Reviews for Sonic & Sega All Stars: Subspace Unleashed
Mega M chapter 71 . 11/30/2016
Hey i hope you didn't give up on this story since it your goal since you know it impolite to end a story like this , so hope you up update soon!
Mega M chapter 72 . 9/30/2016
hey when the next chapter it been awhile buddy
ytp caillou fan chapter 24 . 4/7/2016
You think master zik can do the wuxi finger hold on the two younger zeti like shifu did to po
Dragnery chapter 1 . 4/7/2016
Great Story, try to be less detailed. It's kinda hard to understand what's going on in the story.
Mega M chapter 65 . 1/15/2016
Sorry got to excited guess i should of took consideration of how much trouble it take to edit and post
Mega M chapter 64 . 1/15/2016
Where is the new chapter things are finally starting to get good and the chapter is late
Mega M chapter 61 . 1/4/2016
Where are you it 2016 you just can't abandon the story like this think of sonic, the other characters petrified and the us fans o in other words please continue
somas35 chapter 3 . 9/26/2015
Im only on the first chapter but MAN the references! there are so many good ones in there, and that's just the first chapter. I wonder if we will see comix zone, or tekken, or...ecco the dolphin (that would be interesting).
Mega M chapter 55 . 7/24/2015
Happy birthday
TheM3ntosmaker chapter 53 . 7/22/2015
This is a great story. Keep up the good work.
Mega M chapter 51 . 6/29/2015
Good chapter
Mega M chapter 45 . 3/27/2015
Continue great story
Guest chapter 1 . 12/4/2014
Make more chapter please!
Luna Goddess of the Night chapter 17 . 9/9/2013
Well, now that I've had a look, I can provide some concrit.

""Then that settles it! Everyone can start mobilizing to make sure that Operation: Subspace Unleashed is commenced," said Eggman as the villains followed his orders. Reala created a portal for him, Mishaela, Neff, and Max D. Cap to enter for the necromancy of more members. Trouble Bruin hops into his pod shaped mech and fly towards the robot labs for the eventual recreation of Warhead and Mr. X with the material he found. Satan and Greedy hover out side the hole with a few containers of subspace to create the henchmen. Everyone other villain steps outside to tell their own separate henchmen the overall plan and how to cooperate with each other. They included soldiers, Morolians, Badniks, KapuKapus, zombies, Nightmaren, ninja, thugs, Puyo, Orbs, rogue dinosaurs, samurai, aliens, demons, monkeys, giants, gunmen, ogres, and many more. Eggman supplies Dr. Bad Boon and Dr. Z the material they need to replicate the bombs in the robot factory downstairs. This gave Eggman the opportunity to start building the warships they need for the invasion with the help of Golden Silver and Purge. Meanwhile, Rokkaku and his massive police force arrive on the scene to impress the others despite being tardy to the party. Within 3 weeks, things were set and ready to launch as things really get serious. The warships were parked outside the base for each person to handle as the henchmen carry the Subspace Corruption Bombs into them. Satan releases the shadowy beings that would later attack Sonic and friends into the slots so that they can be dispensed in a form of smoke. Mishaela steps out of the portal with a few familiar faces like Selvaria Bles, Azel, Father Balder, Dark Raven, Zeed, and the Vortex Queen (who required a bigger portal to leave). Trouble Bruin hovers towards the last warship with the new and improved Warhead and Mr. X, both which looks even stronger thanks to his technology. Eggman hovers towards the Legion of Subspace in a black outfit with a black mask in a new black Eggpod he made."

I pulled this peace out, as you have multiple paragraphs that need to be seperated. Reading a huge wall of text can hurt the eyes, and turn readers off. Also, you use the numeral, instead of the written word for the number 2. Instead of writing numbers, write out the whole word, like "two, three, etc."

You seem to have problems with past and present tense. This can also turn your readers off. Best to pick a POV, and stick with it. That way, there should be no problems.

And I don't mean to offend, but at times, this did feel like a video game. But where was the emotion? Emotion is a key part of any story, and that is how you get your readers. I would suggest to put on some music to help you capture the emotion while you type.

Commas, remember commas. If you need help figuring out where to put them, read your sentences out loud, and see where the pauses are. Always helps.

I didn't really see anything I liked, nor did I know the fandom very well, so I am afraid I couldn't comment anywhere else. I'm sorry.

-Luna, The Council
Very-Bored-Anon chapter 14 . 8/14/2013
Ryo Hazuki is 18 YEARS OLD!
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