|Reviews for Assassin's Creed V: Lullaby|
| Zephyrous chapter 4 . 7/6/2013
| Zephyrous chapter 3 . 7/4/2013
I love the story line! Just some constructive criticism. I think you need to skip the Desmond parts.. They may be leading to something, but this is telling the story of Tobu/Mikō. Also, i think the story is missing the culture of 1600s Japan, such as the quiet respect, the gravel gardens, the pink trees, etc. The biggest thing I think this is missing is the Colorful Japanese scenery. The largest thing I think you need to do to improve the story is lay out the scene for the readers: if it's cold and dark; Her face stung against the brittle cold of night. It's a pain to write since you have to write ALOT more, and u can't skip straight to the badass scenes, but to captivates the audience. But, dont get me wrong, i love this, I like the characters, I like the setting. Just some tips to make it... Better.