Reviews for With Nothing Else |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Oh. OH HOLY SHIT! That's right, I was following this too! This is the one Rei x Shinji that I managed to love right? Yup, there it is! Let's see. -THERE ARE SPOILERS IN THIS REVIEW- -he was just so worried and stress out - Should be "he was just so worried and stressed out" -pushing the girl to hard - In this case it's too: "pushing the girl too hard" -in other instances you use 'to' instead of 'too' again... -The fifth child is actual an angel - Should be "The fifth child is actually an angel" -Just those and the repeatetive instances of 'to' instead of 'too'. Good job. Ha! I knew Misato would go for Shinji. Drunken stupor after Kaji's death FTW. But IS Kaji really dead I wonder... Oh man, Maya chan putting the pressure t UP. Poor Misato will be all alone won't she? It's cute how Maya is all shy and Ritsuko is all open. The switch from Rei to the two other still seemed kind of off for me though. Especially with all the Rei x Shinji goodness this had in the beginning. Let's just see where this s going, especially with Lilith\Rei still around. Hm, Kaworu's entrance was a bit simple, no? That's not how you introduce the messenger of free will. At least they reanected the shower in the base scene with Shinj having the proper reaction of shock and wondering if it's okay to be his friend, instead of accepting him completely and taking lov from whoevr will give it to him (which led to more loss in canon and all that jazz). It'll sadly be a mistake I fear, Shinji... Holy crap, Maya's Shinji and Kaworu interacting is somethng I don't think I have seen before. Good work! Terrified Maya FTW! Also nice how Ritsuko got in contact with her. Danm, how hard is Kaworu's death going to be I wonder. LOL now that is a perfect way to get Misato's attention: "I ampregnant with Shinji Ikari's baby." Hahaha. And of course she's sorry Shinji is Kaworu's friend. And now that the battle aproaches I'm on the edge of my seat... Even torn apart Shinji tries to reason. Amazing how this was something he tried so little in canon ith Kaworu, just going "you betrayed me like my father whee whee whee!" At least... wait.. WHA-?! Ayanami?! What?! Pulled off Kaworu's head- WHAT?! Holy- Gendo's hand- WHAT?! Holy shit that was intense. And it broke Shinji to the point he moved out of Maya's place, just like in canon at this point... Well just don't make him masturbate to Asuka's comatose body. And don't end the world either. Can't wait for the nex one! |
![]() ![]() Masterful as ever. Like a car crash you don't want to look ,but, can't help it as everything falls down who will be left at the end and how will they be? Can't wait till the next episode. Though dreading it as things will get far worse before they get better if they do? I hope they do myself. |
![]() ![]() ![]() yay |
![]() ![]() ![]() cute, i liked it |
![]() ![]() ![]() I wonder... is Rei I/II's soul back in Rei III's body? Or did the two souls merge, I wonder? I can't wait to find out. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great chapter so many emotions I can't wait for more and with Lilith free to do what she wants oh man this can't be good |
![]() ![]() ![]() Damn, this updated with 'Shnji and the doctor' and I didn't realize it had updated until now. -THERE ARE SPOILERS IN THIS REVIEW- -you don't look to good Akagi - In this case it's 'too': -you don't look too good. This one repeats itself SEVERAL times... Learn to use 'too'. -this cell unless you're life is on the line - In this case it's 'your': -this cell unless your life is -where they bigger - AUGH! in this case it's 'were': -were they bigger -You want to don't you. - Questions requires question mark: -You want to don't you? -unit-00 existed its elevator - Um, I think you meant 'exited': -unit-00 exited its elevator -That's all. Seriously, work out the "too" and "to" issues. Aw man, they still got Ritsuko... Ugh will somebody please kill Gendo Painfully? I've yet to see a fic where this bastard is tortured to death... This is some heavy shit. And once again Shinji doesn't break and lash out at Misato... would be nice to see that more often, considering how bad Misato screw up with him considering the view point. Ahh, so subtle Asuka. No they didn't fuck. And the subject of her mother being brought up is actually quite good. Let's see how the next Angel goes. Oh boy, the next Angel is the stringy one that Rei kills by killing herself! Is Rei going to die for good I wonder... Holy Shit, Rei is pregnant? Can't know that just yet. Also, very disturbing cntorcionism there girl... yikes. Aw man, Asuka's rise to the challenge was AWESOME! The despair of seeing unit 00 and the Angel uniting, along with how it would swallow Shinji, making her finally ask her mother for help! That was amazing. Ah, that's not Rei, that's Lilith. Nice reveal tough, kept me n the dark the whole tme... Did Asuka make it I wonder? And of course it cuts to Maya and Shinji before explaining anything... from the looks of Maya and Shinji's interaction I don't think anything happened to Asuka but... holy shit... it did... Asuka and Rei... holy shit... now that was a surprise... Oh yeah that's right, Makoto and Aoi are a thing. I'm happy he's popping the question. Let's see how that goes. HOLY SHIT Asuka is still be alive?! LOL You sneaky bastard, pulling one off like that! Though she did go into a coma in the manga. And catatonic in the anime. Oh right... Kaworu is also still to show his face here... Oh boy... Um... I don't think keel curses. Also nice to see Gendo being bashed, but I still want to see him tortured to death. Especially now that he is goint to use Shinji to draw in Rei III. Feels like the next chapter is the last... Can't wait! |
![]() ![]() ![]() great chapter, terrible events. i eagerly await your endgame. |
![]() ![]() I hope you don't kill asuka she and misato are very important characters. I don't know what you have planned it's looking very bad for the good people in this one. |
![]() ![]() ![]() superb as always! |
![]() ![]() I don't know what you have planned for the ending but I hope shinji and asuka have a good result. |
![]() ![]() There name is Horaki not Hokari |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm just hoping for a happy ending for Asuka. Or for her to get to spend time with Shinji/Maya relaxing before the end comes. It just seems so hopeless for her. You've done an awesome job with your characterizations in this story. Especially her. Thank you for such a great fit. Hopefully you have a great time writing this last few chapters. Have fun with it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thanks for the update. I'm sorry to see this fc coming to an end, but i'm glad that it will give you to chance to write another one. |
![]() ![]() ![]() good chapter, like always please continue soon. |