Reviews for Harry Hibiki and the Philosopher's Stone |
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![]() ![]() ![]() and the world is doom, with the partnership of goblin leader and Nabiki... |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really like this story and would like to see an update in the future when you get back to writing |
![]() ![]() ![]() Update soon. |
![]() ![]() Please continue |
![]() ![]() I thought you were going to reveal that Turtle is actually their Mother & Pineapple Brain faked her death |
![]() ![]() ![]() Writing Ryoga as speaking in a mix of Japanese and English, using Japanese like 'Kuso' and 'Kami-sama' in the text, and then also including text where Ryoga speaks in Japanese but writing it in story as English text, proves this story has absolutely no regard for the reader or in making the writing interesting. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I get Akane is aquired taste as it were but I would not bash the character but either make them tolerable/likable or just Canon personality with the normal interactions she has with the characters to not offend the fans of that character like Sasuke and Sakura from Naruto being a example. Akane really doesn't have much of impact on the story aside from being a support protagonist and as long as that's the case and you don't change that your fine. Ps dislike would be the better term than hate because hate sound obsessive especially on a fictional character if you don't get what I mean look at the rants on the author foxjims profile his hate for certain naruto characters especially Sasuke Uchiha is borderline unhealthy and obsessive to the point (implied) that anyone who likes the character is disgusting (basically the equivalent of person who hates lgbtqa people). |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ok first question things first what are you planing in regards of pairings? 'cause i know you' re following the books but I would really, really appreciate if you avoided Hinny and, if possible Romione as they are my NOTPS. Second of all, you should really get a beta(not me since English is not my first language). I was able to spot several small mistakes in your fict such as : only mentioning the troll's head when the fact that it was a male had already been established despite the fact that the phrase "her head" was missing when you described it. 2."leave my friends along" Harry yelled at the troll. Along? Ya mean the troll should leave with Romione? 'cause that's not a good idea. It might kill them Minerva lectured the kids after they wrestled the troll, the word "help" was in the present instead of the past like it should have been. ... Amongst others. Luckly your mistakes aren't as numerous or as frequent as they could have been but a more attentive reader like myself will spot them easily so... Yeah you should definitely look for a beta. |
![]() ![]() ![]() how did a water magnet curse NOT activate in the middle of a lake? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Happy for the update! I'm stuck at home with covid19 and feel like I was hit by a truck! I am thrilled to have something to read that is one of my favorite stories! I really love the way you write this crossover and truly wish there were more of this type! Stay safe! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Cute story. It’s nice to see a “hero/villain” raises Harry story without the extreme abuse it usually takes to get him involved with the new parents. Please keep up the good work. |
![]() ![]() ![]() You know tonks can be ryoga's second wife I mean he is a wolf like remus only not old enough to be her father. |
![]() ![]() This is really good thanks for writing the story |
![]() ![]() ![]() this was a very fun update and i look forward to more! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I am surprised no one pointed out for Voldemort's bullshit that if he truly believed in pureblood supremacy why did he not capture the females of those that stood in his way as breeding stock instead of killing them. And this was just a thought why not during the holidays of fifth year when the Bellatrix breaks out she tries to kill harry at jusynkyo where she is deaged by a cursed spring that affects her mind making her innocent again in both forms an is paired with tatawani kumo. |