Thank you for writing about the interactions between Okita and Saito. Have you got any others similar?
| Sailor GaOn Donut chapter 6 . 10/25/2008
| omasuoniwabanshi chapter 6 . 4/12/2005
I'm adding this story to my favorites list! Even the few grammatical errors here and there couldn't stop me from absolutely LOVING this story. There were so many things about it that reeled me in from chapter one - political intrigue, murder mystery, Soujirou's recruitment as a police spy, not to mention the touches of humor. Awesome use of flashbacks - the amount and placement within the story was sheer perfection.
You write an invigorating action adventure while incorporating a common Japanese theme, that of needing an opponent to grow stronger. I loved the way you stuck Soujirou in a morass of moral ambiguity - to protect Seisuke or not, to save him or his wife, and then after that having to make the decision to save Seisuke's children while leaving him to the very unforgiving Japanese justice system. The line: "I will wait with you, even if you don't know that it's forever now. This is what I can do in the end. I'll never be like Shishio and try to rule the world. But I'll never be like Saitou either, always trying to protect it. I don't know what I will do in the end but protecting these three, giving them a home, that enough for now." sums up Soujirou's growth as a character so well.
You're an amazingly good story-teller. Thank you for writing this!
| Hidari chapter 6 . 3/7/2005
Great fic, amazingly written! I liked the way you switched from present to flashback, very smoothly done.
I liked how you showed why Saito was the way he was. And Soujiro, I thought at first he was going to be recruited by Saito by your ending was much better.
There was a bit of typo errors in the story but that's all. Excellent work!
| Vialana chapter 6 . 2/24/2005
I really enjoyed reading this.
More than anything else I loved your portrayal of Saitou. He's such an enigmatic character, you kept that up while giving him a lot of depth. The flashback scenes with Okita were fantastic, teh same with the comparisons between Soujiro and Okita. They are rather alike.
I quite liked the ending actually. Much as I'm sure we all wished the Meiji era ended all right, we know in fact that this sort of thing was going on all the time. It really made for quite an engaging and realistic plot. It wasn't completely over the top either, you managed to keep it concise and structured.
I'll be adding this to my faves and C2 list.
| anaki chapter 6 . 5/30/2004
Okita's eyes stared at the sun. The last embers of light slowly flicked into the thin line of the horizon. Okita smiled and took in a deep breath.
"Aku. Sou. Zan."
This line did it for me. This is absolutely fantastic by the way. I love the way the fic ended. I can't picture another ending that is so fitting to the story as this one.
| aquafina rain chapter 6 . 4/2/2004
Right. First thing's first. This is definetly going into my favorites. Now. Onto the fic.
I absolutely loved this. Saitou was just so Saitou that you couldn't help but love him. And Soujirou's so angsty and depressing and struggling through his emotions that you couldn't help but love -him-, either. And the three kids... They were adorable. Even if the third one really didn't do much except lie there on her lazy ass like every baby does. XDD
The flashbacks of Okita and Saitou were nifty. Crafty, too, since it made things more confusing for Saitou. Like how Soujirou and Okita were like the same people... I personally though it was crafty.
Anyway, I enjoyed reading this. It was really different. And I loved it. -
| Ghost chapter 6 . 1/26/2004
It's a wonderful story, though the ending could have benefited from a good round-off. Besides, it was much too melancoly for my taste.
Still, a smashing good work as usual, Istoria-dounin.
| Ghost chapter 2 . 1/26/2004
Wait a minute! Okita, that was the guy who had tubercholosis, right?
Thinking back (I lost all my scans when my PC died T_T) he really DID look alot like Soujirou!
| Ghost chapter 1 . 1/26/2004
Aha! After a long period of silence, I, Ghost, has returned to FFN to review your story! Rejoice!
Man, Soujirou and Saitou! This is gonna rock! _
| i like c0ff33 chapter 6 . 10/15/2003
This fic is great. I have also done a wee bit of research on shinsengumi and this is quite accurate. Poor kids . . .
also, a great site for saitou and shinsengumi stuff, including the last chapter of Ruroken:
| Ariana Deralte chapter 6 . 4/29/2003
I really enjoyed reading this story. I liked the fact that you included so much about Okita and made the effort to be historically accurate. The in depth looks at Soujirou and Saitou were good as well. Cheers:)
| Sarlinia chapter 6 . 3/25/2003
Dudde, that was one bad ass fic! Not, it was beautiful, I was in tears, I smiled, and I sighed in hope! Wow! Kudo's to you! You've inspired me in my dying fic about Soujiro...but seriously, it was well written and well thought out, though is there a sequeal? Or is it just wishful thinking?
| Cka3ka chapter 6 . 3/7/2003
Well. I had no idea you finished this fic. I took a brief hiatas from fanfic and I'm somewhat glad that I did since I can come back now and read stories in their full entirity instead of waiting with anxiety for the next update.
I have to say that this story is one of the rare gems you find here on . It is written with something that 99% of other fics do not have, intelligence. You clearly have done your research and have a fantastic grasp on the characters. You've done such an excellent job on the Saitoh/Soujiro relationship that its astounding. The Okita connection, to Soujiro's search for himself, to Saitoh's own soul searching, it just all works so well.
I applaud you on a remarkably well written fiction that should set a standard for other writers. In fact, I think I'm going to try to do my own RK fic now!