|Reviews for Don't Say A Word|
| dreams and desperation chapter 1 . 10/5
Aw, so tragic!
| Guest chapter 1 . 8/9
| SibunaMockingjay chapter 1 . 8/4
What an ending! Perfect! It's so good how you wrote it and the style 3
| hollyhobbit101 chapter 1 . 8/5
This is such a good story. I really like how you gave Lavinia, one of the more background characters, a really interesting and well-developed story. And that ending was just so amazing!
| I don't have a n chapter 1 . 11/27/2014
That was simply amazing.
You are a very talented author. I hope you will continue writing.
| HybridsRose chapter 1 . 6/27/2014
Wow, this was really dark and sad. I cried metaphorical buckets whilst reading this. I think this is definitely a story worth reading.
Firstly, I love the characterization behind Lavina, how you've given her a past, and shown us some similarities she had to the district people's sufferings, which we could easily emphasize with as readers of THG.
Secondly, I loved the description. Every line felt perfect, and in place, and it was just so beautiful. Especially the lines about district 12. You really portrayed a sense of happiness and tension there, the ending was the most tragic. I wasn't expecting the scene where she got her tongue cut off (even though it's never mentioned in the books, we know it must've happened) and the lack of description there allowed me to imagine the horror for myself.
I think this is one of the best Lavina fanfictions I've ever read, and I don't say that lightly.
| finnicko-loves-anniec chapter 1 . 6/26/2014
I really enjoyed this story! It was nice to get a more complicated back story for an Avox than the usual 'I made Snow angry' line. Your spelling and grammar look fantastic! My only criticism is in the route they take out of the Capitol. Why do they have to go through each of the districts in numerical order? On the Hunger Games Wiki, it suggests that District 10 is located around Texas (which makes sense with the district's livestock rearing), so it should be one of the closer districts to the Capitol. Also, how do these two Capitol-y looking people go unnoticed through the outer districts? Those are really pretty nit-picky concern though. Your prose is very well-written. This was really good!
| demigoddesses chapter 1 . 12/31/2013
First off - that slam when you realize where the title's from? ;-; oucchhh aaaah
I love Lavinia's characterization - her beauty, her voice, her curse. Her backstory is really well written. And the portrayal of the Capitol, I think, is spot on.
Antony and Lavinia. ;-; That scene where she wants to visit her family but can't is probably my favorite.
Overall I really liked this. Great job!
| Ninazadzia chapter 1 . 12/28/2013
Now that's a damn good one-shot. Interesting take on the avox girl's life and backstory; I like how you wrote her as naive rather than heroic, and Antony as trustworthy rather than her Romeo. The entire fic felt very, very real to me. My only complaint is that Lavinia saw Katniss, and she immediately thought, "stay safe if your district! Don't leave!" I think a more realistic reaction would've been "effing save me!" But, then again, that's just my opinion.
Otherwise, very nicely done.
| blisterkissed chapter 1 . 12/20/2013
In your first paragraph, it's peculiar how you say "A curse which condemned her from the start," since most of the time, beauty is associated with all things good. (Except for maybe arrogance.) It pulls the reader in.
"Tired of not recognizing that stupid girl in her mirror." Wow, what a strong sentence. This gives her the sense of being kind of disappointed in herself, which I think fits well with the idea of her being so hopeful and somewhat naive at the beginning. She's matured.
I wonder how long it might take her to scrub off all the dyes, though? Since the are dyes, I would assume a while. It might be nice to be given some more details on that, and what she was feeling while she did it, if anything at all.
"This was her home now." But she didn't think it was home.
With all that she does "for the Capitol," I'm slightly surprised that she allows Antony to touch her. Is their relationship platonic? (Physically.) I would assume that practically being a sex toy would make her squirm around physical contact.
"All Lavinia could wish for was that the Capitol would never find her." Heartbreaking.
This is really good, I enjoy the background you give her character.
| lydiamartins chapter 1 . 8/27/2013
Your background story and all of the descriptive details that you put in to create a more fleshed out version of Lavinia's character who wasn't that really well fleshed out during the original books is very nice and made this a more enjoyable read; parts of this oneshot were confusing but after a few rereads everything seemed to make more sense. The ending was made out of simpler sentences, but it carried a deeper meaning especially the last line; "And so Lavinia said nothing. Not a word. Not ever again." Lavinia's description of Katniss was nice too, :) Loved this!
| marblesharp chapter 1 . 8/26/2013
You indicate there was trafficking of not only desirable victors but ordinary district children as well. When we know there's victor-whoring in canon, it's not exactly surprising that the Capitol would also steal children for a profit. However, it does seem a bit extreme for them to target district children because it'd take so much effort while there are children in the Capitol - as awful as that is to consider. So what happened to Lavinia is possible but not really plausible.
Anthony invites Lavinia kind of last-minute on a plan he's been working on intricately for months? If there was more of him and their relationship, and perhaps Lavinia helping with the escape plan, his invivation would be more believable since it's apparent they trust each other. This is just a nitpick, though.
All that aside, I like your writing, and your backstory for Lavinia as well as her foreshadow-y musings about Katniss at the end are interesting. It's a nice setup for when Katniss meets her again.
| an image de cowardice chapter 1 . 8/25/2013
Tears. Freaking tears. Your one-shot made tears fall down my face. This was perfect, I love how you wrote her. Just perfect.
| carolineshine22 chapter 1 . 8/10/2013
This is cleverly written! I never thought of Lavinia's life like this, great work!
| Estoma chapter 1 . 6/1/2013
Shotty first review! (I love getting the first review in)
What a chilling idea. I hadn't thought of this before, but of course, it does make sense that the Capitol would recruit prostitutes from the Districts, because why would they do that to one of their own unless they had transgressed? And then who really wants to sleep with someone who is a traitor? Nice imaginings!
I like the use of the lines to separate the various segments. Can be so hard on a screen sometimes to see where paragraphs begin and end so this is a nice technique to make sure we don't get lost.
While I did like the fic, there were some parts that had the feel of a fairytale to them. Just in the tone. Particularly the first paragraph, especially with lines of description, eg, her hair being like the rising sun. The parts I liked best were those with more showing and less telling, for example, here: [He put his hands along her back. She inched away from his touch. He leaned in to kiss her lips. She pushed him away.] and when you mention a bolted door! Excellent.
The very last line: [And so Lavinia said nothing. Not a word. Never again.], I feel like you could do without. In my opinion, it would be a stronger ending if you just ended with the dialogue. Something like: [The cold man smiled. "Don't say a word."] Just my opinion though :)
Wonderful work! Love it!