Reviews for Harry Tano
Difdi chapter 54 . 6/27/2017
You have an error in this chapter - Interpol has no law enforcement officers in it. It's a purely voluntary organization that exists to share and distribute information on criminals between countries. It's like an international Better Business Bureau for police. It has no law enforcement authority whatsoever, and its members cannot make arrests or hold people as prisoners.
Difdi chapter 39 . 6/26/2017
As I noted in a previous review, saying "Avada Kedavra" instead of "Killing Curse" is like drawing a gun and firing a shot into the ceiling instead of saying "bullet." Every spell has a proper name, and saying the incantation is deeply unsafe, both because of the risk of actually firing off the spell if your wand is in your hand, and because people won't stop to wonder if you really mean "Killing Curse," when you say "Avada Kedavra" in the presence of magocals, they will be diving for cover and returning fire at you, in exactly the same way muggle soldiers will be if you fire a gun in their general direction instead of saying "bullet."

Reducto, Bombarda and Lumos are the same - they are incantations, not the name of the spell. The names of those spells are Reductor Hex, Blasting Curse and Lighting Charm, respectively.
Difdi chapter 36 . 6/26/2017
You have a physics error - the recoil from a gun comes from the acceleration of the projectile. The recoil has nothing to do with how the bullet is propelled, and eliminating the explosive propellant will have zero effect on how much recoil there is. A repulsor gun has exactly the same recoil as a conventional gun firing the same weight of projectile.
Difdi chapter 33 . 6/26/2017
You have a bizarre set of typos throughout the story, exemplified by the occurrence of it in this chapter.

Spells have both names and incantations. Saying the incantation is exactly like pulling the trigger of a gun. Saying the incantation when discussing the spell is like pulling out a gun and shooting a bullet into the ceiling instead of saying the word "bang." At the same time, saying the name of a spell, even with a wand in hand, does not cast it, because the name is not the incantation - doing so is exactly like drawing a gun, aiming it at someone, and then saying the word "bang" instead of pulling the trigger when you intend to shoot them.

But you have done both all throughout the story. In this chapter, you have Lucius Malfoy saying the name of the Fiendfyre spell instead of casting it, and in other chapters you have people saying crucio instead of naming the Cruciatus Curse. It's silly, and makes no sense. In the Wizarding world, if you were to say "Avada Kedavra" out loud, people would be blasting you with spell-fire before you finished the third syllable, because that is how you shoot someone dead - if you mean to say the name of the spell, you would say "Killing Curse" instead.
Difdi chapter 26 . 6/26/2017
Gripsack & Twist? Owwww...
Difdi chapter 24 . 6/26/2017
You have anoter typo in this chaoter, in addition to the recurring ones I noted in an earlier review. Professor Sprout's given name is Pomona, not Pomala.
Difdi chapter 21 . 6/26/2017
You have a couple of recurring typos.

First, there is no letter 'a' in the word dormitory.

Second, the Patil twin in Ravenclaw is named Padma, not Padme. Padme is Anakin's wife, not a Hogwarts student.
Difdi chapter 10 . 6/26/2017
Getting Ahsoka a wand will be a problem since she is not human, and it is illegal in Wizarding Britain for nonhumans to even touch a wand. This is why goblins don't use wands - not because they can't, but because the wizards are perfectly willing to declare war to enforce their laws.

Flitwick can have one because he is half human. Fleur can have one because she is three quarters human. But Ahsoka is Togruta, which is not human at all.
Bronze chapter 33 . 6/18/2017
Flying butter has nothing to do with the plot! Nice spanner you got there. Does a real good job of messing up the gears real nice like. ;-) I like you twist on getting the stone and it makes Bumbleohsomore look like the old fool he is! He has always thought that only Harry can kill Vulturesnot or at least he's let everybody else think he did. But as I've stated before, I think the prophecy a fraud and just an excuse for Bumbleohsomore to destroy a child's life. Perhaps the Goblins should audit all Potter accounts to check for illegal withdrawals since 81.
Guest chapter 32 . 6/18/2017
I'll see you LEMON and raise you five LIMES! ;-) Frankly, I don't care if you have lemons in this or not. It's good without them. I think Lucy isn't going to be able to get another child. I think there's another part of the declining Pure-Blood birthrate. I think that due to the drastic inbreeding they've done for generation they now have a fertility problem as well. Not that I'd want more Bad Faiths running around. They've already proved just how piss poor of a family they are. Though their son, Dragon of Bad Faith, IS in Slytherin but has no cunning nor any other supposed traits of that house. And they think their next child will be any better?! Not after they're done with Hogwarts it won't! They're too stupid to realize that they're way will only lead to weaker witches and wizards through weaker standards.
Bronze chapter 31 . 6/18/2017
"Well, on a whole, I think that could have gone better. " Talk about your massive understatements! If Madam Bones is the head of the DMLE, maybe Harry could talk Sirius into dropping Fudgepacker Supreme and getting her elected Minister of/for Magic. Fudgepacker Supreme is about as good as a smashed clock. He's totally stupid and most likely corrupt. He can't think for himself and surrounds himself with ass kissers. He'd dither as the Ministry burned down around his ears.
Bronze chapter 25 . 6/17/2017
The answer to the Headmistress question is that she had too much faith in a self-centered old fool.
Guest chapter 24 . 6/17/2017
Bumbleohomore IS still making mistakes and worse yet, he knows it! Having the Elder Wand in his hands has allowed him to believe he knows all and can not be wrong in anyway or thing he does. I personally wouldn't be surprised if he used the wands power to make Flamel give him that stupid stone before erasing Flamel's memory of it. Bumbleohsomore has been in a position of authority for so long that people can't believe he would purposefully endanger a child's life. They've already forgotten and very likely forgiven his error in placing Harry with his magic hating relative and looking the other way while he plays his games at the school. How are they going to react if or when a student is killed because of his desire to control the life of Harry James Potter-Tano. Should Ahsoka remove Harry from that supposed school because it is unsafe for her son to attend due to the meddling of an old goat molesting sheep shagging senile fool, said fool could very we find himself hanging around several meters off the ground. Of course in my opinion Harry should've left England for schooling in a country where Bumbeohsomore had no influence on/in the school systems. For Bumbly is no longer of the light. He has become just another Dork Lard posing as the leader of the Light.
Bronze chapter 23 . 6/14/2017
It become painfully obvious that regardless of Bumbleohsomore no-longer being Headmaster, he still rules over the school and staff. If Flamel could keep his stone safe for hundreds of year and many other Dork Lards that've come before Vulturetwit, why does it suddenly need to be kept in aa school full of children for nine to ten months aa year? And why during this rise of Vulturetwit? Why wasn't it important enough during its' first rise? The answer is quite simple. Harry Potter wasn't attending and Bumbleohsomore didn't need it a bait to draw in a psyco killer. You'll notice that none of the school staff even thought to question why such a dangerous object needed to be hidden in a SCHOOL! A SCHOOL!
Bronze chapter 23 . 6/8/2017
Geee, what could possibly go wrong with letting the possessed spirit of the most evil wizard in modern history into a school? Just because he killed on a whim is no reason not to allow him to be around the children of the magical families of Britain. What the hell are they going to tell the family(ies)of any student(s) he kills? Sorry, we didn't think about that or it seemed like a good idea at the time? I'd like to think that the Headmistress had more common sense then to use her school to prove that a madman wasn't still around even though he no-longer had a body. But she's still a whole hearted member of the Bumbleohsomore club of belief that he can do no wrong! Stupid fools! He's already admitted to screwing up by placing Harry with the Dursley's! So just let him cook up another stupid scheme to endanger Harry and this time, just for good measure, let's include all the students of Hogwash! At this rate, he'll do more with his moronic schemes to completely wipe out the magical population of Britain.
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