Reviews for Harry Potter and the Dragon's Heir, Year 2 - The Chamber of Secrets
Evil Mockingbird chapter 5 . 2/20
I love this fic, but there's one thing I've noticed, both in this story and in book 1, about Seamus Finnegan's accent. The way you write it reads much more as a Scottish accent; the Irish accent, particularly in northern Ireland, is really quite clipped and precise. The constants are a lot harsher and the vowels are breathier, making it quite difficult to write in a way the Scottish accent isn't. Rowling mostly uses colloquialisms like "mam" to show Seamus is Irish rather than writing the accent precisely because it's so difficult to article in written form. Peaky Blinders is a good show to get a feel for the accent.

Loving the story so far!
sanbeegoldiewhitey chapter 1 . 9/26/2017
You need help. You like the bad guys in the Potter universe.
phoenixfelicis07 chapter 15 . 5/17/2016
I'm loving your perspective on Harry's development if he had been sorted into Slytherin... The only problem I have is a couple of dates you mention throughout the book: for instance, you place an event in the middle of October, and then say Halloween is 3 weeks later. I don't remember how exactly you worded it, but that was the impression I got, so I would just recommend being aware of how you are describing your timeline... I think it got better as the book went on though. Oh, the other major one was Draco's party over the summer being a few weeks after they picked up Harry, but they picked him up on the 24th of July and Harry said his birthday was the day after Draco's party. By the way, what exactly was the party for? In both books you put Draco's birthday at the end of the school year, so was it just a random summer get together?
Overall I'm really liking the way you're developing these characters and I look forward to the next book (which I'm off to start reading right now!). I truly admire how you are so dedicated to staying true to canon as much as possible, but adding your own delightful deviations as they're warranted. I also very much enjoyed your exploration of Quidditch and I hope Slytherin will find itself having better luck next year, despite Flint.
Well done.
David-El chapter 11 . 6/26/2015
Not bad, but I think I read just WHY Snape is a terrible teacher for occlumency: because he was first taught by Voldemort. As a result of his teaching methods, Snape can't teach it any other way. As it is, I ran across two other ways for Harry to occlude his mind. First, instead of locking his emotions away, he USES them as his shield. The other method was created by Robert Jordan called the flame and void. In this method, you feed your passions into a flame and let everything else just fade into a void.
0rigami chapter 8 . 3/1/2015
Its a bit silly to write advices when i know i am barely midway thepublished chapters, but... isnt this fic getting a bit too focused on harry? I mean, from one side it seems like there are only 2nd years now (the quidditch match against gryffindor a good example of that, with both the 2 addition to the team and the substitute commenter) but also howother slytherin are suddenly changing what must be a deep worldview about muggleborn just because another 2nd year says so. It just... does not make much sense.
Larenars chapter 15 . 12/29/2014
Very realistic changes in characters. Great story.
tommyboynv chapter 15 . 12/18/2014
Year 2 was a good year. I'm pleased by the early progress you have Harry starting to benefit from. Keep up the good work...onto Year they get time turners with all those classes?
Gwendolyn McCormick chapter 15 . 10/4/2014
I thought it was brilliant that you skipped Harry's birthday in the beginning of the story. I was even complaining about it because I noticed it and then there it was with Draco saying "OMG Why didn't you say anything?!" and I was thrilled. Totally and utterly thrilled. This one made me giggle and gasp and just brilliant. D
Peaceful Dragon Rose chapter 15 . 7/12/2014
good story
OneHellOfAMarshmellow chapter 15 . 7/3/2014
.god. YESSSS! You know how there are those fanfics that when they updates you're like " oh yay this is exciting" and then there are those other fanfics were u see they updated and you just lile fall too the floor squealing and run around the house and are practically shaking as you open up the next chapter. Yours is the second. Thank you so much.
Guest chapter 15 . 7/1/2014
Am sorry that I can't remember the first one of this story but I will look forward to the next one when it come's !

The Crimson Mage.
T. H. Enesley chapter 3 . 7/1/2014
I'm constantly amazed at writers who believe they own their own characters they introduce on this site. If you put it here you cannot stop it discrimination. Good luck.
Notasavior chapter 15 . 7/1/2014
What a lovely close to the end of book 2. I think that stories where Harry doesn't kill the Basilisk are some of my favorites, do you intend on using it later on? I think that'd be great, well done and I can't wait to start book 3!
Hoffindor chapter 15 . 7/1/2014
He's not going to start being chummy with all the Weasleys is he because that would just ruin the whole story for me. Don't do that to my fragile psyche.
mudbloodpotter05 chapter 14 . 6/3/2014
Hopefully Harry will learn to trust him more. Snape that is.

I do wonder when we will be learning that it was Hermione and at least lavender and pavarti who ployjuiced themselves and learned Harry was a snake speaker?

Keep up the amazing work!
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