|Reviews for Unlikely Couple|
| marquis.shax chapter 10 . 5/17
nope not reading this story anymore. you fucking RUINED a good story by doing something absolutely FUCKING RETARDED. gee Naruto is hated by most villagers for holding the kyuubi so lets make him half demon and give the villages a real reason to hate him you fucking RETARDED MORON.
| naruxhinachan chapter 12 . 4/27
i really like this story and i hope u up date soon but you rus some thingst to fast and u should take ur time with the story but other than that keep up the good work
| mnementh2000 chapter 12 . 3/22
I reckon it's time that I also sent in a review. Now, I hope that this doesn't come off as a negative review, as I wouldn't be following your story otherwise, and I believe that you should be able to see my name, so no anon review. I caught your little rant in your A/N update under the announcement, and I do agree - anon reviews are a pain in the neck, and I really don't care for negative ones just to be negative.
That said, I will start by saying that a quick re-read before actually posting would go a good ways. You do have several instances where you repeat a couple of words in a sentence before finishing the thought of said sentence. A brief re-read would allow you to remove the extra words before posting, removing a small, slightly annoying distraction.
As for moving things at too fast a pace, that's really up to the author. True, you want a bit of build-up, as well as a good believable progression of the story, but it's ultimately up to you as the writer. Write how you wish, though incorporating the suggestions of others, over time, should help you grow and become a better author (usually). That's where CONSTRUCTIVE criticism comes into play, not just 'This sucks, you're terrible, blahblah'. If something is wrong, give reasons for that error.
As for your story, I am enjoying reading it, though I may have to go back and re-read the earlier chapters to reacquaint myself with the story line (hazards of having too many followed fics :P). Still, keep going and have fun with this, as that is ultimately why we write, is it not.
| Guest chapter 12 . 3/13
To be honest, I've always hated it when I find a spelling/grammar mistake. I'd take Grammar Nazi anyday.
| Web - The Black-Cyber Merc chapter 1 . 3/10
Die and rot you filthy Kishimoto lover.
| Dr.stein98 chapter 12 . 3/8
Sorry I have an account and if it would have let me log on I'd be typing this on that. I like the story but just have a few questions, what happened to the narutoxhanibi paring or the others? Did those just stop when naruto graduated? Also I'd like to ask why is naruto so strong I mean all of the concepts for him being the strong are sound but it's only the 11-12 chapter don't you think you should have spaced that out a little?
| xxPercyRoxxx chapter 12 . 3/7
Update soon please love the story. I forget is this a harem fic or not
| uzuuchi007 chapter 12 . 3/5
| Kurogano Yokaze chapter 8 . 3/3
Well this was really good... until it went to Andromeda... the holy building up of the story was that Hanabi, Naruto, and Konohamaru would be on a team together... with Anko more then likely the team leader...
However you decided to make a cluster fuck of a team with five sensei's that doesn't even have what you have been building up. Neither Hanabi or Konohamaru is on the team. Hell it seems like the story was just passed off to another author entirely. That isn't even going into the fact that was of his sensei's was Kurenai his secret girl friend and she did not even react to what Naruto did with Narumi... It isn't like they have talk about it or he was put in the CRA yet...
| Guest chapter 11 . 3/2
Well this is really getting good so keep up the good work and update soon looking forward to the next chapter.
| Kitsunegan chapter 2 . 1/16
The rikudou sennin is kind of a dick in your story but other than that I like it great story.
| Guest chapter 6 . 1/5
Congrats on ruining what was a good story, as the first six chapters was really good. Chapters 7 thru 11 was terrible with a highly inconsistent & constantly changing storyline that has a weak foundation.
| BigMasetheDon chapter 11 . 1/4
| Guest chapter 11 . 12/23/2014
Well this is interesting so keep up the good work and update soon.
| 0zeroomegaouroboros chapter 7 . 12/23/2014
who is aloasa nakagawa? what chapter is she mentioned in?