|Reviews for Seven Percent|
| bkwrmnlvnit chapter 1 . 2/15
I still haven't quite gotten to reading Somerton, but I did have a little time, so I figured I'd do a quick drive by on your least reviewed one-shot.
Ugh, Mycroft...WHY ARE YOU SO FREAKING COMPLICATED? I have to say, it's a lot easier reading this having seen the Third season, and I absolutely love your characterization of him in this piece. It is absolutely spot on, and I cannot think of a single thing to criticize about it. The moments when Sherlock shows up as well are brilliant.
The interaction between Mycroft and the doctor is so amazing, and I love the detail about the blind. I love how Mycroft uses it as a sort of distraction, something to think about besides the fact that his brother got himself into a hospital with his cocaine and drug habits. I know that I do the same thing - looking for distractions - when I'm under stress, and I think you covered this really well.
Mycroft's story is so amazing and fitting, that he would make up this short anecdote to shut up Sherlock. I really liked the idea of it.
Also..."The world moves too slow. It makes me sad." This line made me sad. Poor Sherlock... And the thought of how well Mycroft can relate (his world of goldfish comment comes to mind) is just beautiful and tragic and GAH.
I love how you have this whole feeling of being guilty and feeling regret, but you never make it overdramatic. I really admire that about your stories. You take all of these really beautiful and amazing themes, but you don't shove the down anyone's throat or make them so heavy it becomes narmy. It's incredibly impressive, and I applaud you greatly for that.
I adore the way that Mycroft is thinking again of the first time he left Sherlock, and they're still making all this banter to cover up the reason that they both know they're there for. It's so sad and beautiful at the same time, and...UGH. MY FEELS.
Okay, and this last line... Actually, the last four paragraphs. They are just so beautiful and haunting, and it makes me feel so bad for Mycroft... WHY ARE YOU SO CRUEL TO MY FEELS?!
Thanks so much for posting this, Eddy! It's amazing, and I love all the emotions in here. This writing is haunting and everything is very strong. Characterization is spot on. All in all, AMAZING!
Brilliant work! Thanks a million for posting, and by all means, KEEP IT UP!
| persevera chapter 1 . 10/19/2013
I love your relationship between the Holmes brothers. I don't like the fics I read where Sherlock is so resentful of Mycroft and rejects everything that he tries to do for him.
The bent blind was such a great focus for Mycroft. If he couldn't fix Sherlock instantly, at least he could take care of that.
You manage to inject tiny bits of character-driven levity in this, with the patient doctor irritated by the inevitably irritating Sherlock and with Sherlock's shooting up in the library, rather than the places that people usually do.
Your description of Sherlock lying in the hospital bed is compelling. It's just like Mycroft to blame himself. I'm surprised he didn't take it back farther than "letting" him go to university "by himself," to maybe something from their childhood, since he's always felt responsible for his little brother.
The ending fell a little and I'm not sure why. Maybe it's because it was more about the dialogue but they weren't really saying anything. You have a couple lines where Mycroft thinks to himself what he can't say out loud but I guess it doesn't stand out enough, even though it's the crux of the whole story. Is there some way to make it more prominent?
As always, I love your lyrical one-shots.
| Esther Huffleclaw chapter 1 . 9/11/2013
This is painfully beautiful. Stunning, really.
I love this: “One of the blinds had been bent into a little v-shape, and Mycroft found the asymmetry intensely annoying.” And I adore that he says “Is he… awake?” then wishes he’d said something “a lot more academic.” Aw, Mycroft. And then he adjusts the blinds! Oh, it’s just too perfect! Have I told you I love the way you write Mycroft? If not, then I love the way you write Mycroft! :)
In a previous story in this series, I remember Mycroft saying that he only allows himself emotions that are “useful.” Now, here, he finds himself beset by emotions. Sadly, this will probably make him even more determined that these are not “useful.” These brothers hurt my heart.
1 spag issue: “I'm sorry, I came as soon as possible.” This is a comma splice. It could be fixed by replacing the comma with a semicolon: “I'm sorry; I came as soon as possible.”
| reminiscent-afterthought chapter 1 . 9/11/2013
This was an interesting piece; somehow, I never imagined either of them in this situation, but it does make both Sherlock and Mycroft appear more accessible. Particularly how Mycroft was worried about Sherlock and trying to hide it, as though he was struggling to keep up appearances even when it's only Sherlock and/or the Doctor present. Their personalities really come out in a different way here.
[he had endless empathy for his patients. Almost endless. ] - it does seem odd to use something as absolute as endless and then to deny it in the next sentence; it comes out more as a contradiction than as an emphasis.
[He'd meant to say "conscious" or "lucid" or something else a lot more academic than this, but it was too late now.] - lol, I can see why Mycroft wouldn't be too happy about that little slip. :)
[Sherlock Holmes: possibly the only man in Britain who thought the men's bathroom in the Radcliffe Science Library was a great place to shoot up cocaine.] - another line that makes me want to giggle.
The subtelties you sneak in here are, as usual, gorgeous. The clinical verses the more emotional is particularly attractive, but even the bits of relationship you sneak in without actually having the two brothers speak to each other is simply gorgeous. And it's funny how Sherlock was being "petulant" in his state; somehow, I imagined this crazy cartoon picture where the whole of him had blue lines. :)
A very nice fic, and as usual a pleasure to read.
| Rainie Skyes chapter 1 . 9/8/2013
I enjoyed this immensely. Your Mycroft, I felt was very true. It broke my heart when Sherlock walked in to the building. Poor Mycroft. He did so try to be a good brother, though he was left with the fathering part.
| jack63kids chapter 1 . 8/29/2013
Makes you want to bang their heads together and give them a cuddle - goodness knows, Mummy never did.
Love Mycroft's storytelling and the reference Sherlock's first case and his father's mistress. All milestones of his short life to that point.
| magentacr chapter 1 . 8/26/2013
When it started in hospital I did wonder I it was drugs. I feel similarly to Mycroft in this, I don't like to accept the idea of Sherlock doing drugs, but it is an undeniable truth.
The reference to Carl Powers was nice too, I was wondering if that would come up.
| Ersatz Einstein chapter 1 . 8/16/2013
This is an excellent one-shot, tense problems aside. I enjoyed the 2.5 scene format, and I felt that you captured Sherlock exceedingly well, even if Mycroft was a tad soft.
| thedragonaunt chapter 1 . 6/27/2013
Is there any more to this? I'd like to find out what happened.
| darkin520 chapter 1 . 6/15/2013
I'm glad you re-uploaded this one. I'd always enjoyed it. I liked it the first time around, but I very much enjoyed the rewrite. I love Mycroft's concern. Of course, finding out your only living relative (well, the one you're close to anyway) has done something that awful and could have died is a true shock in itself. I love how he struggled for the right words and said things he didn't quite want to. Again, I love the fact Sherlock chose the public library for his unfortunate experience.
I think the scene between both brothers was my favorite, especially where Sherlock divulges the reason he did it. Was that particular line about the world in the first one? Well, I really loved it. That one line right there was fantastic, and it just really summed up his reasons for what he did nicely. Anyway, I also love how he reverts back to a childlike state. That was wonderful.
And again, I love how leaving Sherlock at the rehabilitation center is harder on him than it is on Sherlock. I really love the fact that Sherlock never voiced his problem directly, but the fact he never returned to the car confirmed it. It was just a really well-done message. I really loved this. Well done. :)
| Aiko Isari chapter 1 . 6/10/2013
Mycroft found the asymmetry intensely annoying- I think that's the least of your problems. Good distraction though.
Almost endless.- Only Sherlock will tick off the jolly old man while suffering from addiction. ONLY Sherlock.
He'll stay here until we can get his heart rate down and make sure he's unlikely to have any more seizures.- Ouch. The fact that he needs to stay that long just is horrible.
the Radcliffe Science Library was a great place to shoot up cocaine- It's certainly a place you don't check every day.
"I suppose I can go in and see him?"- See that he's a live, yes. That will do you both wonders I do think.
The blue lines on his arms stood out like a glaring accusation.- I like these lines. I like these lines of narration a lot. I have a tiny question though: Would the emotions Mycroft is feeling right now be survivor's guilt or something else?
"Polygamy's when Dad is married to Jemima,"- Aw... Eddy. Why did you have to go there? I remember that one. Why? That was mean. You're mean. But I love you anyway.
announce he didn't need six months of rehabilitation- I'm sorry Mycroft.
when he'd accepted this, Mycroft turned and got back into the waiting car.-He really does care. If only Sherlock would chill about it. I know some wounds run deep but sometimes you have to give a guy a chance.
| lulu chapter 1 . 5/27/2013
can you please continue this series, it is written beautifully
| Kerlyssa chapter 1 . 5/25/2013
What. We are doing the time warp- hello again, old-new fic. I love Sherlock's lines about Jemima and the shoes.
| johnsarmylady chapter 1 . 5/25/2013
Again, an excellent story. Nice touch with the Carl Powers case.
| patemalah21 chapter 1 . 5/24/2013
Wow So very Mycroft. You have their relationship perfectly. My favorite Mycroft line: He couldn't bring himself to say what he wanted to say- I don't care about the money. I don't want you to die.
Of course Sherlock's response to all the drama was classic:"I'll be sure to play nicely with all the other little junkies, Mycroft."
This story was excellent and up to your usual standards!