|Reviews for who's that lady?|
| starfire341 chapter 3 . 6/6/2013
I love your story so far and it has a sweet plot too. But can you please work on your grammar like starting a new paragraph for dialouge, for example:
"Yes Bones if that floats your boat, yes," Kirk retorted exasperated.
"Alright I'm going to go and get the ned kit and my Tri-corder. I'll be down in the transporter room in a minute," McCoy said as everyone of the landing party dispatched to the transporter room.
*Passage from Ch.3*
Please take this into consideration and please don't be offended, it's not my intention.
| The Peckster chapter 1 . 5/21/2013
I like this very much! Excellent! I think you have a great way with the characters! Surprised you don't ahve more reviews for this though!
| Sylar's Wife chapter 1 . 5/19/2013
Good start! I can't wait to read more. Rachel seems like a very interesting character. I also like how you right Bones. I would also suggest you try to separate the paragraphs in order to the paragraph less clumped together. The only issue I have with your chapter is the fact that it's not long enough lol. I hope we get a scene or too during karaoke on Friday night:)