|Reviews for How Long Is Forever?|
| SoranPanoko chapter 1 . 1/27/2014
Very OoC... it's a cute lovestory, but exept the names, there is nothing from digimon (Tamers)
But I realy like it
| Soran chapter 1 . 1/15/2014
A little OOC is good... okay they are adult here so it would be wierd if theay still would be the same... Love Jurato, don't understand why there are storys about rikaxTakato, never fit to the show...
| Kegi Springfield chapter 10 . 10/9/2013
A good Ending fitting for a Good Fic...
It's really good and sweet... Not to mention funny
It's always kind of sad when a good story reach it's end...
But a good ending like this always make my day
| Kegi Springfield chapter 9 . 10/9/2013
God... THat was so sweet...
A complete family was what every child need afterall..
and I see that Hana was not as bad as Fumiko..
| Kegi Springfield chapter 7 . 10/9/2013
And they started to open up...
It's so sweet how they slowly but surely getting back together...
and who's Hikari's Husband?
| Kegi Springfield chapter 5 . 10/9/2013
Daisuke... As in 02 Daisuke?
Jeri didn't tell Takato about his son yet... I'm sure, It would be a big hit for him when he know
| Kegi Springfield chapter 4 . 10/9/2013
The family gathering...
Their kids are all so cute!
And I hope Takato and Jeri can talk over and clear up the misunderstanding...
| Kegi Springfield chapter 1 . 10/9/2013
Henry and RIka got a 4 years old daughter... and Takato and Jeri got a 4 years old son...
I hope these two meet each other...
| lostpenman chapter 10 . 6/5/2013
A very awesome chapter tittle…
Terriormon influencing Henry in a positive way was a good point. It is nice to see the impact of the Digimon on the children during their adult years. Takato's proposal was great and again Jeri and Takato go so well together because a romantic like Jeri needs someone like Takato.
Aww Ichori and Hana hooking up like that reminds me of Love's labour lost…everybody falls in love!
I love the mood of hope and the sense of a renewal.
The fanfic was short but it was still a very good fanfic…This one is better than the prequel in many ways and I hope you continue to write like this and capitalize on your strengths :)
| lostpenman chapter 9 . 6/5/2013
Wow, Naoki is way beyond his years…
It is kind of sad that Naoki is just this super nice kid and you kind of sort of explored the problem with him but not really. You could have delved more into the mother and son relationship and how Naoki copes with this and I just realized the story is complete ( I have potatoes for eyes, yeah sorry about that…). I think you really shine as a writer when you write longer stories especially in the prequel, but the story is still pretty good. I like the theme of the cost of loving someone because it was a mini theme in Tamers and it is an appropriate theme here. Usually in situations like this things like pride and pain get in the way and the path of forgiveness and acceptance cannot be paved even though loving a person means that you have to embrace all of they flaws.
I like how Hana is not like the typical evil chick your supporting characters are getting more complex :)
" He is your son!" dun dun dun! I love dramatic moments like this. This is even better than the long lost twin brother thing in Frontier.
I knew that the moments of depression where going to be contrasted with absolute and awesome moments of happiness! The elated pay off is always good in your stories.
| lostpenman chapter 8 . 6/5/2013
Yes! It is my favorite Script song!
Anyways, I like jeri's romanticism because that is so like her and it goes very well with the story. I think your love for romantic movies is also coming through here. I like how ambivalent Jeri's feelings are and I will say this again, the variation and slow build up in your story is good. It is awesome that you are taking your time to flesh out and develop the romance whilst starting the healing process.
You have written quite a bit so far and since I have the time I will catch up on the reviewing.
| videogamenerd101 chapter 10 . 6/5/2013
["Dearly beloved, we gather here today the bind these two individuals in marriage: Takato Matsuki and Jeri Katou."] "the" should be "to".
["Hello," Hana replied to the black-haired young man who was wearing a black and formal suit] You forgot to enf the sentence with a period.
["Alright!" Takato relented and danced moved with Jeri by swaying to the tune of the song.] Take out "moved" from this sentence.
This was really cute. I actually had thought that Ichiro and Hana would have something for each other eventually by the start. :) Anyways, I'm glad Takato and Jeri are finally married. They're just so cute together. x)
| lostpenman chapter 7 . 6/5/2013
It is very slow and gradual in terms of forgiveness. You see Jeri criticize and hate Takato ( or act in a spiteful manner even though she loves him) and then eventually Takato's natural goofiness gets through to her. I like how you integrated and adressed the problem with Naoki and how you mentioned the knight part about Takato since that is what he is associated with.
I really want to see more of Naoki and how he is dealing with it and I know it is about Takato and Jeri but if the story really has to be complete the impact of this on Naoki has to be explored enough. I am curious to see how he copes with this because kids have a very bizarre way of coping with things even though they have no idea about the emotions they are feeling or the coping mechanisms that they are using but they still deal with their problems in a fascinating way. I think it would be interesting to see Naoki use his imagination to accept what is happening. That could be one thing that connectes him and his father aside from the smaller things. Their vibrant imagination can connect them because that is Takato's best, most memorable, most unique and most relatable quality.
Anyways this is a very natural chapter, and variation is the key to a good story. It can't be bam! They are together! It is good that you take your time to build up the romance.
| videogamenerd101 chapter 9 . 6/4/2013
[Now that Naoki was out of her bed, Jeri fixed their pillows and bed sheets.] "bedsheets" is one word.
[But actually, it's just a crash course on getting to know your father.] I think you meant for this to be italicized.
["Mom, how did you forgive my Dad for what he did to you?" Jeri asked because she was still at loss with what she was supposed to do with her own life.] "Dad" should be lowercase because it's following a possessive pronoun.
["You know, Sis. It's time that you taste the recipe that I made during the time you're gone in Kyushu!" Mashaiko offered.] You misspelled "Masahiko".
["Yeah, Mommy." Naoki said plainly.] When using a speech verb, end dialogue with a comma imstead of a period.
[He might have a convlusion with this!] You misspelled "convulsion".
[Someone's sobbing? Takatoi thought.] You misspelled "Takato".
["But don't be sorry, Jeri… At least, I gave our son some hints on how I look like as a Daddy to him!" Takato assured as they broke away from each other.] "Daddy" shouldn't be capitalized.
["He's at the emergency room. He has meningitis," jeri answered wistfully.] You didn't capitalize "Jeri".
Aw… this was really sweet! I'm glad both Takato and Naoki found out! :D I hope Naoki gets better. :) So anyways, update soon!
| videogamenerd101 chapter 8 . 6/4/2013
[with this, Jeri decided to terminate their soft and fluffy moment with each other since she knew that it would be totally awkward for the two of them.] You didn't capitalize the beginning of this sentence.
[Takato only smiled with that fact, if it was not for this trip to Kyushu, both of them would always give the cold shoulder to each other.] The first comma is a comma splice, which is when you combine two independent clauses with a comma, which is incorrect. Replace that comma with either a semicolon or a period. Also, this should be "…if it were not…"
["Well!" Takato smirked while Jeri could only shrug with his never ending joy.] There should be a hyphen in "never-ending".
[it was Jeri who was calling.] You didn't capitalize the first word in this sentence.
["they're so many!"] Same as above.
["You're turn!" Takato replied while wearing his yellow shirt and white shorts.] You used the incorrect "your".
[When they got seated inside the plain, Jeri again yawned and Takato noticed this.] You used the wrong "plane".
[Back at the brown-haired couple, the couple were exchanging jokes already at one another while walking to the waiting area.] "were" should be "was".
Ugh, and when Takato and Jeri's relationship was finally getting better, Hana has to come in and ruin everything… I hate that bitch; she's so desperate. :/