|Reviews for Naruto: Great Clan Days|
| Captrick chapter 12 . 3/13
AMAZING JOB! I really like how you came up with your own "filler" arc thing. I thought that was epic. I was wondering, will this end up a naruto harem fic? I'm kinda hoping for a narufuu pairing because that is one of my favs. Anyways, keep up the good work!
| StillnotHere chapter 12 . 3/11
Excellent as always. Can't wait for the next update.
| petissediurzotreth chapter 12 . 3/2
This, alongside HSS and the Pokemon one that's name I can't remember, are (IMO) the best works you've produced yet, and some of the finest damn works of fiction on the net. In all you're other stories Natuto is either a bit OOC, a bit of a Gary Stue, or both, but in these three you've got all the characters down flat, in addition to your staple of ridiculously awesome gift scenes. Keep up the awesome work!
| Minato 1 chapter 12 . 2/27
Vry intresting,well d whole family is back 2geda just 1dering wat wil hapen next.
| TheToroLoco chapter 12 . 2/26
hopefully now kushina and minato can actually teach naruto correctly since kakashi only knows how to teach "prodigies" and has no idea in how to teach people that actually need to be ...taught i guess... sure naruto is a genius but hes a genius of HARDWORK so he need examples and whatnot... fuking awesome story though xD... i think this is the only (at least the only that I've read) that the system of hidden villages never happened and the clan wars never ended... epicness xD
| Alec McDowell chapter 12 . 2/26
This universe just keeps getting more and more interesting as characters are introduced. I find it a bit funny that despite this much greyer world Nagato and Konan are by far easier to hate here as well. Glad to see everybody has finally met up too, should be fun times in the future.
Couple of mistakes here though- when Naruto tells Tenten and Shino Fuu is a jinchurriki he acts like Shino knows about him, but when Kurama's chakra is first used he tells Fuu he's a jinchurriki too and Shino seems surprised to 'learn' he's a jinchurriki. There was one other minor thing that I just forgot about as well, sorry about that
| Reine de la Mort chapter 12 . 2/24
All right, let me start off this review by telling you a bit about myself. Not that you aren't likely to really care, but eventually it'll lead to me telling you why you're awesome, and who doesn't like being told they're awesome? Or why? Granted, I suppose there might be reasons for being awesome that you wouldn't appreciate, but anyway.
When it comes to my taste in entertainment, I'm an oddly-divided person. One part of me, the dominant side, is a teenage girl who spent her childhood devouring various forms of media like ice cream. I'm not sure how many stories I've read at this point, both online and offline, but I'm pretty sure it's somewhere between 500-1000. I've seen or heard of almost every plot or premise any creator can throw at me. At this point, everything is a cliche, and the only difference is how it's executed. And when it's executed well, I fucking love it. I absolutely love to dissect a good story, pick through the setup, progression and foreshadowing. I love reading good sentence structure, fleshed-out characterisation, witty dialogue, the works.
Now, the other side, the secondary personality, is a 9-year-old boy who woke up every morning to watch Pokemon when all the other girls would be playing with their tea sets, who grew up watching Rurouni Kenshin, Fullmetal Alchemist, and thinks One Piece is the greatest anime ever. If there's anything this kid would describe as Heaven, it would be giant robots punching giant monsters in the face using shipping crates as knuckledusters, so it's a good thing that really happened. For him, plot can go screw its mother, as long as there's enough people beating each others' faces in to keep him occupied.
Most of the time, a story only satisfies one side or the other. Yours? Every single one of them I've read drags both sides of me in and makes me love it. Except for a few awkward mistakes you made at the start of your writing that you've mostly smoothed out by now, I could go on and on all day about everything I think makes your writing awesome. But I'll focus on the fact that you have the best fight scenes I have ever read, whether in fan or original fiction. I've been reading fanfiction for years now, and I've seen authors who could produce great plots, twists and tricks that made their readers stay up all night thinking about the perfect execution, but I've never seen someone that could write a fight scene as in-depth as you can. There's only one other guy that can make me love his fight scenes as much as you can, and he deals in a completely different form of media.
So, your writing is awesome, and you're awesome. And totally inspirational. Your stories are the best thing I can point to when I'm telling the other 90% of the authors on the internet how and why they suck at writing. Thanks!
As for this story and why I chose to review it in particular? That's because this has the potential to be your best work yet, when you're really cutting loose. I don't get why you'd want to be responsible for the train wreck that Kishimoto has turned Naruto into. Quit challenging him, man. He's just a guy, nearing his mid-life crisis (39 counts as that, right?) who can't wean himself from the teat of his cash cow, so he's just dragging it in the mud by now. Go spend your time creating more awesome for the rest of us to bask in. You can never have too much awesome.
| Kaassie chapter 1 . 2/23
Alright, so I saw the summary, and got really excited about the premise: an AU where the hidden villages were never founded? Awesome! This story has some real potential, the author can change everything up seeing as nothing should be the same. Those were my thoughts more or less.
But soon I discovered that things were rather familiar. And then the disappointment began. Because this story isn't what I imagined it would be. Perhaps that's my fault, likely, even.
My main problem can be summed up as this: Naruto shouldn't be 'Naruto'. That his name is the same, okay, I get that. That his mum is Kushina Uzumaki, I'm also fine with. That Minato, even in this universe is his dad, I can't get past. Considering how different everything is, or should be, given the premise, this is beyond unlikely, that his dad is still Minato. What's more unlikely is that Naruto's personality is more or less the same as it is in canon. Nothing is impossible, but Naruto having the same character traits and physical appearance in this totally different universe as in the original is quickly approaching it. If you had gone all the way with the AU, even his name should be different. His mother's name could be different. Maybe. Her personality should be different, including her physical appearance. Remember, almost no child was conceived at the same moment as they were in canon, causing them to end with different genes and all. Perhaps they weren't conceived at all. Maybe Kakashi mom didn't die early and he ends up with a bunch of siblings. (I don't know whether or not this actuall happens, just an example)
I could go on like this, but I'm sure that you get my basic point. I took a quick peek at some of the future chapters, saw some names as they were in canon, including similar personalities. Obviously the story isn't finished yet and I haven't read all there is currently, but right now because the difference between the premise as I envisioned it and how it is, is simply too jarring for me. I just know I'm going to be looking at every little detail with more scrutiny than it, and you, as author, deserves. I'm not saying that you should have written the story differently, this is your vision of the AU, and plenty of people seem to be enjoying it, so that's great! (no sarcasm) I personally hoped for something different, I suppose.
I just wanted to share my thoughts here, maybe it will help you out in some way, do whatever you want with them. I also needed to get this off my chest, haha. Huge relief on my part. Anyway, I wish you the best of luck and happy writing!
| xXxLKxXx chapter 6 . 2/21
Why not just make Tenzo a senju?
| WitchL0v3r chapter 12 . 2/21
Ah...damnit! I knew there weren't many chapters but I was hoping it wouldn't end. Oh well, now to wait!
| darkerdeepdown chapter 12 . 2/21
Lol I love your sarcastic one liners that line your stories. They frame the story in a light that makes it both real and believable.
I like the growing nakama amongst the idiotic and deadly individuals.
Plus the uzumaki sucker punch is most definitely a genetic trait even in canon
| WitchL0v3r chapter 3 . 2/20
YAY TENTEN!...Wait, so in this scenario is it no Hidden Villages, but instead Clan villages?
| WitchL0v3r chapter 1 . 2/20
I don't know if there are any other stories starting out like this, but if there are, I doubt there better than this...have I been using the wrong theres...
| Ty Son of Battle chapter 12 . 2/19
Amazing chapter. Kind of unsure about your take on Minato's strength level though. I say this because he's powerful enough to use sage mode and he's lived ten additional years in this continuity so he's had more time to learn and become stronger. Regardless I still think your take is entertaining. Can't wait for the next chapter.
| Tango Charlie chapter 12 . 2/18
You should add more clans to this, ya know. Clans like the Hozuki(hydrification bloodline), Kaguya(shikotsumyako), Yuki(hakus clan)
If naruto would one day want to bromg peace, he should make allies with strong bloodline clans. Seeing as the Senju are not exactly allies, he can ally with the Uchiha clan. It would be very interesting if you rebuild his dysfunctional relationship with Sasuke.
And for the love of god, dont portray the Uchiha as the ultimate bad guys.
I am also very interested in the situation of the other kages, pasy and present. What about Gaara and his family, the yondaime kazekages Gold dust, Akasuna no Sasori, Yondaime Mizukage Yagura?
Oonoki and his Jinton? Zabuza and the other swordsmen?
This story has unlimited potential in making good guys and bad giys out of anyone. I hope you take this story in right direction.