Reviews for Sweet Temptations |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, perfect song for the grooms wedding toast to his wife. Just perfect. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I just finished this for the second time. Lovely, creative, well written story. Thank you. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Such a great story, thank you so much! I just discovered your stories, this was the second one I read and have enjoyed them both immensely. I've been reading fanfic for over 10 years and though I'd read all the good stories so it's been a great pleaure to find you. I hope you keep writing, you're a talented storyteller, Thanks again! |
![]() ![]() I absolutely love this story. It’s one of my favorite rereads! |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was very stressful and sad, but at least they are all well and alive! And, their precious Son is here! I always sang "Dream a little Dream" to my Son when he was little. In fact, it was played as our Mother/Son dance at his wedding! we love the Eddie Vedder version! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Is "laying the table" an Aussie expression? I love that! We say "setting the table" here in the U.S. Loving your story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Is there any Mother who doesn't know "Goodnight Moon?" Love that little book! |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was a very touching chapter. I would guess it made it easier for Anthony to accept since he is a clone of Edward's! Bella is amazing, being so accepting of taking in Anthony. Their family is sure growing quickly! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think they should wait to have a baby because she is so young! They have years to have a child together. And, they both have some issues to work through, too! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Is Renee the baby's Mama, perhaps? I have to tell you one little thing I really enjoyed here. I mostly like Canon couples, but love this Jessica/Lauren pairing! And they're both good people, who are close to Edward... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome story. Read it more than once. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love It! |
![]() ![]() ![]() one of the best weddings yet |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ok, so i really tried... I'm almost past the half of this fic. No matter if the situation you are describing is realist or not, it's very important that you create real characters, with real issues able to intrigue and generate empathy in your readers. Take a look at this paragraph: (...)"Edward, I am pregnant not sick. I can pick up my daughter. Thank you for being so sweet but I'm not made of glass. I run a bakery, a catering company, an investment company and am about to sign a national distribution deal for Sweet Temptations. I turn twenty tomorrow, I am fit and I am able. I love that you care so much but picking up Lil Bit is no burden." I kissed her nose as I passed Lil Bit to her, "Sorry love. I don't mean to smother you, I just love you so much." (End quote) How many men, no scratch that, couples you know have this type of interaction in public in the presence of their entire family? And this is just one example. It doesn't work. It tries to tells but isn't able to show what mature and independent individuals these are. The impression i have is quite the opposite one. The whole thing with Kate... There are plenty of real cases of unfit and uncaring parents in real life, there is no need to villainized her to the point of stupidity... Hope the best for you and your writing style, but this is where my road ends. Thanks for sharing this. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is such an awesome story. I do notice like a lot of stories instead of saying mom and dad they use their names. When talking about my mom I don’t call her by her first name, I say my mom or mom if speaking with a sibling. |