|Reviews for On Golden Wings|
| AlexCephon chapter 20 . 12/31/2016
I actually liked this story, but I'm dissapointed you never really got to finishing this fic.
| Pigpen chapter 1 . 11/25/2016
Rongis, your lovely use of pathetic shit is what all white trash hillbilly sister loving, and not just emotionally either, should aspire to be when the finally grow up and reach the 8th grade. One day I hope you can grace the cyberspace of FanFiction with such articulate stories that will amaze and confound your readers with its elegance and satire; not. In other words butt-lover, get over yourself and your immense need to attack people from behind an anonymous screen-name because you suck at something the rest of us are proficient at, that is proper usage of the English language to start off with. Also when you review pig shit, one normally leaves an accurate reason of their dislike for the story, its called an opinion as well, meaning yours doesn't mean pig shit in the grand scheme of things you loser asshole. Have a nice day pig fucker, oh by the way the story needs to continue as is, real fans don't give a fuck about a guy whose name sounds like an oral sex act.
| bob115 chapter 20 . 11/6/2016
Well that's a shitty cliffhanger. Especially since this is dead, but oh well.
Interesting concept with Orihime being a sekirei. Some spots were dragged and were skimmed, but all around not too bad.
| Rongis chapter 8 . 10/20/2016
It is a good thing you gave up on this shit it seems you still can redeem yourself please delete this shit and it's every existing copy.
| Rongis chapter 4 . 10/20/2016
You pathetic retarded piece if pig shit.
| Rongis chapter 2 . 10/20/2016
You pathetic piece of shit.
| Rongis chapter 1 . 10/20/2016
| rob chapter 20 . 9/28/2016
why did u stop writing i was looking forward to how it ended
| na chapter 1 . 9/22/2016
| na chapter 20 . 9/22/2016
hi man I liked your story hope you white more good luck
| hevenlydemonknight chapter 1 . 8/19/2016
| Guest chapter 20 . 5/20/2016
Awesome story, i how you keep writing it :)
| Ciel Moony chapter 20 . 3/20/2016
| Nysk chapter 20 . 2/6/2016
Horrible place to leave off!
Wish there was more
| Cilo chapter 7 . 12/28/2015
Aren't you underpowering Orihime drastically? She can reject reality so long as her will is greater than whatever she is affecting. Ichiya, without norito, bound to an ashikabi who doesn't care about her, can somehow crack Orihime's shield? Post-war Orihime? It clearly isn't just physical things she can reject, she can literally reject the kinetic force behind a punch.
And her attacks are just as stupidly overpowered. It's basically a bullet. The only way Ichiya is dodging that is if she miraculously knows shunpo or something similar. Aizen was right when he said she had the most broken power in the world. The only thing that kept her weaker than captains was their speed and sekirei most definitely are not that fast. It's a nice plot mechanic to make Orihime a sekirei, but also completely ridiculous if you think about the scope of her ability. Single digit element users can use wind, fire, ice, water, etc. but the girl who can reject reality is number 90?
And what kept Urahara or Matsu from hacking MBI to "disable" the trigger that automatically deactivates sekirei? Even assuming Minaka can somehow lie to Ichigo post-hogokyou, they could find out while Ichigo left to search for Orihime. For that matter, why doesn't he leave now that he found her to torture the truth out of Minaka?
He could even do something absurd like take him to Los Noches so he wound't "kill" him until they settled things.
Or barring that, why doesn't Ichigo just stick around and dimension-warp all newly released sekirei to Karakura? He can obviously sense their spirits so it's not like he can't find them.
Or maybe just kill Higa, Mikogami, and the top adjusters to completely wreck the plan outright? You already showed that he doesn't hesitate to kill anymore and Ukitake gave tacit permission to have a few deaths so why not?
Or hell, why not just remove the MBI satellite? Urahara and Matsu can hack it. Ichigo can literally cut it in half.
Granted he doesn't want to involve Soul Society, what's keeping him from bringing in Vizoreds? Or Uryu and Sado? Or even some Hollow to extract the sekirei before Soul Society can do anything about it?
Don't get me wrong, it's a decent story to read, but you now have a protagonist who is basically a god with limitless possibilities, and who somehow agrees to play by Minaka's rules like an idiot. While it's good to see a Sekirei/Bleach crossover, the premise of this whole thing seems unbelievably contrived and forced.