|Reviews for On Her Wings|
| dassdasd chapter 11 . 2/25
WHY ARE YOU DELAYING IT FURTHER PLZZZZZZZZZ WRITE MORE PLZ
| Guest chapter 11 . 1/3
Come on dude, this is a great story. We need more chapters.
| Kailyn Molyneux chapter 11 . 1/2
Great story and I'm eager to read more! Update soon (:
| Guest chapter 9 . 12/30/2013
Please update, this story is really good
| Guest chapter 9 . 12/29/2013
Please make more stories, i really like this one
| teemo47 chapter 11 . 12/19/2013
Finally, after spent several hours reading, I found this fanfic is one of the most enjoyable story i've read. I really love your Quinn personality, cheerful, a bit childish which make your Quinn cute.
I like her interaction with Kayle especially the scene in the jungle when she tease Kayle about what Kayle might feel about her.
Oh, and the interaction between Quinn and Valor, I just love it!
I hope you can make a new chapter more faster and a bit longer, and I wish you luck in writing this fanfic.
p/s: haha, the summoners might have a priceless experience, watching one of their champions dashing out the room without pants on.
| Guest chapter 11 . 12/17/2013
Really good so far! I can't wait for the next chapter
| Mizuki00 chapter 11 . 12/6/2013
... That's all? Well, I won't rush you or anything just yet. Talon, I very much hate in this fic -_-. And in the game too. He always kill me lol...
You gave me inspiration to write again, unfortunately though, laziness hinders my will to right.
I shall be awaitng future chapters! See ya
| Mizuki00 chapter 8 . 12/4/2013
Ashe! Not only can you cool someone down (referring to the slow ability of hers), you can also make someone hot!
| Mizuki00 chapter 7 . 12/4/2013
Author, I just want you to know that I am being a pretty creepy ass right now.
I was grinning the whole time and... I honestly look like a psychopath just ready to unleash my fury...
Great job! And to the previous chapters too!
| Deividog chapter 8 . 11/12/2013
Loved the lemon part of the story and i really enjoyed reading how Kayle struggeld to tell her fellings to Quinn, especially the part in the woods :). But then it kind got boring with all the memories of the past and sekk of vengeance on Talon. Well i just hope that you will keep the romance between Kayle and Quin cuz thats really enjoyable to read :D. Just keep on the good work
| Celery chapter 11 . 11/2/2013
SO hyped about the new chapter! I thought it was great. :)
I can't wait for more. 3
| Turkey in a suit chapter 11 . 10/30/2013
Thanks for the update :)
I'm glad you're continuing with this story and it was interesting to see a bit more about Quinn's past.
Look forward to your next update!
| Winkleson chapter 11 . 10/30/2013
First of all this pairing is very unique yet... so very obvious. I'm pretty suprised there has not been any other stories of the pair. Yet, I digress.
You have alot of good things going for you in this story. First of all your really good at setting a scene with strong descriptions. It isn't just one or two scenes either, you definetly are not a slouch wgen it comes to setting up a scene.
Another thing is your use of emotion. For the most part interaction between characters has been pretty solid so far. Little things like Valor and Quinns interaction make the story your own. A very highly commendable feet.
The other thing your quite good at is showing the growth/development of the characters. The most prominent being Kayle's transformation through her relationship with Quinn but also other characters involvement.
Final bit of praise. Your fight scenes have been really well scripted. Most of them being memorable and well thought out.
Now this review can't all be praise and there are some issues/kinks that could always be improved upon. The foremost being Quinn's journal entries. They are just awkwardly written and cause some serious rereading. It really starts to break up the flow of the story and seems a little unnessisary in places. I know your trying to make it an important plot device to show her relationship with her brother but it's nonesensical. It just doesn't seem to be Quinn's writing to me.
The other thing is the lack of focus on the main plotline (the assasination attempt on Quinn). While the flashbacks are nice and there is some good moments it's good to remember the main plot. Of course this point is negotiable depending in the importance of recent events in the overall plot but it seems like the build up you create (like Morgana or Ashe) just fizzles into nothingness. That being said there is still alot left in the story but don't forget to reread your earlier chapters.. especially when your writing as the thoughts come (my prefered writting style by the way).
Just one last little yhing to address before I wrap this up. I don't think you put enough emphasis on the whole lesbian part of the pairing. There is some but I feelbthere really isn't enough. The main reason being that Quinn never really seems uncomfortable with being with another woman. While that is commendable in a sexist/Hetero setting it feels a little unrealistic. Then again Runeterra is an imaginary place but everyone seems to have strong viewpoints on cintroversal topics... what I'm trying to say is that the pressure of societies "norm" does not seem to be portrayed as well as it could be. The theme seems fundemental to me anyways. But this is your story not mine so use this information as you see fit! :) Anyways...
Overall, you have created a really nice story thus far. While it could use some tweaking here and there I will be looking forward to the next installment!
I wish you best of luck in life, love and literature!
| Sith Tzu chapter 11 . 10/30/2013
It's alive! :D