Reviews for Forgotten Soul
Guest chapter 4 . 3/26/2016
No offense but your OC seems to be lacking in many ways. I mean for someone being over 6000 years old (really? With her personality its a little hard to believe) and being terrible at swordfighting doesn't seem logical. Anyone with that amount of time would at least be somewhat decent. Thorin's reaction to her is also a little strange since he's a bit too hot and cold with her so he seems just a wee bit ooc (though only just a tad). I'm not saying he should be in love with her or be all buddy buddy but I would've imagined he would ignore her and hope she goes away like he does with Bilbo. There are other minor issues with the rest of the character's personalities but despite all of this the story isn't bad and is still readable. Hope it gets better though.
Alaksandra chapter 8 . 3/12/2016
Alrighty then. I really just need to wait and comment when I am done reading the whole story first. Now it all makes sense. Hopefully she will heal from those mental scars.
Alaksandra chapter 7 . 3/12/2016
I like the story. Really I do. Lili's aversion to dwarves is really extreme, and borders on ridiculous. I hope that goes away rather quickly, because on a whole she is a fabulous OC - except for that quirk.
amberlovescsi chapter 16 . 7/3/2015
a bit of the neverending story there
the-littlest-deamon chapter 7 . 7/1/2015
This story is perfect. The main character is strong but with a side of her that makes her relatable. She's not all fire. I also love that Dwalin is the one who protects her like a brother or father.
Guest chapter 39 . 6/11/2015
Uhm the botfa has come and gone. Have you abandoned this story or you going to update.
Peach Kebab chapter 39 . 6/11/2015
Wait... thats the end? ... oh thank god there's a sequel :D x
Peach Kebab chapter 37 . 6/11/2015
Bilbo's shut your mouth line was actual perfection :D
Peach Kebab chapter 36 . 6/11/2015
NO NOT BILLY! oh my god *dies* xxxx
Guest chapter 16 . 6/9/2015
Nice reference to the Neverending Story in Chapter 16 with the horse.
Peach Kebab chapter 10 . 6/7/2015
Why do I keep crying at this story oh my god :'D x
cleanh2ogal57 chapter 34 . 4/26/2015
I am enjoying your story but am
having a difficult time with your incorrect English. Your tenses are wrong, you use 'ly' where it doesn't belong, some sentences are awkwardly structured. I am willing to help you with your writing style, if you wish.
Sparkle girl 71 chapter 39 . 1/28/2015
This is a wonderfully captivating tale, but now we need to know what happens to them all :). Here's hoping for part 2! Please keep going with this, you have made them come alive most beautifully :)
belladu57 chapter 39 . 11/28/2014
Very good
Natsuko457 chapter 39 . 11/20/2014
"she is dying"
hope part 2 comes out soon!

from a devastated reader
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