|Reviews for Shame|
| PAWsPeaches chapter 1 . 5/15/2013
Whoa whoa whoa! I know it took me 5 days to get here but not one of those days did I think that this wouldn't be impressive and man, I was so right! You blow my mind with how versatile you can be. This feels so different from your other stuff and all of your other stuff is top notch, so. I LOVED when he looked straight into the camera and she was watching. That moment is instilled in my brain now.
And this Bella makes me feel so uneducated. She knows her stuff and knows exactly how to use it. I feel like I'm reading a sexy fic version of Wall Street though I've never really watched that movie, only watched certain scenes of it... and it's one of those movies that is a classic and everyone loves.
So um... thanks for coming back to us even though you've been so busy being a career woman, we appreciate you giving us more... always3
| bonz245 chapter 1 . 5/15/2013
| mysticfighter111 chapter 1 . 5/14/2013
Wow this Bella is cold and hard-ass and her plans for her small prey - who I presume is Edward - sound quite unsettling.
| kymbersmith90 chapter 1 . 5/14/2013
Erron sent me your way. I have had a number of your fics on my ‘to read list’ for a while now but seeing that you had started a new story I thought I would start here. That way I am not already too far behind.
I should probably warn you that I review as I read. I have the chapter up on one side of the screen and a word document on the other. Therefore, if I ask a question that is answered later in the chapter please don’t worry. I just like to let you guys know what I am thinking and feeling as I read along. It’s my way of saying thank you.
I have to admit, when I read the summary to this story I thought that Edward would be the CEO of a large company and not Bella. I know I have never read a fic like this before. I loved the confidence she projected while she was addressing her executives. I am so used to seeing a passive and submissive Bella that the strong and confident woman you described here was such a wonderfully refreshing change.
I adored all of the business talk you infused this chapter with. I majored in Business and law and it has always been a passion of mine. I know some people can get put off with those kinds of details but for me, it just made this chapter all the more exciting. I loved hearing Bella explain her plan and her reasons behind it. You can tell that your Bella isn’t afraid to make some bold decisions and she is probably a very hated woman amongst her employees. That being said, I have found that the very best companies in the world are usually ran by those kinds of people. You would never make a profit if you were always trying to keep everyone involved happy.
It will be interesting to see what role The Volturi play in this story. I wonder what kind of structure their business has and why it is considered the best in their market, above SAF Global. I liked Bella’s plan to go after them. It may be bold but as she said, in this economic environment there isn’t always room for two large companies at the top. If she doesn’t try and aim for their crown she could find the business she runs going under.
Wow, she really was cruel in the way she delivered the news about the positions that were being eliminated. From the summary I suspected that the one she insisted be removed before the end of the day would be Edward. I cannot imagine why he has to go so soon and what he has done to deserve this treatment. Poor Jared. He sounded scared shitless at the prospect of firing an employee from the company.
I have to confess, at the start of this chapter I didn’t know what would be so important about the security monitor. I presumed that she always kept it on just in case something caught her eye as she was working. I didn’t think she would be using it to spy on one of her employees. I certainly never expected her to be spying on Edward.
She said that just recently his work had suffered because of some kind of distraction. I wonder what it is that has distracted him so much that he is about to lose his job over it. It must be something serious if he was once a good employee. Is it because he knows that Bella is watching him? Why else would he turn to look into the lenses of the camera? Does he watch her the same way that she watches him? Why is she trying to show him the power she has over him in such a cruel way? And what will she want in return? She said that her body responds to him so does that mean that she lusts after him? Is that why she is firing him?
The last line of this chapter left me with one theory but I think it might be a little off. Is it possible that she and Edward are involved in a D/s relationship or she knows that Edward is into that lifestyle and she wants part of it with him? I just went back to the summary and I was trying to think of a way he could dominate her and sexually seems like the most obvious choice. Is it possible that behind closed doors, Bella is a little bit of a masochist? Therefore she would save his job if he made her suffer in that manner? The only other way I could think of him dominating her would be if he was hired by The Volturi and their company ended up dominating SAF Global.
I cannot wait to find the answers to my questions with every chapter you post.
| fannygilmore chapter 1 . 5/14/2013
This story has me on edge already.
| vivalarye chapter 1 . 5/13/2013
oooh, I like it! Can't wait for more
| garddita17 chapter 1 . 5/13/2013
It appears that Bella watches Edward on her monitor and he seems to sense that he is being watched. But does he know who is watching him? And what part does he play in her grand scheme?
| Lost In Fanfiction chapter 1 . 5/13/2013
I'm intrigued :)
| fuzzyltlwingedthing chapter 1 . 5/13/2013
Interesting. I think the fact that she wants the useless middleman should be her demise, but the HEA you are usually so good at would say otherwise.
| Julia-S77 chapter 1 . 5/13/2013
Great first chapter, can't wait to read more
| Emowrek chapter 1 . 5/13/2013
"Lighter AND darker" hmm? I'm intrigued.
| Elli Fox chapter 1 . 5/13/2013
Welcome back after a while. This story is already shaping to be full of angst but we love your angst :)
| ana1973 chapter 1 . 5/12/2013
Interesting, bella is the one in charge, like it.
| i.luv.twilight2 chapter 1 . 5/12/2013
Only one chapter in and I am definitely intrigued. Good start.
| Guest chapter 1 . 5/12/2013
Different! Interesting! Next chapter.