Reviews for The Slave girl and her Alpha
Heady chapter 81 . 11/8/2015
You know I read this a few weeks ago and I didn't comment out of , but this whole story and the tragic follow-up your doing is deeply flawed. You spent what? 70 writing this beautifully epic love between Bellice (though admittedly you wrote Alice as not as in love with Bella as she was with Alice) and then ruined the whole story by forcing some Rosalie imprint on it. Fine, if you had mentioned it would be a polyamorous story...weird as that is...but this was such a great narrative that was destroyed by your need to add something totally unnecessarily. For me, the story died when you introduced Rosalie and the love and romance become null and void. You only need look at the review ratings between the two to see the epic fail you allowed yourself to fall into. My God, having Alice sleep with Rosalie mere days after her mate died was a particular low point. Anyway I'm sure your pig-headed ways shall continue to ruin your work but take some advice. Observe relationships; be they friendships or, romances, and learn.
TinaF chapter 81 . 10/22/2015
Such a wonderful story! I just couldn't put it down til it was finished. You are a very talented writer. Can't wait to read some more of your stories. Thank you for writing them.
Aliceandbellafor chapter 65 . 1/31/2015
Ever
Guest chapter 40 . 1/30/2015
WHAT THE FREAKING HELL!
tessa chapter 54 . 1/10/2015
Tanya is a stupid bitch like its her business I feel like killing her arghhh she bloody annoying
Ideliin chapter 13 . 1/2/2015
Hehe, Limes... XD
Night3603 chapter 7 . 11/29/2014
I know its a bit late to say this but...IF two women could have biological children then Alice would not be able to bear bella a son. There is no male dna, no Y chromosome for that to happen. Two women could only bear a female child. Same if it was two males if it were possible. But then this is famfiction you can fo what you want lol. Just saying it cant physically happen. Anyway im enjoying this so far, but i do have to say the spelling, grammar and punctuation could be edited and improved on. Its sometimes hard to tell whats going on because of that.
oneeyereader chapter 81 . 9/20/2014
Wow that was a quick read.
oneeyereader chapter 13 . 9/20/2014
Learn to spell please.
oneeyereader chapter 8 . 9/20/2014
File 13 page 4
oneeyereader chapter 6 . 9/19/2014
Bedtime cartoons Saturday
oneeyereader chapter 4 . 9/19/2014
If I told you wants coming would ruin your story.
oneeyereader chapter 1 . 9/19/2014
Today is the last Summer Friday of 2014 .No more Summer days of School the Schools call them Fall .
Dragonling743 chapter 60 . 7/13/2014
well duh. guess I walked into that one.
Dragonling743 chapter 57 . 7/13/2014
the question here is why is Alice rejecting everything. Something is very wrong with all of this.
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