|Reviews for First blush|
| LouiseKurylo chapter 2 . 3/8/2014
"...pink monstrosity..."? I do so agree about that bridesmaid dress. (Are any of them actually pretty and useable for other occasions? Must be legally required that they be ugly and a total waste of money - except for the wedding, of course.)
Very sweet and in-character for both. Nice. Thanks.
| Guest chapter 2 . 10/31/2013
You need to continue this. It feels unfinished. Otherwise it is really good.
| suzjazz chapter 2 . 7/10/2013
I like this a lot! Very believable.
Looking forward to reading the next chapter.
| Guest chapter 2 . 7/7/2013
jajajaja love it! "I have just one question Teresa. Do you kiss on the first date?" jaja they are very sweet
| mwalter1 chapter 2 . 7/7/2013
I hope she does at least give him a kiss!
| judy washington chapter 2 . 7/7/2013
Very nice. Perhaps it is your expressed nonshipper (perhaps cleave to canon?) pov that makes it especially so. In this vein I reall liked the 'if that won't be too weird for you'/'very weird', as I do think the show has provided us with any reason for Lisbon & Jane to not find her use of his first name to be weird...whether that would even stick in a similar RL situation is a curiosity, but the notion of his suggestion that she might give it a shot as you have written seems reailistic; the 'keep you guessing'-throwing that out from the get-go and Lisbon's volley back was very them; Jane's description of his visit to his family's graves-his previous underlying of knowledge of his family's wish for him to move on is wonderfully canon as voiced for his subconscious through hallucination-Charlotte; and, finally, Lisbon's conflict between the attraction she feels towards Jane (which seems, albeit subtly, to have been more visible for the past season and a quarter) and, as posed in your hypothetical, the potential risk to the friendship she has been clearly shown to value is nicely drawn to the center stage with the 'Would I be able to...I wonder what it's like?'. Jane's 'just one question' to close your piece is as in character Jane as I can possibly imagine.
| Guest chapter 2 . 7/7/2013
This sounds just like them. I just wish you would continue. Its a great start but feels unfinished. I am a shipper and I liked this.
| MartyMac49 chapter 2 . 7/7/2013
Ha - loved this interlude between two lovers on their first date. You could not have written it any better. It completely followed a script I didn't even realize I had in my mind. My favorite part was him "popping" the question - really made me smile.
| Mossi.b chapter 2 . 7/7/2013
Oh this is just beautiful...beautiful, you have tackled a difficult subject without being cheesy, awkward or too...much!
I love the humour...'will you marry me?'...I nearly had a heart attack...!...and the last line...so Jane! You have managed to keep them firmly in character with all the little fun moments interspersed with the awkward ones...and keep the feeling that they care a great deal about them...I wish them all the luck in the world at making it work...For me, this would be a perfect end to the series, allowing me to make my own mind up as to whether they ended up together or not.
| Jane Doe51 chapter 2 . 7/7/2013
Are you a 100% sure you're not a shipper ? Because this is the perfect date ! I mean : assuming their feelings are not adressed in a "heat of the moment" time, that's exactly how it would happen, how I'd want it to happen !
This is so 'Awwwww' and fun ! I so, so love it !
Lisbon's nervousness totally makes sense. She's the no-nonsense one. She knows what's at stake. She has wanted Jane for a long time without having him...and now they're on a date ! Must be a scary thought...If they're doing this, there's no turning bacl, they have to make it work, especially when it's Jane's chance to move one with his life. But he wouldn't do it with anyone else, I'm sure of it. And she shouldn't focus on her past relationships, for they weren't with Jane.
I totally love how you made Jane aware of her fears...the way he let her talk about work because it's not out of her comfort zone...it's kind of cute (not the work talking but the reason Jane allows it).
Love the "proposal" ! Great strategy !
Now they're on first name basis. So the moment is special enough for Jane to ask permission to call her by her given name (when he had done it on occasions...but he wants her to agree...again : cute) and to ask her to do the same...Somehow, it feels weirder to have Lisbon call him Patrick than the other way around. Weird, but still cute.
"I had to get Red John first to be able to give myself to someone else."
I found this line very beautiful...First, because Jane's establishing that RJ had to be taken care of before he could move on with his life (this is not a breaking news, but I still find it moving that Jane is saying it...especially when RJ has been taken care of, so it can't be a mere excuse for not moving on anymore). And second - but maybe I'm reading too much into this - I found Jane's choice of word very interesting, very beautiful, very moving. He's talking about giving himself to someone, giving himself, not just being with someone, not taking something from someone, but giving himself. There's something selfless in those words that I love. That's exactly what Lisbon deserves from him, because somehow she had been giving herself to him for so much time and in so many ways, even when she felt he was only using her. And now he wants to give himself to her. Awwwwww...I so love it !
And the final scene...Lisbon freaking out when she realised he wants to move on with her, Jane talking to her into give it a try, her using about the implications of this, about a kiss...and Jane calling her on it, it's very beautiful and funny. Guess she'll know how kissing him is like soon enough !
| Jane Doe51 chapter 1 . 6/25/2013
I would define myself as a shipper and by the way you usually write Jane and Lisbon, I would have sworn you were one too. This is meant to be a compliment, since you write their relationship with the feelings and the subtlety I want between.
And this chapter is no exception. It's as beautiful as usual. There is this so strong love between them, the things they say and the one they don't...and it's so, so, beautiful ! I love it, thank you !
| I Dream of Scotty chapter 1 . 6/25/2013
This was a great chapter - looking forward to the date!
| Rosepeony chapter 1 . 6/25/2013
Hhhmmmm ... you have me imagining a first date with all the awkwardness of Jane's date with Kristina ... as if they have to start all over ... as if they really hardly know each other in their post RJ world. Intrigued to see how you play it.
| Mossi.b chapter 1 . 6/25/2013
Oh this is lovely, and for a non-shipper, you have done really well...I have high hopes of this meeting...I know that you will avoid the cheesey plate!
The paragraph when you talk about Jane's hidden feelings hiding in dark corners of his heart and slowly becoming brave enough to stand in the light...just perfect...perfect.
Really looking forward to seeing how these two complex, and socially challenged people (Jane's ways are just and act, he never opens himself up...just 'outs' other people) manage to have some time where work is not their priority.