|Reviews for Mon Cher Coeur|
| cheroine chapter 3 . 9/9
Couldn't they just Apportate back? And Slughorn just happened to have a mobile phone on him?
Sorry, it's not very believable.
| Emily chapter 9 . 6/12
THIS WAS SO ADORABLY CUTE. I absolutely love how you represented Severus!
| Alexa1993 chapter 9 . 4/13
| anon chapter 9 . 8/12/2014
It was enjoyable to read - I have to say your writing style managed to smooth over all the inconsistencies.
Still, a bit of (hopefully) concrit. When you think of a plot, perhaps think about all the details. Here is what I found perplexing in the story: 1. Paris/France school trip (OK, France is romantic) - but a school trip? Why would Hermione, rising star at the ministry, supervise children in her free time? (She could have gone there on holiday, Severus could have been on a secret mission tailing up the vampires, or something). The school trip is probably there just to have Slughorn and Sprout in the story (good characters, but seemed a bit unnecessary) 2. vampires in France - why would supposedly French vampires be angry about their representation in England? Or are these English vampires in France? And what is the connection of vampires and the cathedral? 3. credit card - is Snape rich or what? He needs a job as a teacher (or helping hand), but leaves Hermione a credit card with no spending limit? 4. McGonagall - uses the word "mudblood"?, and if Kingsley said there is a punishment for the portus charm, how come she can override the ministry and just forgive a supposed crime? 5. the execution of the portus seems like an apparition to me: no object, no timing, 6. If hermione knows French, she will know the French for "my dear heart" - all my knowledge of French comes from Hercule Poirot:-) and I knew the meaning!
| Amarenima Redwood chapter 9 . 8/9/2014
Brilliant! Thank you for translating the title at the end.
| HanableKing28 chapter 9 . 8/8/2014
i love it. such a beautiful story and the romance that was spun between them made my heart ache. i shed a tear when severus offered his cooperation for one night with hermione. you have done a good job with this
| Angels-heart1 chapter 8 . 5/13/2014
Loved it. Can't wait to read more!
| notwritten chapter 7 . 10/1/2013
Interesting. Keep smiling. :-)
| Princess Unikitty chapter 7 . 9/29/2013
| Amarenima Redwood chapter 7 . 9/28/2013
| Angels-heart1 chapter 6 . 8/26/2013
Dang! Pissed off Vampires is not good. Can't wait to read more!
| Dena Gray chapter 6 . 8/10/2013
Absolutely lovely! Wonderful job! I love the imagery of the wheat turning to lilies. That was perfect. You're very good at interpretive imagery.
| Princess Unikitty chapter 6 . 8/7/2013
hey, an update! well-written chapter.
| notwritten chapter 6 . 8/7/2013
Interesting chapter. Keep smiling. :-)
| torchil chapter 6 . 8/7/2013
Looking forward for more.