|Reviews for The Space Race|
| Sin of the Fallen chapter 42 . 2/25
Such a good story.
More Krogan please!
| OverseerBishop chapter 42 . 2/22
Hey, just writing to say that I love this story and can't wait for the next update!
Hope its soon.
| HellsMaji chapter 3 . 2/14
Wow, I certainly wasn't expecting this lol. The invaded helping the invaders. Crazy!
| 54rt0r1u5 chapter 42 . 2/7
you might think of bringing some of the other squadmates from the games in like samara and her Ardat yakshi daughters, thane krios, legion, etc but otherwise its a really good read
| Spectre558 chapter 6 . 12/19/2013
Really liking the overall story. Good characters with some humor sprinkled in. But what was the point of Hackett and Fang hooking up? It isn't referenced or even mentioned anywhere else in the story and just feels kind of short and random. Otherwise good job.
| icelivi chapter 42 . 12/19/2013
Hey there, just wanted to say I am absolutely loving this story so far, and I'm looking forward to seeing where it goes! I just saw it yesterday and I've plowed through it, only just now catching up. It's especially funs to see Saren as a good guy, and the reapers showing signs of personality, rather than just being relentless foes. I do worry that you may lose more readers during your comprehensive rewrite than you did simply due to occasional poor quality. I'm personally much more interested in seeing where the story and characters go than I am in checking to make sure that the scenes flow well. You're a talented writer, and I think that the quantity of readership you've gained shows that people are willing to overlook an occasional bad chapter. Please don't derail the plot train simply because there's a vocal minority of disgruntled folks.
Thanks for listening to the rant, hope it made sense.
| LordsFire chapter 7 . 12/18/2013
While your inclusion of original alien species adds some degree of interesting flavor to the story, in the end, I find it to be largely the same as many other 'different humanity showing up the Citadel' stories.
| TheBleachDoctor chapter 41 . 12/18/2013
The Rachni are cool.
| LordsFire chapter 4 . 12/18/2013
...Why are they sending in a ground strike team when they have gunships?
| LordsFire chapter 3 . 12/18/2013
One of the dangers of rampant plot bunnies, is that they can turn a story incoherent. Shortly, we'll see if that's what actually happened with this one...
| LordsFire chapter 1 . 12/18/2013
An interesting setup; unfortunately, you've shown that you don't really have a particular solid grasp of strategy or tactics. Dreadnaughts don't get deployed as part of patrol groups, at least not outside of a time of declared war, and after having his Frigates wiped out and facing weapons of unknown capability, any competent commander would be *far* more interested in withdrawing than is shown here. And competency is supposed to be a Turian thing; even if they are somewhat arrogant about being 'the best military,' the fleet commander would at least *consider* withdrawal before blitzing such an enemy.
Still, the way you wrote it showed that you were at least *trying* to write a plausible battle scene. I'd recommend you study some naval history, and/or speak with people with military experience if you want to add a more realistic flavor to things. As it is, you're still at least a couple steps up from the general flavor of Mass Effect canon.
| Dur'id the Druid chapter 24 . 12/17/2013
Didn't Benzia get Laria's message? I mean it was not as if she is hiding who she became in it.
| Dur'id the Druid chapter 22 . 12/17/2013
Thanks for writing such a large exposition! I usually complain if a story starts with a timeline, especially a time line that takes up multiple chapters.
| Dur'id the Druid chapter 13 . 12/17/2013
Heh, this is peace?
Great story, more than a little Mary Sueish, but we all know something big is coming that will need such strength. Have read this story almost straight through to this point.
| aDarkOne chapter 42 . 12/16/2013
I really really dislike the Liara in this story.