|Reviews for The Weapon|
| Greyfalcon01 chapter 8 . 1/12/2014
Sorry for not getting this chapter critiqued earlier, I was sick all last week.
Anyway, onwards ...
The plot continues nicely forward. How interesting that it takes Cas to find out that Sam is in trouble and yank Dean back into the hunt. I like how Cas does such a good job of determining what is really going on with Sam.
Boy is Dean mad! Though this sounds more like the 'blowing off steam' kind of mad. He's threatened to kill Sam repeatedly-when he messes up the Impala, mostly. It's hard to say whether he is serious with his words this time or not.
And Sam? What can I say-poor guy!
The sentences I have trouble with are:
(1) 'Perhaps it is a fluke, Castiel tried to tell himself but it didn't sound very convincing.' Perhaps you should use 'feel' instead of 'sound'?
(2) 'Tim shook his head, "Nope, no one hear but us."' The 'hear' should be 'here'.
I wonder what Lucifer is going to do to these hunters, since he knows roughly where they are (via the janitor/demon from last chapter). You have made them quite reprehensible, congratulations on your success in this area.
Keep up the good work!
| Greyfalcon01 chapter 9 . 1/12/2014
What an interesting turn of events! Sam is mad at Dean, and apparently staying that way! Sam isn't very good at staying mad at people, it should be interesting to see how this works out. His trust in anything is pretty much crushed...but he is very, very stubborn.
As for Dean trying to weasel out of what he said earlier-maybe for a bit. Usually Dean turns it around into an "I'm always right" kind of deal...or he sidesteps the problem entirely. Neither of those behaviors will work here, in this situation, so he might just step back into his role as big brother and try to talk Sammy back into his role. How well that works will be up to Sammy.
The problems I saw with sentences were:
(1) 'Dean crept down the stairs quickly.' Dean doesn't creep unless he is hunting. He'd be more interested in getting down the stairs as fast as he could, which isn't noiseless.
(2) 'His brother didn't respond by Dean saw Sam's shoulders hunch.' The by should be a but.
(3) "Robert, are you feeling unwell?" Castiel asked while Dean seemed to be daydreaming about the female hunter. I just can't see Dean switching to Casanova mode while talking about Sam, especially with nothing going the way he had expected it to. Dean has a single focus perspective; he doesn't multitask well.
I have a problem with the initial assessment that Dean did on Sam. He didn't even notice that his left hand is pretty much useless. He made no mention of the black eyes or broken nose. And the burns on Sam's feet should be very obvious.
Okay, that is the 'bad' part of the review. I like how the story is moving, and how the characters are still in canon. I like the plot. Your plot twists are always good. So keep it up, and let's see where it goes from here!
| BranchSuper chapter 9 . 1/12/2014
Dean may have to put some hard work into mending his relationship with his brother. Sam was very hurt by Dean's rejection even before those rogue hunters caught him, tortured him and made him drink demon blood.
| Jkf340 chapter 9 . 1/12/2014
I feel so bad for the boys
Please update soon
| ToxicTenshi chapter 9 . 1/12/2014
awww. I guess I shouldn't have expected a happy reunion but I didn't think Sam would react that way, though he has a right. Dean screwed up and needs the balls to apologize properly! Poor Sam needs a hug too. I hope they make up soon. Thanks for the update.
| Katlover98 chapter 9 . 1/12/2014
No, Dean, Sammy! Why must they suffer.
Poor Sammy, he's hurt physically and emotionally, it kills me.
Can't wait for the next chapter.
| NAVILLUS chapter 9 . 1/12/2014
Im really enjoying this story. ...
Tx for writing!
| Guest chapter 9 . 1/12/2014
Sammy being hurt would definitely take precedence for Dean! Oh man when Sam tells him the whole story (eventually) those hunters had better watch it, caus
e Dean is gonna be HOMICIDAL! I hope Sam can forgive him soon :( I hate seeng those two fight :(
| 3DBABE1999 chapter 9 . 1/12/2014
I think the balance was perfect .. Big brother Dean is obviously struggling with A-hole Dean and Dean having to hear Cass repeat words he's spoken right back at him, showing him what his stubborness almost caused him (could still cause him) to lose wasn't a very easy home-truth for Dean to face and there was a perfect balance of hurt/limp Sam feeling betrayed... I think you pegged both Sam's and Dean's characters right on the heads, they were both really perfect in this Chapter!
| sarah chapter 9 . 1/12/2014
Glad Sam is giving Dean the cold shoulder treatment
it makes sense that he would feel this betrayed
| MysteryMadchen chapter 9 . 1/12/2014
I thought you did an awesome Job on this and can't wait for the next chapter. I hope that Sam doesn't try to escape since the door was left open and, to me, it seems to me that Sam is already in the throws of the detox because he hasn't had it in a while. Thanks for the update, Nicole. :)
| Elisab68 chapter 9 . 1/12/2014
Sam's reaction is quite normal. Dean must understand that he was wrong. But they are brothers. They can't get mad long! Thank you very much for the quick result of this story. I love it.
| Frakking Toasters chapter 9 . 1/12/2014
I think you got it right. Dean needs to own his arsholery for a bit longer, and I'm really glad that Castiel is around and is keeping him honest with his blunt tell it like it is approach lol! It's always good when the brothers reunite, but it can't be sunshine and roses immediately after rainstorms and dog shit! There needs to be a reasonable transition.
Damn I'm poetic! :-) xo
| SPN Mum chapter 9 . 1/12/2014
Well, Sam might be safe at Bobby's now, but I don't think he feels very wanted. Dean was stupid if he thought Sam would be grateful to him for rescuing him. Dean is the one who turned his back on Sam. Bobby is blaming himself for what happened, but he couldn't have known that Reggie would react like he did, or that his group would kidnap Sam and do what they did. That is all on them, not Bobby. I don't think Sam blames Bobby for their actions either. Dean has a lot to make up for with Sam, and it would probably be better if Cas and Bobby took care of him, at least for now.
| mandancie chapter 9 . 1/12/2014
I'm with you. I hate it when they fight or angry with each other. :) I really loved this chapter. I can't wait for the next update! :)