|Reviews for The One the Virus Took Away|
| animegirl336 chapter 1 . 8/6
Amazing! Beautiful! Now I have to write a Future Timeline fic! lol!
| Blazingnyancat chapter 1 . 6/19/2014
That is Just...sad.
| DeathGoblin chapter 1 . 3/17/2014
I liked the idea of the story.
My favorites were Yamcha and Bulma. With Bulma, I liked how she referred to Goku as her little brother. Yamcha's had the most heart to me. I liked the way he said 'men can cry,' and when he referenced his baseball career. Launch's POV also had some personality to it (cussing made her stand out from the others).
I just have two main issues:
The first is that these POVs got repetitive after a while. To spice them up you could put further develop how each character speaks (give them slightly different vocabularies).
The other issue was that I thought some of the characters were off, though I can't blame you for that since the dub and anime filler can be misleading:
Gohan actually wanted to study. Sure he'd want to help out if he could, but he really wanted to grow up peacefully and become a scholar. That's why he slacked off on his training after Cell. That's just a minor thing though.
With Piccolo, I think he would have also been standing away from the others. Most of them probably still thought of him as a monster. Also, I think his thoughts would be more centered on Gohan than Goku.
Vegeta was the main one (I'm also guilty of this in many of my stories). He shouldn't be a good guy at this point. He only becomes good by the Buu saga after he's been living on Earth for 7 years without anyone to strive against. In the androids saga he openly states his desire to kill Goku after dealing with the androids and doesn't lift a finger to help Bulma and Trunks when Gero blasts their ship. I do think you got him right when he said "don't you dare die," but other than that, I think he'd be more upset about losing his chance to kill Goku than anything else.
| EeveeAlchemist chapter 1 . 7/13/2013
I was close to shedding tears while reading this.. I'll admit, The History of Trunks broke my heart in a lot of ways, but this scene was the one that just tore me up. Very good story, I like how you portrayed each of the characters.
| NATARYA chapter 1 . 6/16/2013
I wish I had a father like Gohan's. Goku is the hero of my childhood and when he died (for the first time) I cried for hours (I was 7).
| Ihearttrunks chapter 1 . 5/30/2013
This made me cry so hard I love goku.
| China chapter 1 . 5/18/2013
Goku... Wow. This actually makes you think.
They all loved him, but due to fates crule mirth they couldn't keep him alive.
| AEK chapter 1 . 5/18/2013
This was really good! So good that my eyes started to water! I loved Vegeta's thoughts the best. I think you kept everyone in character and this was a very enjoyable read. -
| Guest chapter 1 . 5/18/2013
Though people, don't think about it much, I think Yamcha had a pretty terrible in the time in the future and in the present. And lets not even go into Puar who loses all its friends