Reviews for To Break Thy Chains and Cycles
Ranmaleopard chapter 6 . 2/15
This is just awesome I can't wait for more!
wyatt.eason.37 chapter 6 . 1/24
please update soon ive read this story 5 times now its good but cant wait for the next chapter
justsomepeople2 chapter 6 . 1/21
Hoping the next chapter will come sometime soon. It's been more than a year. :(
gogo199432 chapter 6 . 1/11
This was a great story, too bad you didn't continue it :/
Guest chapter 6 . 12/31/2014
Please update
Lord Asmodeus chapter 1 . 12/20/2014
You seem to have a strong hatred of slavery. It's quite illogical, slavery continues in a more subtle form to this day, and in some countries although not legal, such laws continue.

The Sith ideal here has also been greatly polluted, of course I can understand why you may add other ideologies for stability, however the hierarchy of the Empire are far too emotional. Far to prone to weak empathy.

Harry Potter himself is quite weak. A man adorning the mask of a child, naive and purposely shunning the brutal reality of the world.

The simple acceptance of the magical world by the Muggles is also very unlikely. Humans fear the unknown. And magic is one of the greatest of unknowns. Even if magic does have several - numerous - benefits, the fear would consume in the end. And in fear like any mammal humans either flee or strike. More often than naught in deviations within humanity, humans choose the option to strike. They react aggressively. Violence ensues. As such this is vile idealism.

The Vampires. They could have been great tools for war. Yet you simply decided on their genocide because apparently using humans as cattle is like slavery, and thus Vampires are slavers whom must be immediately eliminated. Feed them prisoners, feed them political enemies. Feed them the mongrels of society.

Your twisted philanthropy is also quite annoying. Especially the repetition of 'only human after all'. Humans are animals as well. The way you speak of humans seems absurdly liberal and humanistic. Humans are predators, not prey like you portray them to be.

The Enforcers of the Emperor, using the Veela was quite smart of you. However you portrayed Scarlet as very weak, she sobbed at the sight of malnourished xeno. In public an Enforcer sobbed. How pathetic is that.

The Empire also seems far too accepting. It would be simply more logical to purge the xeno instead of investing resources into saving them. Harry could have easily conditioned them as xenophobes. Yet their compassion makes them weak. You can still easily use the death of the slaves by the apparent hands of the slavers as propaganda material to make the war more justified.

Also in the military people do not 'coo' over the injured. Especially xenos whom in human point of view are simple barbaric aggressors.

On another point, why negotiate with the Citadel? Using the hyperdrives alone the Empire has such astonishing advantage over the Citadel that they should be bowing down to the Empire. The Empire could simply target any Citadel colony, and purge it of life. Efficient and quick. A treaty imitating the Versailles could be then enacted. Of course for there not to be another xeno Hitler, you simply subtly purge the xeno into a weak force.
Wolfman217 chapter 6 . 12/8/2014
please update
Ferous20 chapter 6 . 11/27/2014
Loving it please use update
What to see how it will go
fatesmask chapter 6 . 10/21/2014
nice start but i am curious if harry and flear have any childeren
Lord Asmodeus chapter 6 . 10/5/2014
This is quite good, and very entertaining. The only problem I have is the Empire's actions concerning the slaves. It would be preposterous to house them. It would be better to take the economically safe method of purging all xeno, including the slaves, and then allow the humans to colonise.
regfurby chapter 6 . 9/19/2014
Awesome story!

I'd like to point out that in Chapter 6, it was mentioned that 'a dozen Turians' attacked a Sith position during the battle against the slavers, when I'm thinking it should be Batarians instead?

Anyway, really believable backstory and nice introduction to the Infinite Empire, along with all the Codex Entries that make it really interesting to read. Can tell that a lot of planning went into the story. Although I wonder how the Empire maintains its armed forces? The Sith Empire in Star Wars heavily makes use of clone troopers as their main troops, thus creating an easily 'replaceable' army, which I don't think Harry would do in this case...

Looking forward to the next chapter and the Turian 'invasion' force being crushed completely!
Silverscale chapter 6 . 9/3/2014
I so wish there will be Dragons and possibly Hydras in this story, those creatures are totally awesome. :D
HappyEndingsFtw chapter 6 . 8/28/2014
Give us more! loved the start, can't wait for citadel - emperor interaction :)
xarvet chapter 6 . 8/20/2014
Love the story Hope to see an update soon
moosejuice5 chapter 6 . 7/31/2014
loving this fic so far, i really hope you write more.
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