I know I'm very late brother, but take as much time as you need. If this story continues I'll immediately pick it back up.

You over explain things. Making a lot of the dialogue longer than necessary.

Mel is awesome. I like her. Don't know much about her, but she seems really nice.

why did you write rukia as a deceased fiancée to ichigo by the story the two were always bickering with one another

Dang you can cut the tension with a knife but good story tho ajd keep it up

The usage of anglicized Japanese is a severe detraction from your writing. There is little to no reason to do so, and destroys the flow of writing. You have good ideas, but I would drop that vocabulary going forward.

Brah even though this is a good story why the fuck did you have to make me cry bro fuck you

“goddofaza”? lmfao

Ngl, this was a bit of slog to get through...

I mean, don't get me wrong, I'm all for 'world building' & whatnot; even so, as overall well written this might be, the author could really stand to learn a thing or two about getting to the sodding point..!

I thought he was a transcended being, that should have effected his body. Ichigo post transcendence could break Miya and the other 107 over his knee like they were children.

samuelstevens64, I can see you are a master of words. Your review clearly showcases your utter lack of talent for the written word. It's easy to criticize, it takes passion and desire to actually write and post here. Try it and see how it feels when you have to deal with dickheads like yourself for once. As for me, I have neither the passion or desire to deal with assholes like you on a daily basis.

TRASH

Hey man I'm terribly sorry that you've been struggling so much, my mother just required brain surgery to remove a tennis ball sized tumor from her frontal lobe, and now I am the only one able to take care of her so at least on some level I get it. Self and family come first.
Thank you truly for sharing all your stories with us' I have many fond memories reading them. If it means anything I'll be praying for your wellbeing, and I hope I'll see you again someday. Take care.

Im enjoying the story so far but a few small complaints, the grammar and spelling at times could be better and the use of random Japanese words in the middle of sentences doesnt flow well and just causes confusion

Good luck and thank you for the time you spent here.