|Reviews for Lost in Time|
| purple-peacock chapter 2 . 12/29/2013
I like it so far; it seems very interesting. But if you don't mind, I'd like to point out that in this line, " She hated it in there town, " you used the wrong "there." You should have used the possessive form, as in "their town." The form you used should be used when saying things like "that town over there," or "there it is," or things to that nature. You also did it in chapter two, in the line, "in one swift motion, there mother was on the ground." Again, you should used the possessive form of the word. At first, I thought it was just a typo or something, but since you did it more than once, I thought it would be good to set you straight. It's a small mistake, but it's really distracting. Other than that, I am enjoying the story so far.
| My2BrownEyes chapter 7 . 12/28/2013
A long wait, but a nice chapter. I had a feeling that was Tonto's relationship to the boy. I'm glad he told the kid. And that was very mature of the boy to not want Joshua killed.
| My2BrownEyes chapter 6 . 8/24/2013
At the top you have "Bill and Richard were friends of Manny and Bill." I think one of those Bill's is supposed to be Joshua.
The part where Tonto flicks himself because the bird is angry was pretty funny. And you had to end it on a cliffhanger. Well, I look forward to the next chapter even more now.
| My2BrownEyes chapter 5 . 7/25/2013
Yep. Tonto was slightly OOC, but I have a feeling that will be explained soon. Poor Michael. It must have been so hard to admit that. I look forward to more.
| My2BrownEyes chapter 4 . 7/14/2013
A desire for revenge. Tonto can certainly understand that. Glad the Lone Ranger and Tonto already knew about the bad guys. Can't help but wonder exactly what happened when Tonto was used as bait.
| Jenna chapter 3 . 7/8/2013
You just ripped my heart out.
Please continue! I'm dying but I love it
| linalove chapter 3 . 7/10/2013
I am intrigued! I hope for more soon!
xxx Lina :D
| My2BrownEyes chapter 3 . 7/8/2013
You have me very intrigued about Tonto's connection to the boy. A couple of grammatical things. You switched to present tense a couple of times when Tonto first comes across Michael. (Happens to the best of us.) And Michael says "That means your Tonto." Should be 'you're'. A small thing, but thought you'd want to know. Other then that, I liked Lone Ranger's attempt at humor and that he noticed there were tears in Tonto's eyes. Looking forward to the next chapter.
| linalove chapter 2 . 7/7/2013
Looking forward for the next chapter!
| My2BrownEyes chapter 2 . 7/6/2013
Heartbreaking chapter. Michael's line "If you touch my brother, I will send your soul to heck!" showed his spirit and his innocence. It made me smile in an otherwise bleak situation. I so want Michael to get revenge, and not just kill the guy revenge but make him suffer like Michael did and more revenge.
| My2BrownEyes chapter 1 . 7/5/2013
Dun-Dun-DUNNNN! A frightening opening to the story. I only wished I had gotten to know the mother a little more to understand why she thought the town was boring & crowded. I also want to know why the men killed the native to find out if it was more than just simple racism. But for that, I'll wait for the rest of the story. I look forward to the next chapter.