How could you mark this complete. It is horrible when an author looses interest, has a dry spell, or family problems, but you marked it complete mid thought. You didn’t leave it open ended and left for interpretation. You didn’t leave a hea, but you imagine a life with kids, you left it mid thought and called it complete. Maybe I should have read the reviews, but I have never run into a marked complete fic that really wasn’t. For the future when you mark your fic complete you don’t leave it mid thought. Leave them married and without kids, or together and left to imangination if they get married, but this is far from complete. If you don’t know the difference I hope you do before you keep on doing this to people. And I would tell you this under my account, but I lost me passcode long ago. Dawn

Ummm what’s with the last sentence in this chapter? You’re eventually going to kill off Jacob? Thank god I’m reading this as a complete story. A cliffie like that could cause an anxiety attack.

Thanks you for writing!

This Bella right now kind of sucks. I've experienced a lot of loss and depression and many people's reactions to bad circumstances in life. And nothing like his has ever happened. But, we're supposed to believe she completely shuts down because her ill father dies while she's not talking to him? And she has no concern for her mother (who is really the more injured party) or her children?

Edwards encouragement of Jacob is weird
Bella's acceptance is weird
Jacob living with them still is weird
He kissed her on the lips with Edwards consent _ that plan was real/ is still real
Naive

Get Jacob out of the god damn house

Holy Mother of cliffhangers! I fucking loved it! Pardon my French

What is gitty? Did you mean giddy [for the second time}?

The is no child in the world that would say "misdirection"- ever.
I've been reading this for almost 6 days, only to see it's still not finished. All these things you've alluded to may never have an explanation. Sad.
Can't believe I'm about to flounce, I could have read at least 3 long fics by now.
It's a good story, but flawed.

In Chapter 20 Savannah birthday is the 16th. I'm really confused.

SO Savannah didn't have a birthday on the 16th?

Wrong - 2am in DC is 11pm west coast not 5am.

Here's what I know to be a fact - the story is outstanding. Very compelling story-line. Well thought out character development, even with the new characters you've introduced. And, on that I applaud you, almost know one the guts to deviate from canon.
However, if I would have tried to read this as a WIP I would have been gone 5 chapters into the 1st installment. I don't leave negative reviews. You desparetly need a Beta or at least a pre-reader.

You're an amazing writer with the ability to captivate many. My only advice would be to change the description bit on part one, to make it more gripping. This story deserves more people reading it and I think that would help. I really enjoyed the style of this story and look forward to reading your other stories. I would also like to thank you for opening up my eyes to the world of fame. Fantastic writing.

loved…off to read the next part!