|Reviews for The Death Carnival|
| Captain Hook chapter 1 . 7/22/2015
Sorry about that, I inadvertently clicked on the "Post Review" button.
Overall: The story piques readers' interests as it has a captivating storyline. However, you may want to find an editor to go through your chapters before posting them as there are some minor mistakes. 8/10
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/22/2015
Sentences are constructed well
Reels people in
- There are occasional grammatical errors
- Paragraphs are extremely short (longer paragraphs can be used to describe and show)
- There are many instances where you are just telling instead of showing
Overall: The story has an original idea which
| Guest chapter 23 . 11/4/2013
| Ace chapter 23 . 10/28/2013
Wait wha? When did you do this?
Oh you used the idea ( ._.)
Unpredictable as usual Liana…
Can't wait to see more :D
| Guest chapter 23 . 10/27/2013
OH MY GODS. HE HAS A SISTER. :) :( IM TOO SHOCKED I RLLY LOVE THIS STORY ! AWESOME AUTHOR! BEST FANFIC LOL
| Lya200 chapter 23 . 10/25/2013
| Guest chapter 23 . 10/25/2013
Nice :) I loved reading this. Keep writing!
| aliciaa chapter 22 . 10/18/2013
Weeeee you listened to my suggestion and we both died! But well i was killed first, meh doesn't matter, i get to torture savannah
| Ace chapter 22 . 10/18/2013
Alicia: *slice* that was for Silver. You killed him.
Ace: *starts to whistle*
The last chapter was a hit! Well you made it fair I suppose, with Hazard shooting a bullet into Savannah's forehead, making nobody survive as the victor.
Oh for the next story, why don't you add Hazard's sister. In the original Hunger Games, Johanna stated that "hey, I heard that Snow even has a granddaughter" when discussing about the Capitol Hunger Games.
| Lya200 chapter 22 . 10/18/2013
I KNEW IT I knew there will b no victor
| MewWinx96 chapter 22 . 10/20/2013
Wow... Wasn't expecting that.
| Guest chapter 21 . 10/18/2013
| LiveLikeThere'sNoTomorrow74 chapter 22 . 10/18/2013
Holy shit was not expecting that... I love this story! Update soon!
| Augvstus chapter 22 . 10/18/2013
Hahahahahaha :D OMG I'm crying of laughter :D THAT WAS PURE GENIUS.
| Ace chapter 21 . 10/13/2013
*plays dramatic music*
*plays This is the End*