This what if was trash thank you would much for wasting my time

You suck, this what if sucks

Well, congrats your entire story has just been rendered COMPLETELY pointless. This is because the very BASE CONCEPT of your story was that Minato split Kurama's consciousness from the majority of his chakra and then put the chakra in Menma and the consciousness in Naruto. Now suddenly near 30 chapters in Menma has a Kurama? This means that Naruto actually got nothing but completely screwed over and renders the core premiss void. If Menma is literally Naruto except with a name change then WHAT. IS. THE. POINT. Because of this I no longer feel like Naruto is the main character. It now feels like Naruto is just the original SASUKE with a name change and the swapping out of his Sharingan for a Rinnegan mainly due to you making changes to Sasuke's character. I am honestly so disappointed as I am usually not a big fan of these whole Dark Naruto fics when there is a "brother" type character for the very reason that authors make the mistake of not making the brother feel like a unique character and instead slap a CANON Naruto paint job onto them which always makes the "Dark" Naruto suddenly just feel like an OC with a name swap. This just ruins the whole story for me when it happens. Sorry for the rant, but frustration and all; wrote this right after reading the chapter and I will just leave with the quote that seems to fit how I feel about this story now, "I'm not mad, just disappointed."

Somehow i made i thru this story so far, and while i honor the effort it took to write this it's in need major editing at some point in the future. The overabundance of OC characters the Plots and changes that pop up all over the place makes the story sometimes just hard to read. Also not sure about the power level that your Minato had, seams a bit to OP considering that he got beaten pretty bad by the Fox and Obito in Canon and the beginning of the story.
It's an interesting take on the Naruto story but sometimes it's just unhinged and not necessarily in a good way

what's the difference between this and the uncensored version?

Well in my entire time of 10 years of reading fanfictions on various sights, I declare this fic ad THE FUCKING WORST RHINOSHIT of ALL time.

Would that even work, with two conscience in Naruto’s head, either kurama will notice something is wrong and undo it, or it would affect kurama instead and naruto will gut-check him. Either way, I don’t know what is going to happen.

E this is bullshit giving power just like that. And rennegan can't be obtain without shringan or implanted.

great work.

Apart from the fact that I seriously dislike everything you've had Naruto do so far, Where is the third hokage all this time? Since he's not the hokage in this timeline he should have MORE time to spend on Naruto. He did seem like he wanted to take care of the boy earlier as well. And there's been no mention at all about what's going on outside. If this is the mood you want for this fanfic I'll probably drop within two more chapters.

thanks for the chapter

next

Wow what a truly evil naruto he held a 6 year old hostage and killed her father while also holding the whole village hostage….. An evil BADASS that’s what they get. And then girls love him even tho he be crazy sometimes.

great work.

next