Reviews for In Bad Faith
Guest chapter 6 . 4/12
And while we're on the subject, why did it become your responsibility to single handedly defeat Voldemort and create an army of your own? You're an actual person thrown into a fictional world, and that's your first thought?
So if you end up being born in Germany during the 30s, your first thought as a child would be, I'm going to stop Hitler ans defeat him all by myself. It's my responsibility.
How do you even go about doing that? It's ridiculous. You're just one person. It took millions working together with no actual just one person being in charge or the 'the leader'.
It took hundreds and maybe thousands to defeat Voldemort the first and second time, with everyone working together to do so.
Dumbledore was an actual genius of a wizard and had 150 years old or something of experience to pull the plans he did, Hermione was a genius and a child and she struggled way more than your character. You might say she didn't have the resources that your character had, but neither would anyone else in real life.
Guest chapter 6 . 4/12
Why do stories like this always over-do it, I just don't understand it.
You had something so beautiful with so much potential. The writing is simply amazing, but then you go and just do so much and turn your character into a Mary Sue, and oh, she really is one, no matter how much the story tries to deny it (which isn't how it works, you know).
Do you think that a child of 8 or 9 years old would be regarded in the same way as it is in your story?
If you're in your 30s, do you think you would commission a child, no matter how smart they are, to do your bidding?
Do you see, I don't know, NASA employing those 10 year old geniuses we often heat about in the news?
It's just ridiculous, I'm sorry. Even nobles in the middle ages do not talk/act they way your characters do with actual child royalties.
And, on that point, why is your character suddenly a genius? You refereed to their past life as them being a student, and just that.
Now they suddenly turn into a genius who can do everything? It's a bit odd.
Why would a child with an older person's conscious be able to threaten characters who were established to be extremely intelligent and calculated with at least 3 decades worth of experience over you in this life just because she read a few books and took some classes.
And your character is still a child, you know. Her mind and body still has actual physical limitations. I know you want to establish a genius and then show how she got there, but this isn't the way to do it. You don't just throw an abnormal amount of learning and training at her and expect it to just work itself through.
Actual adult geniuses would struggle to learn half the things she's learning, and you could just give her a few weaknesses, you know. Make her relatable instead of someone who knows everything and gets to win every confrontation thrown at her. It gets a bit tiring after a while.
And you venture too much into building new worlds and characters and themes and laws that you stretch your plot really thin and it juat comes out a bit chaotic.
I understand that teens in this site like these types of story, it's clear from the 1000 reviews that just says great and amazing without actually reviewing the story, but this could've been much better.
Again, I really do love the overall writing and sometimes even the dialog is great, though a bit artificial and angsty at times, but you had the potential to do something amazing with this and it just ended up as another overcomplicated Mary Sue SI by a writer who couldn't decided what his character's role is, so they just ended up making them do everything and make the world revolve around them.
Word of advice, whem writing about geniuses, you might as well then do a bit of research about GENIUSES and study how they come to be.
Guest chapter 6 . 1/24
Came back to reread. This has been my comfort fanfiction. Made me curious about the blacks and the malfoys. It's been 10 years and you still have readers, a testament to the wonderful story you've created
Guest chapter 1 . 6/24/2023
"He's a pussy"
That phrase probably sums up the MC the best.
Hariana Halone chapter 6 . 3/31/2023
I'm so sad that this story is abandoned, if anyone knows of a similar one, I would really like to have the link, The MC is awesome!I like the way she is. She's not the stupidly heroic type wanting to kill Voldy for the sake of complete strangers, no she wants to save herself . She knows that her family is not the best, as long as they are correct, she supports them lol. She'll make a wonderful Ravenclaw, a Slytherin these talents, her way of being will be wasted. She said it herself, she doesn't like people in Slytherin, she will have to socialize, In Gryffindor she will not have my peace of mind and Hufflepuff too, Ravenclaw is perfect. She could drag the two blacks behind her, the Carrows could be hufflepuff with their attitude. It's a shame that the story is incomplete.
Alan975 chapter 5 . 2/19/2023
it is not every day that i read something that makes me laugh like a hyena, but when i do i wake everyone upp
kagekitsune76 chapter 6 . 11/16/2022
I would actually give all my kidneys for this to be continued
reberebecca chapter 6 . 10/1/2022
Una storia interessantissima. Peccato che non ci siamo più capitoli. Proprio quando iniziava il più bello. Infatti ero curiosissima di vedere l’approccio con Harry come sarebbe stato. Spero che continuerai a scrivere questa meravigliosa storia.
reberebecca chapter 2 . 9/30/2022
Allora premetto che non avevo molte aspettative sa questa fic invece mi ha conquistata. Una scrittura originale e ben curata. Complimenti!
Flaum chapter 5 . 8/17/2022
its good you guys understand
lasslowerence chapter 6 . 6/12/2022
awesome story, a shame its dropped
Guest chapter 6 . 6/1/2022
This is such a wonderful beginning of a story, it is a shame that it is dead.
Ptolemyspyjamas chapter 4 . 5/20/2022
Most of the Death Eaters surrendering makes sense if you take into account Dumbledore. Dumbledore trashed Voldemort in OotP, he was younger during the war. They lost their nuke so to speak.
DarkSwanQueen777 chapter 1 . 5/15/2022
I'm extremely mad at myself to even start reading a dead story. still it is very good and I. sad that it died. it has so much potential. With your permission, I'll take the concept to my own story. won't be the same. I am no where near as smart as you but I could try
blisscity chapter 6 . 5/2/2022
this fic is so written wonderfully. like, it really has harry potter vibes. it got those fancy british words. i really like all the characters, especially MC. i love her concept of family and how she's willing to do everything for her love ones. She's perfect. i would love to see her sorted to slytherin. ravenclaw would suit her as well but i think she possessed slytherin qualities more. she's so noble and charismatic. i like her so much. i wanna see her infect everyone in slytherin with these qualities. i want to see her change what everyone thinks of slytherin.
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