Reviews for Two Men, One Box
Fantita chapter 1 . 12/26/2015
Wonderfully written! All the tension...THE TENSION! It had me on the edge of the seat, seriously!
I had a great time reading it, I thought you nailed the characters so well! Kudos!
10051 chapter 1 . 5/12/2015
Absolutely amazing, and very well written. I lost count of the number of times I burst out laughing XD (I was actually having lunch at my desk while reading this and I nearly tipped my plate over with how hard I was laughing at the scene when Gin runs off to pee oTL) Gintoki and Hijikata were exactly how they are in the anime, in my opinion. I started watching it not too long ago and I haven't made it that far into the series, but I fell in love with it and those two in particular. Really glad to have found this fic, and I can't wait to read your other stories :) I just can't get enough of these two!
Guest chapter 1 . 5/16/2014
this...this was my first ginhiji fic, i read it and you opened a world. I love you 3
Krolshi chapter 1 . 1/20/2014
Hah , I wouldn 't mind dying in Gin-san 's arms ;D
But damn that was very detailed & realy well written ! Esp with Hiji 's thought process / monologues , though there were a few repeated things , I like it still ;) You write swell humorous fics Gin & Hiji 's characters are so funny Aww I love them Cx Thanks for writing , you did a great job !
Guest chapter 1 . 11/23/2013
Loved it!
Kotori Miu chapter 1 . 7/1/2013
That was so beautiful! XD
The only criticism i have for you is to put more detail in describing there body positions. When you described the moment when Hijikata brought Gin-chan over and he put his head on his chest, i couldn't gather the whole picture. i was trying to figure it out how they were positioned, were there legs intertwined together, crisscross, or were they on top of each other?
At the end when Hijikata yelled for Gin-chan and then invited him for a drink, it would be more of a impact if he yelled "Gintoki!" Instead of "Yorozuya!" And Gin-chan would be shocked at the sudden use of his name and the invitation! Hehehhe or maybe kissed him! / But that's just me and my fan-girl-ness.
Thanks for the Lovely Story! \o/
Mistress East chapter 1 . 6/12/2013
Can I just-
I just really wanted to commend you on the vocabulary in this piece. I mean, the whole thing made me ooze happiness, but your vernacular in particular is very impressive. Words like "archly" and "emollient" (had to look that one up) were used correctly and well-integrated, so it didn't just sound like one long SAT vocab practice. This may sound silly, especially in regards to such a short, absurd fic, but the vocabulary and your obvious knowledge of the English language really make this story come across as very intelligent. I know this is kind of weird, but I just love you and your big words treating your readers like adults and aaahhh. Gosh it's late. I should go to sleep. Keep up the amazing work please!
Skye Fawn chapter 1 . 6/6/2013
This is an amazing story! Usually when people try to pair up male characters in fanfics they alwasy come off OOC but you did a very good job in keeping them both true to their personalities. Also, I'm glad you kept it at shounen-ai and lower. It added realism to the story that others fail to capture when they go straight-up yaoi. Definitly going in my favs! d(_)d
mochiusagi chapter 1 . 5/16/2013
Pfftttyt ahahahaha awwwwwe Hijikata does care, well enough to ask Gintoki to drinks.
otaku no samurai chapter 1 . 5/14/2013
Aww... I love how you make their 's very Gintama-ish !
Can you make some kind of sequel on it ?
IvoryRhapsody chapter 1 . 5/11/2013
Amazing! You kept me on my ties for the longest! I wanted a kissing scene at least but this was an amazing story regardless! Great job :)
vidocq chapter 1 . 5/8/2013
As usual, you're doing a great job with those two ! And it's nice to have a fic with no yaoi about those two, their relationship is also very interesting in a "friendly" and gintama-like way...
So, thank you for this little fic, you made my day ! 3
La Vita a Colori chapter 1 . 5/7/2013
oh great now all i see is hijikata as batman
IM MAYOMAN I AM THE CREAMYNESS

LOLOL OFC THE FIRST THING HED THINK IS THAT GINTOKI IS DRUNK
GINTOKI U R DRUNK GO HOME YOROZUYA BAKA BAKA BAKNY BANYA.. NY..NYAN.

NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN

(plz u should have seen that coming a mile away)

fffsss gintoki u r too distracting, stop getting hijikata in trouble he was doing so good paps gintokis face then again it would probably have been smarter if hijikata wasnt wearing his uniform (he is right?) bc you know he could take example from yamazaki GASP! and get himself a stakeout uni LOLOL omg theyd all try to figure out what would be the least conspicuous: delivery boy, pizzaman, construction worker- kondo would get so into it and sougo would convince him to make hiji do a fashion show.

GUHH PHONEY THINGS GUH

imagine hiji just giving gintoki the most serious look he could muster and saying, "yes. yes in fact i did drop my balls."

GINTOKI TO THE RESCUE
im imagining that gintoki screams 'IM THE HEROOOO' when he pushes him out of the way ffsss and imagining hijikata automatically tends to flail violently when he wakes up. man no wonder hes grumpster all day he probably has terrible mornings.

/GINTOKI SAYING SON OF A BITCH AND ALL I SEE IS YOROZUYA GETTING THE SALT AND KILLING MONSTERS?/

OH HEY THEY ARE IN A BOX

"Most of the time you tell me to commit seppuku, why the fuck would I listen to you, haah?" That is a very apt assessment, Gintoki, yes but completely irrelevant to Hijis interests LOLL

HE CALLED HIM MEANIE AHA AHAH AHAHAH BABY

counting backwards in his head... id like to see him try out anger management classes. i mean how the heck would that go? I love how together their systems are set to either 'bicker' or 'strategize' and SOON TO BE FUCKING LIKE BUNNIES MUAHAHAHA HAHA HANA NA NYA NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN IM SORYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY

imagine... imagine they get stuck in a box... when theyre oyajis... and gin tries to ram his back into the wood to get it open and WHOOA NOW PULLED A MUSCLE FAHAAHFHSKGHSJHGSK

"AND DONT FACE ME CREEP"
THIS IS ME
HIJI IS ME
I AM HIJ

AHA I KNEW THE PHONE THING WOULD BE A PLOTHOLE HA
and though i know nothing of fma I CAN SEE WHY THIS THING WOULD BE FUNNY SHH SHH HIJ GINTOKI IS HERO HE CAN CHOOSE ANY HERO ITS LIKE SELECT YOUR CHARACTER AT THE BEGINNING OF A GAME

KAAAA
MEEEEEE
HAAAAA
MEEEEE-
NYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA N NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN NYAN IM NOT SORRRYYYY

IF YOU FART !1!111
ASSERTS DOMINANCE?!
"i dont want to remember that shit" yes literally shit AHAHAHAHAHA PUNS

FFSSSS FOURTH WALL, WHAT IS THAT?! I LOVE HOW DIALOG HEAVILY THIS IS TOO THIS IS MUY BIEN GREAT

you know i absolutely love how though its all dairy, neither of them care that carrying around strawberry milk and mayo might go bad bc its not refrigerated?

ITS WHAT YOU GET FOR MAKING FUN
APOLIGIZE TO MAYO LOLOLOLO
man if they had chalk, im sure thered be a line down the middle between them with designated sides
LOL FUCKING GINTOKI
HE FELL ASLEEP
HAHA
AHHAHAHAHAHAA

ITS FUNNY HOW THE ONLY THING THEY CAN DO IN THE BOX IS LITERALLY LOOK AT EACH OTHER- HIJ WAS DOOMED FROM THE BEGINNING TO PONDER THE FANCY FACE OF GINSAN

DAT STUTTER

FOURTH WALL TO OTHER FOURTH WALL TO OTHER FIC? OMG?! THAT IS BEST. WE DO NOT SPEAKETH OF THE JUSTAWAY THE AUTHORESS MIGHT HEAR !

He licks his palm...
Hi, I'm Sakata Gintoki and I'm forever five years old.

You know I do commisserate with Hiji here, mostly bc my bf and I have something we call 'annoying on/off' and its when one of us gets REALLY FUCKING ANNOYING to the other and i can just see gintoki wiggling like haha im not touching you and hijikatas like TURN UR FUCKING ANNOYING OFF ROAR

I LOVE HOW SOMEONE ALWAYS GOES FOR THE NOSTRILS IN THEIR FIGHTS

FFSS OMG THE WORST OF LUCK did they fucking get hit by a car? or roll downa hill? jesus christ this box is just erally fucking bad luck. AWW GINTOKI CRADLING THE BACK OF HIS HEAD THO thats one of my favorite things when fingers are like fiddling through hair and it just looks so simple but so damn protectuve ahhh

AND THEN HIJI AUTOMATICALLY WORRYING OVER GINTOKIS HEAD BUMP AHHH concussion babies ;/;
GINTOKI AND HIS GODDAMN IMPROPERLY TIMED ERECTIONS

LOL HE CANT EVEN SAY DICK, HAS TO SAY 'THING' which reminds me of that whole 50 shades of grey thing where the chick coouldnt just write clitoris but it was always /THERE/ KLOLOLAFHSDKFS

HGNGNGSDGJKSHGKSD GINTOKIS LIKE HIDE ALL OF THE AFFECTION BUT HE STILL FUCKING NUZZLES HIJIS HEAD AHHH

/THIS BOX IS A PRISON/ LOLOL HA

OKAY SO THEYRE AT A DUMP HA POOR BABIES OMG theyre gonna smell for days better shover yer nose in gintoki clothes best way to ward off th epoop smell

LOL OMFG SOUGO WOULD LOVE THAT FINDING THEM BOTH OMG IF ITS SOUGO WHO FINDS THEM- FUCKING PRICELESS

oh oh oh i love how you have these hiji introspective moments like where it finally dwindles to him feeling 'secure' and who even would have thought hed feel safe in gintokis space? ALSO THAT GINTOKIS ALL OCTOPUS ARMS CURLED AROUND HIJI IN HIS NATURAL PROTECTIVENESS GUHHH babies need to smooch like now

BAWWW like its such a big secret that hiji compliments gintoki in his mind omfg this guy

omg impromptu snuggly naptime IM DIE ;/;

"I could know you out again." I BET YOU COULD, U SEXY BEAST. MEEE-OWWW.

AHH
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
SCREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEECHHHHHH
HOT YAOIS TALKIN BOUT ROMANCE IN A COFFIN IM CRY
THIS IS JUST SO GODDAMN PERFECT
HOW DARE U
DO THIS
2
ME

lololol omg sugar. SUGAR CHANNNN

oh no.. OH NO. HIJKATAS GOT A C-R-U-S-H OMG.

oh dear. being trapped in a box is making hiji analyze their non-relationship WAY TOO DAMN CLOSELY. HE WILL NEVER BE FREEEEEE.

LOL
FUCK
PAPERWORK SAN
AND HIJI FEELING GUILTY
GOOD GOD HES LIKE SO TSU TSU TSUN TSUN TSUN TSUNDDDEEEREEEE

AND THAT HIJI HAS ISSUES WITH GRUMBLY TUMMY

IM WRIGGLE !
IM WRRRITHEEE !11!

["Careful what you say, mayora, I might try to eat you too."

Hijikata's heart sped up and his brows furrowed. "Ah... what?"

"I wasn't the only one with a bulge earlier," Gintoki replied airily. "The way you were touchin' my head almost looked like you wanted me to kiss you."]
SCCCCCCCCREAMSSSSSS?! THIS WHOLE THING!
OMG WAHT
ARE YOU DOING TO
MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE?!

HE WAS GONNA KISS HIM
IM
DEAD
SHE DED
THAT IT
LAV OUT

...doraemon.

THIS KILLS THE MAN !
NO
THIS KILLS THE MEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!

KONDO FOUND THEM IM GONNA-
IM GONE DIE

OH SHIT TEY WERE GONNA BURN EM T OA CRISP. OUCHIES!

BACKFLIPS TO THE MOON
SCREEEEEEEEEEECHHHHHHHHHHES EVERYWHERE
IM
AHHHH
AHHHHHHHHHHHHH GINTOKI OMG YOU NO ;;;;;a;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;
goddamn you im going to kill you THIS WAS JUST TOO FUCKING GOOD OMG AHHH AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH IM GONNA DIE AND THEN IM GONNA HAUNT UR ASS FOR KILLING ME WITH THIS GLORIOUSNESS
MY HEART
IT BEATS IM AHHHHHHHHH
I HAVE NO PROPER WORDS
UIM SERIOUSLY IN LOVE WITH THIS WHAT THE HECK?!
IM GONE CRY AHHHHH

MY SHOULDER HURTS TOO MUCH FOR ALL THIS TYPING AND ALL THESE FEELS AND GAHHHHH SO TENSE AND SO PERFECT AND GODDAMN IM JUST IMAGINING THE BOX AND ITS SO SYMBOLIC IN THE WAY THEYLL START BEING NICER TO EACH OTHER AND START TOLERATING EACH OTHER AND THEN THERE WILL BE AN ARGUMENT AND THEYLL TAUNT EACH OTHER BUT THAT TIME HIJIKATA /WONT LOOK AWAY/ AND GINTOKI WILL GET HIS KISS AND IT WILL BE MAGICAL AND IT WILL ALL BE BECAUSE OFTHAT STUPID BOX

I LOVE YOU
I DONT KNO W WHAT TO DO WITH MYSELF?