|Reviews for On Golden Wings|
| hevenlydemonknight chapter 1 . 8/19
| Guest chapter 20 . 5/20
Awesome story, i how you keep writing it :)
| Ciel Moony chapter 20 . 3/20
| Nysk chapter 20 . 2/6
Horrible place to leave off!
Wish there was more
| Cilo chapter 7 . 12/28/2015
Aren't you underpowering Orihime drastically? She can reject reality so long as her will is greater than whatever she is affecting. Ichiya, without norito, bound to an ashikabi who doesn't care about her, can somehow crack Orihime's shield? Post-war Orihime? It clearly isn't just physical things she can reject, she can literally reject the kinetic force behind a punch.
And her attacks are just as stupidly overpowered. It's basically a bullet. The only way Ichiya is dodging that is if she miraculously knows shunpo or something similar. Aizen was right when he said she had the most broken power in the world. The only thing that kept her weaker than captains was their speed and sekirei most definitely are not that fast. It's a nice plot mechanic to make Orihime a sekirei, but also completely ridiculous if you think about the scope of her ability. Single digit element users can use wind, fire, ice, water, etc. but the girl who can reject reality is number 90?
And what kept Urahara or Matsu from hacking MBI to "disable" the trigger that automatically deactivates sekirei? Even assuming Minaka can somehow lie to Ichigo post-hogokyou, they could find out while Ichigo left to search for Orihime. For that matter, why doesn't he leave now that he found her to torture the truth out of Minaka?
He could even do something absurd like take him to Los Noches so he wound't "kill" him until they settled things.
Or barring that, why doesn't Ichigo just stick around and dimension-warp all newly released sekirei to Karakura? He can obviously sense their spirits so it's not like he can't find them.
Or maybe just kill Higa, Mikogami, and the top adjusters to completely wreck the plan outright? You already showed that he doesn't hesitate to kill anymore and Ukitake gave tacit permission to have a few deaths so why not?
Or hell, why not just remove the MBI satellite? Urahara and Matsu can hack it. Ichigo can literally cut it in half.
Granted he doesn't want to involve Soul Society, what's keeping him from bringing in Vizoreds? Or Uryu and Sado? Or even some Hollow to extract the sekirei before Soul Society can do anything about it?
Don't get me wrong, it's a decent story to read, but you now have a protagonist who is basically a god with limitless possibilities, and who somehow agrees to play by Minaka's rules like an idiot. While it's good to see a Sekirei/Bleach crossover, the premise of this whole thing seems unbelievably contrived and forced.
| slydino chapter 20 . 11/11/2015
Wonderful story. Great plot. I love what you did with the romance and character development well except for Minato and his sekirei, they were kinda back-shelved and kinda have no point in the plot anymore. Anyway great job and keep up the good work. Can't wait for the next chapter.
| yiggdrasill chapter 18 . 10/28/2015
good to see some elaboration on the events that changed ichigo into who he is in this story. also good to see someone use the little bit of info on the onmitsukido being outside the gotei 13 and why that might be
| yiggdrasill chapter 16 . 10/28/2015
thats some heavy feels. so minaka and higa realize just how bad their situation is...interesting
| yiggdrasill chapter 15 . 10/28/2015
the man was just starting to realize he beeded to untangle himself from higa's web if schemes and ichigo kills him, thats sad, not entirely undeserved, but sad. im not an enormous fan of lemon but you did real well with this one, most only tell one persons perspective and are highly unromantic, this wasnt
| Greatazuredragon chapter 12 . 10/26/2015
Very nice twist, good work
| Greatazuredragon chapter 8 . 10/26/2015
Hehe the joking about Ichigo sexuality was funny, especially considering every single Bleach fan probably wondered about that at some point of the series... ;p
| Greatazuredragon chapter 7 . 10/26/2015
Ishin's anticts are always amusing to see ;p
...Yeah after invading the military headquarters of an supernatural organization as a teenager Ichigo really won't take Minaka as a threat...
| Greatazuredragon chapter 5 . 10/26/2015
Nice story so far, good work.
| yiggdrasill chapter 13 . 10/24/2015
they kidnapped karin...ichigo kicked in the gates of hell for his little sisters...why does no one listen to the warnings? they cant ALL be that stupid
| yiggdrasill chapter 2 . 10/22/2015
you make ichigo an unstoppable trancendant god...and then make him use all the things he normally doesnt rely on because hes just to damn powerful with the stuff he does...BRILLIANT, I LOVE IT. its so in character and lets you develop ichigo in ways that are normally ignored