Reviews for With eyes of a child
Herobrinegal chapter 20 . 10/13
AHH FIGHTING TEARS IT'S SO BEAUTIFUL
Herobrinegal chapter 18 . 10/13
AWW
Guest chapter 21 . 12/19/2016
I cried so hard when shizuo introduced himself
Guest chapter 10 . 6/17/2016
Shizuo you could just use this as a daily answered question! OH THE CONFLICT THAT COULD HAVE BEEN AVOIDED! I love this...
TENTACLES XD chapter 1 . 3/14/2016
I'm gonna be blunt here, this isn't nitpicking, just constructive criticism. First, your grammer is pretty bad, I barely got past the beginning, you also could have made his flashback in the beginning go for a bit longer, maybe put in what child Izaya is thinking, eg: 'A raven haired child ran into his house excitedly, it was around the afternoon and school had just finished. "I hope mummy and daddy like my picture," thought the child. His parents had been fighting a lot recently, and it worried him.' You could have done something similar to that for the beginning. And then their is the characters ooc ness. The plot is pretty good, and I think this story has potential. Either way, I hope you take my advice to heart, it could improve your writing skills. I wish you the best of luck in future fanfictions.
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SIGN ME THE FUCK UP chapter 20 . 3/12/2016
OMG I LUVED IT ;U;
TheBlueMoonRose chapter 21 . 2/15/2016
Amazing... i cried happy tears on the last chapter :)
Nekton chapter 7 . 9/14/2015
...hello... I was bored so...PAAAAAAAASSSSSSTTTTTAAAAA
Nekton chapter 12 . 9/6/2015
for the first time in forever
Nekton chapter 11 . 9/6/2015
Not to be rude but English wasn't your best subject in school was it?
Mattychan69 chapter 21 . 9/2/2015
The story is fantastic! You really have to correct your grammar but the plot is amazing, I loved it!
Probsprof chapter 2 . 8/25/2015
This is a very good story, but maybe get someone to look through for spelling mistakes. I've spotted a few.
Angila Carter chapter 20 . 5/11/2015
This was a great story hope you continue to write stories.
ShizuIzaya4ever chapter 20 . 4/12/2015
THAT WAS SO CUTE I LUV THIS PAIRING POOR IZAYA IT WOULD MAKE SENSE IF SOME SHIT LIKE THIS REALLY HAPPENED TO HIM THAT WOULD EXPLAIN WHY HES SO FUCKED UP BUT U GOTTA LUV HIM FOR IT XP
BK-207 chapter 1 . 3/8/2015
To be the utmost honest I didnn't enjoy this fanfiction that much. Now, I'm not trying to discourage you or anything of the sort, just take this as constructive critism. I really, really liked your plot a great deal; with the mom and dad fighting, the moms suicide, the self harming, the sexual abuse, and the father getting out of jail. But you rushed this story waay too fast. I mean in the first chapter he meets his dad and everything just fets messy and what not. The things that transpired in the first three chapters should have been layered better. Just for an example the entire first chapter could be izaya sitting in his chair tapping his pen agianst his desk and pondering about his childhood. Also Namie could still be working and you could make him send her home eaarly while he just stares at nothing, while looking like he was in deep thought.

Also the grammer in the fanfiction was down right miserable, I found it hard to follow the rushed plotline because of the mispelled wording and incomplete sentences. Now I won't hold that againsy you, as you stated you have trouble with english.

Oh and lastly, how you made Shinra, Shizuo, and Izaya so out of character just seemed so fake to me. It felt like the characters were really mad inpersinaters of those three characters. Now I know its hard to keep characters IC but at least try. I mean Izaya was not like his normal arragant, smart mouth, calculating, and intelegent self. Like in the beginning you could have made him stick to that side of him but when meeting his father then you could have his fragile state of mind deteorite. Because even the way you made him scared and everything...I just didn't buy it one bit. Same goes for Shizuos so sudden change of heart. Like when he found Izaya their be no way in hell would he be soo nice. I think maybe you could've had Izaya having a phychological meltdown in the ally but have Shinra find him. Just a thought

Oh and on one last note what was the whole deal with Shirou wanting to find Izaya and kill him. I mean his entire character was down right flat as can be. When first seeing him you should have given him more of a taunting and mulipitive tone towards himself. Also I really didn't understand his motives, like at all. He kidnapped Shizuo(despite the lingering gactor of never finding out how)and lead Izaya to the old house, why? I mean in the end he saved Izaya after shooting him. Why did her after shooting feel fatherly love towards him. Also he shot Shizuo in the leg, dude
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