|Reviews for hera|
| Cricket Valdez chapter 6 . 12/21/2013
ok um...I don't hate nico I love him so... um...yeah...
| Foxface chapter 5 . 10/20/2013
When did Jason get their? Who's Phoebe? Spelling errors. This is for the last chapter:
You didn't have Dumbledore give his speech. There are spelling errors. No emotion. She should be paniced. SHE SHOULD AT LEAST ACT CONFUSED! Hermione should be noticing that she doesn't know much about the wizarding world. Back to story itself:
It is very vauge. There are a few puncuation mishaps. Chapters are rather short. All in all not the best I've ever read.
| Foxface chapter 2 . 10/20/2013
You REALLY need to describe more, and put some emotion in to it. In the first chapter Hermione should be suspicous! Annabeth doesn't seem the least bit scared, or confused. She should have been amazed that the hat could sing and talk. She should have heared what the hat was saying. Completely unbelieveable and quite frankly not very good.
| Foxface chapter 1 . 10/20/2013
This is okay, I can see the makings of a good story though. There are a few grammatical errors. I don't think British people say "Hun" I could be wrong though. In dialoug you should say who said what. There really wasn't a whole lot of emotion on Annabeth's part she didn't seem scared or really confused. Keep writing, I'll keep reading!
| Supercell-ak chapter 5 . 10/16/2013
You need to explain and describe more when you write.
| AwesomeDolphin chapter 5 . 10/9/2013
I love this chapter, update more and faster!
| Heyitsthecats chapter 5 . 10/9/2013
Woah, what is happening? Jason is there too? Woah, can't wait for the next chapter!
| Fast Frank chapter 4 . 10/1/2013
Well this chapter didn't advance the plot, much. Conceding that it's been over half a century since I went to school with eleven year old girls, I simply can't believe that Annabeth's dorm mates haven't figured out something is VERY wrong. Fourth Believability fail.
Rewrite this mess with the premise that Annabeth has false memories overlaid over her real ones, then as they break down, she recovers her real memories.
| Fast Frank chapter 2 . 10/1/2013
Third believability fail: No memory, strange situation, no panic, she doesn't even think to ask Hagid or McGonagall for help. Is Annabeth in the magical equivalent of being drugged to the gills?
| Fast Frank chapter 1 . 10/1/2013
Stylistic failure: "two kids my age" - We have no way of knowing what age Annabeth is, until the very end of the chapter, when we can surmise she is eleven.
First believability fail: "Your smart, what's your name, Hun?" (You're) How can she possibly know that?
Second believability fail: Not knowing about the houses is one thing, but not knowing what Hogwarts is? Automatic red flags to the fourteen year olds. Hermione would immediately suspect an Oblivate.
| RiverHolly13086 chapter 2 . 6/11/2013
Interesting, I think Hermione and Annabeth have alot in common. They're both quite smart and brave an always getting their friends out of trouble. Infact the two books have alot in common if you think. Update soon. Good luck and happy writing!
| RiverHolly13086 chapter 1 . 6/9/2013
Hmm interesting, I love both Harry Potter and Percy Jackson so I'm excited to see how this goes. I am going to sound very Hippocritical cause I do this too but perhaps a bit more detail describing things, maybe a Beta would help, you know just proofread the chapters. I could Beta read if you want, PM if you're interested. But I can't wait for the next chapter. Good luck and happy writing!