|Reviews for The Archaeologist's Assistant|
| Angelhaggis chapter 22 . 6/9/2013
Wow so Pyrrah is a medjai! I absolutely love this twist. Can't wait for more :)
| DCLS chapter 20 . 6/7/2013
Honestly, if I was Perry I would have quit working for Jonathan a long time ago! Not listening to her in the first place and treating her a child to boot! Not to mention sending her out on some 'urgent errand' so he could shag his ex, then get upset and possessive at just the thought of Perry going with some else! He makes me want to deck him, the bloody wanker!
All and all, this a smashing story and I'm hoping for a Ardeth/OC ending!
| Larissa-Hunter chapter 20 . 6/5/2013
...Please continue this soon. I have enjoyed reading it so far and I love any fic where Ardeth is a focus character.
| Lyrical Ballads chapter 20 . 6/4/2013
This review is a little late, but I've been dying to read this chapter ever since you posted it. And what a great chapter this is! I think the movie dialogue was handled better in this chapter than in your previous chapters. Like, I didn't feel bogged down by movie lines this time and didn't skip over any of them, so good job on that!
There are so many great character interactions here. Even though we only get a little bit of Daniels, you handled him perfectly and I like the fact that Perry goes out of her way to speak to him. It's such a shame that the Americans get killed off, because they have so much potential to be interesting characters! But anyway, I'm super impressed with your ability to pull off Daniels. This bit right here is just perfect:
["How are you feeling?" she asked him.
Daniels' frown deepened, but he didn't look at her. A gruff clearing of his throat was his initial response.]
That's such a Daniels way to respond to something like that. It's such a guy thing, too, actually, and I love it. Why did you have to get killed off, Daniels? WHY?
My favorite part of this chapter, though, is Jonathan and Perry's conversation, because Jonathan is seriously the best in this story. I can't get over how well you write his lines. And I love the way they work together, with Jonathan constantly exasperating Perry and Perry trying to keep him in line all the time, and all their scenes together are just wonderful. Plus Jonathan had really great lines this chapter, like this one:
["No!" he stressed. "With me. With everything. I've gone and royally booted the hornet's nest up the arse."]
Holy crap, that has got to be one of the most fantastic expressions I have ever read. EVER.
I'm also wildly in love with this:
[By the time he had finished speaking, they were both sat on wooden crates, exhausted by the mere complication of Jonathan's thought process being put into words.]
You are seriously brilliant when it comes to writing Jonathan. BRILLIANT. I am loving this story so much!
| oXxgeorgiaxXo chapter 20 . 6/3/2013
Can't wait for the next chapter. Xxxx.
| Ravenclaw Slytherin chapter 20 . 6/3/2013
I love your story! Update soon!
| Angelhaggis chapter 20 . 6/3/2013
| princesskitty68 chapter 20 . 6/2/2013
I'm begging you! Don't put Johnathan and Perry together! Ardeth/Perry! Now that that is out of the way I love how this is like the movie yet it's your own story.
| Brunette chapter 20 . 6/2/2013
So, total aside to begin with - damned if I didn't call Allen Chamberlain "Terrence" multiple times in the latest Amour Fou chapter, and I DIDN'T EVEN KNOW until I was reading this and read Perry talk about Terrence Bey. I was instantly all, "oh shit," stopped reading, and went and fixed it. 'Cause otherwise I wouldn't have focused on what I was reading and all. So...thanks, indirectly, for that.
ANYWAY, though, as to your story - I thought this was a terrific chapter, movie dialogue aside (and included? I don't know. Bottom line: I didn't really mind it being there). I loved the beginning. And maybe I'm daft, but it didn't really occur to me that there wasn't necessarily time for all of that to happen within the movie's time frame. The conversation between Jonathan and Perry was fantastic. I just love their interactions, and I think the kiss was a nice bone to throw at the Jon/Perry crowd (there's nothing like satisfied sexual tension!). It was a good moment for the characters, and I like that it kind of brings a finality to their relationship as it is. Like Jonathan said, everything's about to change. And how!
No, seriously...how? 'Cause I want to know! I mean, I know the rest of the movie, but I'm so interested to see where it leaves Jonathan and Perry, and Perry and Ardeth, and everyone and everyone else. It's all so exciting!
Much of the rest of the chapter is movie dialogue, but it worked and I thought you handled it well.
Oh! The bit between Daniels and Perry was a nice moment, too. Kittiko Blues has a one shot about him, right after he's lost his friends, and I cannot remember what it's called...anyway, that moment between him and Perry reminded me of that story, and you should read it sometime.
(Ohhh, and CONFESSION, because I'm straight up the worst English degree-er ever, but I seriously spent the entire time since Marina entered the story being like, "Quartermain...Quartermain...What is that from? That's from something, I know it is..." And so I've kind of been expecting there to be a connection at some point, and then BAM, Allan Quartermain reference. And to further just how oblivious to great literature I am, I was like, "Sean Connery. LXG." Because even though I know the whole "King Solomon's Mines" thing, I've never read the book. Somewhere, my lit professor is feeling intense pain, and has no idea why. Seriously, though, I thought it was a nice addition.)
I am all over the place with this review, because I just remembered the whole conversation about Perry's memory. Like, what? What's going on there?! I can't wait to find out! I think it's interesting that she assumed everyone else remembers things the way she does. I thought it was a pretty believable explanation, actually; I bought it, anyway, and I WANT TO KNOW. What is the not-past-life-mystery?! (...yeah, I looked through previous reviews to remember what I was calling that...)
And finally, I just have to be that guy about this, because...I just have to. Imhotep is actually speaking Hebrew, and that's what Beni's translating. Beni speaks Hebrew because he used to pose as a rabbi and steal from synagogues, according to the script, and that's also the language Imhotep discovers he speaks. There's really no way/reason he would know ancient Egyptian. (Further nerdy crap about this scene: my husband is big into linguistics, and he's always all SCOFF about Evelyn correcting Beni's Hebrew translation because both "forever" and "for all eternity" are perfectly acceptable translations of meaning; it's not like someone must - or even CAN - translate word-for-word to communicate meaning with integrity. These are the things we talk about.)
So, yes, this was a lot of rambling and probably not nearly enough of I LOVE THIS, I CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE. But hopefully you get that that's how I feel! I can't wait for the next chapter!
| Kitty Daniels chapter 20 . 6/2/2013
Aww, Perry's sympathy for Daniels was just wonderful; loved how you put some insight into his character and his situation. :) But holy cow, loved how you did the chase scene too!
Yeah I can't say this enough: I love Perry. Love your writing. Love it all!
| Brunette chapter 19 . 5/30/2013
Okay, so I read this earlier today, but was too busy to leave a review, so hopefully this will do justice to how much I enjoyed this chapter, because YES.
I was so surprised to see Jonathan and Beni have an interaction this chapter. I was really expecting to see Perry (and I'm missing her, by the way, even though I'm like eight kinds of in love with the Marina subplot). But yes, Jonathan and Beni will do nicely (also, the mere act of trying to type "Jonathan and" has resulted in "Jonanthand" for me like...twice already. And it's just going to happen one of these times and I won't even realize. Jonathand Beni. It sounds like a really contrived first/last name).
Like, true facts, there are few things I love more then (fictional) men squabbling over a woman. The whole competitive and possessive aspects are just marvelous, and I love that they're playing out between Beni and Jonathan, who are...well...not the most testosterone-y Mummy characters. Like Lyrical Ballads mentioned in her review, they're pretty even-keel on the whole physical level, which makes their interaction unique from Beni and Rick interacting, when Rick obviously always has the upper hand. So it's fun to see this whole altercation take place, because it leaves more opportunity for an actual conversation, instead of...you know...Rick just beating Beni with the nearest blunt force object.
I think you captured Beni's mannerisms really well, and I just love everything about Jonathan's reactions. Isn't he just a doll? He's a doll. PERRY, WHY DON'T YOU SEE IT?! But then, that would ruin Jonathan/Marina, which I'm totally all for. Because as much as I love Beni...he kind of sucks as a human being, and Marina should maybe start thinking about exclusively having sex with someone who isn't a selfish douchebag. These are just my thoughts.
So, yes, I just loved everything about this. I love the innuendo of "knowing Marina inside and out" (because that's great. Innuendoes are great. I don't even care if that makes me secretly forever 12). I love Jonathan clocking Beni. I love Beni using Imhotep as this constant shield against everything (because he does!). And I'm kind of intrigued by the last line, which might be me reading too much into it, buuuuut...would Jonathan tell Perry, then? Are they those kind of friends? I kind of feel like this whole Marina thing has to eventually tie a leeettle more into the Perry plot, but I suppose it doesn't necessarily. I'll leave that to you. I'm satisfied with everything. Subplot or less of one, it's all excellent.
But seriously, where is Perry? What have you done with her? And what about the not reincarnation plot? What about that or whatever it is I named it earlier?!
As always, great. I can't wait for more!
| Lyrical Ballads chapter 19 . 5/30/2013
That pretty much sums up how I feel about this chapter. I wanted Jonathan and Beni to have a scene so badly, but I never expected it to happen so soon, if it happened at all, and I love that it's happening now. I also like that we're getting a Jonathan chapter right after a Marina chapter, because I absolutely adore this twisted love triangle (well not really "love" in Beni's case, but I can't think of a better phrase). It is just beyond spectacular.
Also, I love how your story has become something separate from the movie that stands on its own, rather than being a simple rendition of the movie with an extra character or two thrown in. I feel like it's really living up to its potential these last few chapters and I'm thrilled to see what new additions you add to the plot!
But let me talk about Jonathan and Beni. I LOVE scenes with Jonathan and Beni in them, and I'm so excited every time I get a chance to read scenes like these, because I always struggle to write those two characters together. I don't know why, but I always have a hard time imagining what on earth they would say to each other. So I really love it when Beni and Jonathan interact in someone else's story and I think you pulled it off well. They're such an interesting set of characters to put in a situation like this, since they've got certain similarities and neither one of them has got a major advantage over the other. Jonathan isn't anything like Rick, for instance. Rick can easily throw Beni around and intimidate him, but Jonathan and Beni seem like they're pretty evenly matched. Of course, Jonathan has a slight edge over Beni because he's in love with Marina, and he's more motivated to come out on top in a fight, while Beni is simply using Marina and naturally he'd rather run than fight for her.
Really, though, this whole situation is fantastic. Beni's incredibly smug over his involvement with Marina, but I'm assuming that's only because he doesn't know the whole story, and I wonder if he'll find out just how deep Marina's past with Jonathan runs. Will Marina end up telling Beni? What is she up to, anyway? I could happily read chapters and chapters of this one storyline because I love it SO much.
I do miss Perry, though! Where on earth is Perry and what is she doing? I can't wait for more of this!
| ZabuzasGirl chapter 19 . 5/30/2013
Update immediately, please!
| shalmarrose chapter 18 . 5/29/2013
cant wait for the next story :)
| princesskitty68 chapter 18 . 5/24/2013
I read the chapter as soon as you published it but forgot to review! Beni needed someone to love him and I love that it's jonathan's ex/current? lover!
I agree with other reviewers that a scene between Beni and Jonathan would be wonderful. Please update soon! You have me hooked and I'm dying to know what sort of plot twist you'll generate. Wow I wrote a lot this time!