This was really good! Seems like it had a lot of potential if you'd wanted to go further with it, but it went on just far enough to get the point across as is. Light is no less evil than before, but a hell of a lot more careful and systematic.

Thats amazing! Write more pls

Man i really want this to continue .

I wish you continued this fanfiction, I was really excited until I realized there was only a single chapter. Though I can understand why you wouldn't continue, with a rational Light Yagami it's difficult for the battle of wits between L and Light Yagami to actually happen. For example, Lind L. Taylor wouldn't die in this scenario, which makes it more difficult for L to further prove the existence of Kira and figure out the location. It's a difficult story to write, but I'm sure with enough hard work it can be done.

If I had the opportunity, I would make this story myself. But I'm not a good enough writer. I would need to support of others and my only role would be presenting ideas. This chapter alone is impressive and it's definitely something I'm going to reread in the future.

Damn... I wished this was continued...

Well. This guy certainly seems much smarter than that guy from the anime. Also less insane. Aha I loved this fic!

Good story, sad it was never finished.

I’ve really enjoyed this first chapter! If you ever feel like updating, I would’ve very happy. Thanks for writing! :)

So...What's the difference here?

There is literally no difference between this story and the original Death Note. NONE! All you did was have Light ask some worthless questions that only padded the story. It added nothing to the characters, changed nothing, and...like most rational fics I have found so far, was boring!

Interesting perspective, definitely. Although the… insanity? was only really visible in dialogue with Ryuk, I felt. There might have been a bit of a breakdown in the shower, (liked the 'charming habit', by the way) and the focus on the notebook especially after, but it didn't feel like a psychotic break, if that was what you wanted to portray…
I look forward to seeing more of this, and if Light will go beyond judging criminals, and condemn, for example, the bosses of weapon's manufacturing companies and the like (perhaps even some politicians, like he wanted to become, wouldn't that be ironic)…
So keep up the good work, if you're still into it!

I like this light

A less annoying Light, for sure. Seems like he could have chosen to remain undetected, but is making a statement, and it's sad that it was last updated 2 years ago.

Hi, it looks like it might take years for you to rewrite the first ten chapters, and I think I might really enjoy the old version also if it's less good.

Would it maybe be possible for you to send it to me?

Thanks so much!

Good stuff. I liked it

Hi~!¡!¡!

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