Reviews for The Pane in My Heart
tdish chapter 3 . 18h
This is so sad. I wanna give poor Ulquiorra a great big hug. Stupid Orihime. Never have liked her much, unless she is with Ulquiorra. He makes her interesting.
Astra Leonis chapter 19 . 8/15
It’s not so hard to predict the plot, given I have read a similiar story once from different fandom, but it’s not stop me to enjoy yours. There’s the time I thought of the end, that Grimmjow would lost himself to the darkness in his heart, to be swallowed by his hatred and his desire to avenge, and it’s him who would turn out to be the villain in the end. Or finally Ulquiorra would succumb to his vampire nature, become heartless and it’s Orihime who would make him remember and to take him come back to home.
I think the hunters and the vampires have one thing in common. They could be careless of everybody or everything except their own race. The vampires could mocked Grimmjow as an ungrateful brat who slaughtered his own mother after she save his live by killed her husband. They acted like the victim itself when one by one be killed by the hunters, blamed it’s Orihime who bring it to them. But the fact is it’s them who was the first to start the war. They treatment toward humans. And of course it’s also the vampires who create Grimmjow as the vampire slayer in the first place.
I find that I prefer Ulquiorra in Orihime’s imaginary world than Ulquiorra in real world. His character as Cain is more complicated and it’s make him more intriguing. How he struggle with the darkness that plague inside his heart, how he fight the battle against his own self while racing with the ticking time. To keep the love he have for Orihime, the sole purpose of his ariving, and to keep the humanity in him still intact. Become adapt to the strange world. Be responsible of the vampires he lead. And damn if the star-crossed lover thing didn’t drummed my heart beat! The Ulquiorra in the real world is just so plain in comparison to the Cain-Ulquiorra. Yes, it’s weird to talk about him as two different person. Hhh, he’s such a wonderful husband.
4thkage chapter 19 . 6/18
Yeahhh...happy ending...
luv it...of coz i luv this...

the stroy plot really smooth...i dun think there's any error in grammar or writing...
(maybe bcoz i'm into the story...i dun care bout it)

i luv it...how you separate the scene...
it seems like...i read a movie...

you are really good writer...
this story...will remain in my head..

btw...i luv ur profile pix...
4thkage chapter 16 . 6/18
oh my god...
i tried really hard to restrain myself from crying...
i did...
but...still my heart felt so painful...
so much misery in this chapter...

*huwaaaaaaaaaaaa
4thkage chapter 8 . 6/18
never expected that...
this is awesome!

*i get really excited...and i...am sorry coz write a comment to you for every chapters...

but this is super AWESOME!
4thkage chapter 7 . 6/18
wuhuuu...
this story become more and more interesting...

Ulquiorra will be like him in Hueco Mundo (cold guy)
4thkage chapter 1 . 6/17
wow...
that's all i can say...
i come across this story lots of times...
but dun hv the interest to read it...

i dunno why i start it now...
and can't imagine that...the story plot...is one of my favorite...
i luv UlquiHimeGrimm
and...i luv dark creatures...hehe
Tacitamura chapter 19 . 5/18
Your story was really breathtakingly beautiful ! The fact that you have perfectly made this two paralleled world as a mirror of Orihime's feelings is awesome.
Your story has love, hatred, sadness (Jess's death is a throbbing wound and also the others) and many details so vivid ! I really liked the depictions of Grimmjow and Ulquiorra.
Nice work !
29th.spirit chapter 6 . 4/20
That shower&sex part was amazing! If this were a scene in a movie, it would probably be an intense collage focused on 'touch': There is Ulquiorra in the shower soaping his body, craving her touch. Her touch in his memories, tender and loving and complete. There are Orihime and Grimmjow in the shower, fucking passionately. No tenderness there, just raw instinct. Dirty adultery contrasting the act of cleansing sharply. The sound of water, slamming. Hyper-aware hands. On his body, rinsing the soap off. Her hands, a caress. Her nails digging in his forearm. His hands grabbing her violently. A droplet of water from ink black hair, crashing on tiles besides two pairs of feet. Moans, rasping breaths, picking up speed. The rushing of water, oppressive in his ears, drowning out sweet words long lost. "F uck!" Gasps, her shaking hand against the wall. His fist against the wall. Frustration. He turns the water off. The sudden silence. Realization. Guilt. Emptiness.

I've read your whole story in one go (even though I really REALLY need to be studying right now). While I enjoyed all of it till the end, I couldn't help thinking that the fantastical elements stole a bit of the mystery you have built in the first 6 chapters. I'm not complaining - It was great till the end! The first 6 chapters were just... special. Those parallel yet interwoven storylines had a movie-like feeling to them. Probably because I only know that kind of story-telling from movies, where it is a lot easier to interweave images in rapid progression than it is in written text, where you need to first establish an image before you can use it. What you are doing in the first six chapters is extremely interesting. I would love to read more of this kind.
29th.spirit chapter 4 . 4/19
This is very different and very smart. You expertly lead the two parallel storylines, sometimes converging to the point they almost touch (the blue kitty), then again growing more distant. There are so many layers of wishful thinking, longing, denial and escapism, reality and delusion. I can only guess how difficult it must be to balance all of that stuff. You're doing an amazing job so far.

This definitely stands out and I'm glad you were willing to take the risk of trying something unconventional! Thanks for sharing!
I can not think of a pen name chapter 3 . 10/11/2014
Gosh this is horrible it hurts so much! I love the story. It's well written and deep and gosh it hurts so much. It's emotional and I love how you're slowly dropping in the backstory and gosh it hurts. I'm crying. Very good. Very good.
shandi.rivera chapter 19 . 8/22/2014
Wow. Unbelievable. I was in love with this from the moment I started reading it. You my friend a fucking genius. Excuse my language...I love your writing style and normally I'm pretty picky about what I read.
blablabhu chapter 19 . 8/22/2014
Its going to be a long review but a short one wont do justice to this story.

I have to say I felt so emotionally pulled into this story. As someone who knows how hard trauma can be I still couldnt imagine Orihimes trauma, yet I could empathize. Even so, in few of the chapters I found myself hating her for her weakness, when she had someone who was willing to give up everything for her sake.

I laughed, I cried, mostly I asked myself: is it ok to dislike a woman who runs away from her pain? When I can imagine any of us doing that. And then I felt relieved in tha fact that even so, there are those who would pull us out of that dark place.

In short your story was beautifully written and very thought provoking. I loved the ending. I hated Orihime for about hald of the story. I wanted to throttle her; to make her just get on with it. Yet in the last two chapters I felt my heart warm up. I think this indicates just how human a story you have written with these imaginary characters.

You mentioned that you had difficulty going through this process; and I truly commend you for your effort. I am glad you continued and finished it. I laughed, cried, got angry and also someone felt like I had grown a bit with the story. It helped me understand my own reactions to trauma to certain extent. So I definitely want to thank you for writing it. Great job and I wish you success in your other writing endeavours.
Yakame Seika of the Wind chapter 19 . 8/7/2014
It has been a while since I read this story and I loved it till the end. It is such an interesting thing to think about...to put one self in that position...I enjoyed the read.
Thank you
yeonji chapter 19 . 6/24/2014
Awesome!
I have been looking for this kind of story for a long time, and I have to say I'm very very satisfied after reading the ending.
Good job, your stories never dissapoint me! 3
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