|Reviews for Shattered Souls|
| Anubis1056 chapter 19 . 3/9
really great story
| all forms of fluff chapter 19 . 1/6
Wow it sounds like everything is pretty much wrapped up. The only thing I could think to add to this story would a flash forward showing Ron and Shego's child in UnStoppable Tech preparing to engage a Lowardian batallion twenty or so years in the future. Team Possable showcasing how they have changed over the years and what the familes look like. Other then that its all copeasetic. I dont belive there is anything else that needs to be added. Ron and Shego are together, their respective familes are ok with it, The powers that be have even given a blessing of sorts to the couple. If the story dose continue the only avanue I can see being explored would be ... maybe a wedding, even then that wouldnt take verry long to get though. So IF this is the end then I would like to say this. Thank you for the story. It was a delight to read and you should feel good about it.
| Guest chapter 19 . 11/2/2013
| Guest chapter 11 . 8/15/2013
I must admit that this one of the more believeable Ron/Shego stories s I've read in a while. The flow and pace go well amd their eventual reasons for interacting allow it to evolve far more naturally.
My biggest complaint would, I hate to say it, be the writing style. Its very stiff and clinical. More often than not I feel like I'm reading and essay or a report of what happened. There's nothing truly engaging that makes me feel any connection to anything that's going on. This kiss at the end of this chapter was a prime example of that. There wasn't any injected emotion into the writing, hell l, there wasn't even an adjective to make a sentence extend a bit. It really just felt like "She kissed him, he looked stunned, he must have liked it, she was happy."
Now that kind of writing style could help with more mundane topics but in this instance, as with others in the story, it really causes the writing to suffer. I haven't read later chapters so I don't know if it improves but I hope it does. I suggest really trying to expess characterization a bit more so that it feels alive and not stiff and dead. Hope that helps.
| Officer Hot-Pants chapter 19 . 8/9/2013
An awesome story in every way. Well balanced and progressed. MUCH more realistically human characters than most KP fanfic writers, too. Having Kim perfectly susceptible to giving into rage when properly pushed was an especially nice (and sadly rare) touch.
Very stealthy, by the way; I was looking for RonGo stories not but a scant two months ago. Very green on your part.
| kazikamikaze24 chapter 19 . 8/8/2013
Yet an amazing Rongo, and I do hope to read plenty more of stories based on Ron from you. You certainly have a craft with making him grow physically and emotionally, which is always refreshing to read. So, until next time, stay golden!
| SixBrokenSteps chapter 19 . 7/25/2013
Beautiful. Just beautiful. A great novel in it's own right.
| GammaBlast chapter 19 . 7/22/2013
Great chapter and excellent story.
I was hoping for one more chapter in which we'd see Ron & Shego's children.
Well, I guess we can always hope for a sequel to see that happy ending. :D
| KinZer0 chapter 19 . 7/22/2013
Just a thought, after all this learning and human growth and crap that ron went through in this story, and his mastery of reasoning and his intellect, with the powers he's gained control of, it would take him about 12 minutes to create something world dominating wouldn't it? Any chance of a happy end as leader of the world?
| daccu65 chapter 19 . 7/21/2013
Excellent story: As for my review of your tale, first the criticism...
You had Ron become a little too capable, in my opinion (no details for anyone reading the reviews rather than reading the tale). While I like tales in which he proves more capable than anyone (including himself) believe him to be, his ability to whip up gadgets and understand other technology went a little too far, in my opinion.
Secondly, I believe you missed a major opportunity to explore Kim's reaction upon discovering the complete truth about the Shego/Ron relationship. This could have turned into another learning experience for Kim, in which she realizes that Ron is his own person, capable of establishing relationships and perhaps even making mistakes.
Now, for the compliments:
First, you did a solid job with Ron's angst, early in the tale. Too many authors who write a 'Kim rejects Ron' tale have another girl immediately show interest in him. Your maintaining his status as the social outcast made the angst and betterment superior to most such tales.
On a related topic, I appreciate you not pairing Kim up with a jerk. Again, too many authors write tales in which Kim turns on Ron and/or hooks up with a guy who is a complete jerk towards Ron. While this may make Ron a more sympathetic character, it takes away from the tale. You did an excellent job of keeping Kim...Kim.
A third point, you did an excellent job putting the alternate pairing of Ron and Shego together. Another criticism I have of alternate pairing fics is that they don't develop the relationship; it's all "I've always been attracted to you but I didn't know how to express it" type of thing. Your development of the relationship from acquaintance to mentor/pupil to friendship to attraction and so forth made the tale more enjoyable...kudos for taking the time.
All in all, an excellent story.
Thanks for your efforts;
| The Writer With a Mouth chapter 19 . 7/21/2013
| studyofchaos chapter 19 . 7/19/2013
Excellent story. Thank you for all of your hard work and the care you took with your characters. Lokk forward to reading more of your stories.
| xavierp chapter 19 . 7/21/2013
I'm really enjoying mature characters who still seem to be the same canon characters at heart. I think the pacing you have is spot on and I really look forward to the next chapters. I will miss this when it ends!
| Exalted Demi-Soul chapter 19 . 7/20/2013
I like the idea of Hope. This story brings the idea of faith and hope along for the entire ride. I like it.
| GammaBlast chapter 16 . 7/18/2013
Kim & Shego fighting side-by-side?
Take that monster down!
Ron with comet powers?