|Reviews for The Boy Who Wouldn't Grow Up|
| bkwrmnlvnit chapter 3 . 12/1/2013
Oh, I forgot to mention... the shade of pink that literally hurt his eyes. I had to laugh at that one. Poor Sherlock...XD
| bkwrmnlvnit chapter 3 . 12/1/2013
Oh, Sherlock, my awkward friend...
I love the way you made the point of him not bringing flowers partially because they didn't fit under his jacket. It seems so in character for him to be so awkwardly caring and yet mildly embarrassed so he's trying to sort of sneak in with something that's not big. It's just perfect for Sherlock, and something I can absolutely see him doing.
Gosh, Molly fixing the bed... Even that's in character. Making sure she's not leaving a mess...
The thought about how John would take his child home is entertaining and in character as well. I love how all of Sherlock's thoughts sound like things he'd say when you write them.
The fact that Mrs. Hudson had to tell Sherlock it's custom to give gifts is entertaining... I love how he's always so knowledgeable and brilliant about everything in regards to cases, but when it comes to anything regarding social norms, he's adorably clueless. Nice.
Aw, his awkwardness about Charlie and girls is cute... And how this is his apology to Molly, with something so important to him, that he passes off as nothing. And how he's trying to hide it from John, because John KNOWS it's not 'nothing', and how big a deal it is that Sherlock gave this.
Of course, making excuses for why he can't come... Sherlock...
It's just so in character for Sherlock to do something like this for his friend and not tell them. And even if he refuses to admit it or doesn't see it, it's really sweet. D'aww...
I am confused about one thing... Why is it 20_? I couldn't figure that out.
Anyways, BRILLIANT writing - I love it, I love it, I love it! Everything's perfect, and you hit all the characters and all the little details spot on again. Amazing work, Edhla. Thanks for posting,
| bkwrmnlvnit chapter 2 . 12/1/2013
Gah... The comparison of Sherlock to Peter Pan is killing me.
Okay, so first thing - I love the way you entered this story with the description of John's current physical and mental state. In just one sentence, you really got it out well, and created this powerful imagery that shows so well just how screwed up John is right now. The fact that he administered his own drugs wrong, and nobody else stopped him or could have done it right is also a nice (well, not really, but you know what I mean) detail to add. It just seems so likely, and it adds an extra punch to the fact that, here's John, this excellent military doctor, who is suddenly so messed up he can't even treat himself on something as simple as administering sedatives. (Then again, this could be an extremely complicated task, but I wouldn't know - I'm not a doctor. Either way, the imagery is effective.)
"How could there be a world without Sherlock Holmes in it?" The feels from this line...
Oh wow. I love this description of John not being sad, but afraid. It is just really well written and it really hits the reader (or this one, at least) with serious feels.
Aw, Sherlock's coffee... :(
The way you doubled the word 'yesterday' and italicized was really powerful in the writing style.
The smell of Sherlock's books is an interesting detail to add - I like how you always add multiple senses to your stories, so that way it's not just visual the whole time. The way you use order and sense and reason as contrast is also very effective.
And these last two lines are really an awesome sort of final gut-punch. I love the way you do this, how you give the image of Sherlock as a child this whole piece, and keep returning to that image, and then you kill it with this last line. To me, it really gives the idea of Sherlock being a child who wouldn't grow up, and that that was now happening because he COULDN'T grow up, because he was dead. It's just a killer image for me.
All in all, this is (Big shocker, once again) AMAZING. I love everything about it and all of the little details. Keep up the amazing work! Thank you for posting and bravo!
| Madam'zelleGiry chapter 3 . 11/20/2013
It's just so cute to imagine Molly making the bed like that... doubly cute to imagine the bewildered look on Sherlock's face as he tries to figure out why in the world she's preoccupied with this! I do think that it is very in character for Molly. She needs to regain a sense of normalcy in her life again, after having gone through giving birth! Little things like that make a biiiig difference. -nods-
'...thing were practical." Totally think it is practical! LOL having a doctor for a daddy!
"...literally hurt..." Bahahaha... But she looks so cute in it! Again, imagining the look on his face. Poor Uncle Sherlock!
"This one will." D'awwww! The sentiment of bringing the little one her first book was absolutely adorable. I love how it calls back to what we know about his past and his personal favorite books, and it really means a lot. I'd have loved to see this in Somerton, but when I actually think about it, I like having this better this way. It's more intimate than putting it in the big story, And I'll bet that little Charlie grows up to be quite a bookworm! She'll be a smart little thing!
Mentioning the Fall and all of that was a lovely touch here. Just that little mention obviously did mean a lot to Molly, and it's good to see a bit more closure with that entire ordeal.
And of course, Sherlock is never there for long. But that doesn't mean that his gift is any less appreciated! And the enscription definitely brought a smile to my face. That lucky little girl!
| bkwrmnlvnit chapter 1 . 11/18/2013
Okay, I just seen this one poking through RLt, and I had to give it a read... MY FREAKING FEELS.
Starting with this first chapter, again. CHARACTERISATION. How on Earth do you always get them so flawless? Your talking was flat out awesome here. I loved everything, from John's little headshake at Sherlock's lack of knowledge as to who Norman Bates is, to the general idea of how he was so interested in books. I like the attention you paid to his thought process too; about Afghanistan and beforehand, and just that whole deal in general.
Of course, you have Sherlock, not even caring what John takes... Mi casa is su casa, I guess, if I didn't just horribly maul the spelling of that. And the fact that he collects books... It's so... Sherlock.
And then you just have this lovely bit at the end with Sherlock insisting he's fine and not upset and yada yada right after just TOTALLY spazzing about John looking at his Peter Pan book. Again, so... Sherlock. He's just such a cute little high-functioning sociopath that I somehow manage to forget about moments like these that make me like him so FREAKING MUCH! GAH.
Then there's this bit where John was thinking about how he hasn't gotten down reading Sherlock yet and was shocked that Sherlock didn't kick him out already...AGAIN. MY FEELS. I think you just like taking them out of their cage and poking them to see how they react. It's just so perfect that you have this in there, the way Sherlock accepted John for all his problems right from the get-go and John did the same, and how he worried about being rude to Sherlock but Sherlock completely brushed it all off... It's just so... so... SO. There are no words for it.
And the inscription, why he didn't want John to take it... *melts into fangirl puddle* Poor Sherlock with his mystical and seemingly sad childhood... For him to get that book and still be so attached to it all this time later is a LEGENDARY breed of huge for him, and it's just so ADORABLE and Sherlock and GAH.
Thank you, for poking my feels again. No, really. Thanks. I loved this entire story, as per the usual. Your characterization and all the little details and the thought trains and just everything was spot on, dead on, and flat out perfect. LOVE IT!
Thank you for posting and please, KEEP IT UP!
| Rainie Skyes chapter 1 . 9/8/2013
I loved the fact that you captured that part of Sherlock that is kind and generous...to a point. He would not begrudge John anything, just the one thing, but that is perfectly understandable. I do love that you did let him 'save face' for both himself and John. Very nice. :)
| magentacr chapter 3 . 8/27/2013
Ah, I read this one before, a while back. Didn't realise it was part of this canon, but its cool that it is. Can't wait to read more about how Molly and John end up together. I'm generally a Sherlolly fan, but I do enjoy a bit of Jolly every now and then :)
| Madam'zelleGiry chapter 2 . 8/23/2013
"...except one." Hehehe, and I wonder which one that is... I really like the way that the book actually works so well with the fandom. Lots of crossover possibilities! Not even official crossovers and it still works splendidly!
"...was a mystery" Doctors know all? At least he didn't completely screw up the dose and mess himself up absolutely. That'd be bad. I really loved the bits of description about how he was able to see (or not see, as the case may be) the pages through the drugs. Very vivid, and angsty. I especially loved that it gives such a contrast with the last chapter. Brings the reader into an entirely different world.
I loved the memories that a mug of coffee stirs here... very sad. Very, very sad. And the fact that it's kind of humorous at the same time makes it all the more sad! ANGST!
Mmmm, I love the smell of old books. XD
I really loved this chapter . The book really works excellently as a plot device, and I loved that you brought that quote back at the end there. Brings everything around nicely, while still feeling hollow as we wait for the next chapter. Nicely done!
| darkin520 chapter 3 . 8/22/2013
Oh, lol...I didn't realize the last chapter wasn't literal death. I didn't realize it was during his faked death. Duh! I am so sorry for being slow on the uptake. Forgive me.
Anyway, this was quite unexpected...a conversation between Sherlock and Molly. But I really loved it. How cute that Molly was making the bed. LOL..I have got to say that was the last thing on my mind after having my children. But I'm sure very characteristic for her. Me? I don't mind making a mess. :P And I love that poor Charlie was wearing another frilly dress from Harry. Poor kid! But I can imagine by the time she's walking, those dresses will be covered in chocolate, mud...and other things. ;P
It's so cute that Sherlock didn't know if girls read about pirates. LOL...of course they do! Mine do...and I'm glad Charlie will too. Besides, there's Wendy and Tiger Lily and Tinker Bell in there too. I do want to know why he wouldn't want John to know. Is it because he didn't want John to touch it or because it was something special just for Charlie? Also, why isn't the year filled out? Is it because you want to leave it open for canon? Or are you saying Sherlock had planned this before? But then how would he know the date?
But even though I have a few questions, which I'm sure you'll tell me the answers to soon enough, I loved this story. It was sweet and lovely...and I'm thinking the sequel will have to be 'The Girl Who Wouldn't Grow Up'. ;P And I am certain Jack loved it too. Well done, love. :)
| darkin520 chapter 2 . 8/18/2013
This was quite a shock. I didn't quite realize where this was heading from the first chapter. While it was very sad, I really liked how you showed John's reaction: the fact he was able to administer his own sedatives, how the days blended together, how he noticed Sherlock's mug with coffee like he'd just made it moments ago when it was really two days ago (that was really touching and sad)...and how he'd go to the morgue...I'm assuming to get a whiff of reality or remind him that it was indeed true. But then again, I love that John notes it's not grief, but rather fear he's experiencing. I really adored some of the description here. Really fantastic metaphors and such. And I love how just yesterday, Sherlock was alive and well. I love that he sat down with a copy of the sacred book that he wasn't to read. I really love that you started with the same line and ended. Gosh, this was so sad and touching all at once. I really loved this chapter, even though I just can't believe Sherlock's dead (cries). Maybe it's all a dream? I guess I'll have to see. Well done, my dear. :)
| darkin520 chapter 1 . 8/12/2013
Oh, this was a hilarious opening chapter! I'm sure Jack loved this because I certainly did. LOL...Sherlock is just too funny with his child-like mannerisms. I love that he's not a morning person either. Hahaha...I loved the Norman Bates line. Of course, Sherlock wouldn't know who that is. Too bad he doesn't know Hitchcock. :P Oh, dear. That conversation went from light-hearted to bad rather quickly. I love how protective Sherlock is over that book, but you know, it was probably one of the few things his mother actually had given him. I am glad John actually saw the inscription because if he hadn't, he'd still be bewildered. Hmmm...I wonder where this will go. I can't wait to find out. Could we have Sherlock open up to John about his mother? I hope so. Well done, my dear. A pleasure to read, as always. :)
| Madam'zelleGiry chapter 1 . 8/6/2013
Just the sheer fact that Jack had something to do with the inspiration of this terrifies me and excites me at the sme time. :D
"...of course he is." Naturally! What else would he be reading, I ask you? I love the way that I can see John peering over at what he's reading, looking completely bewildered, and then being like "oh. Of course." Sarcastially. Works so well with so few words on your part... love it!
It's really cute to see John in this little library, like a kid in a candy store. Sherlock's collection is certainly impressive, and I like the way that it gives a Granada-esque feel to this because it does remind me of JB's book and paper littered apartment. As much as I love BBC's flat, it'll just never top Granada. -nods-
"...name one person who collects..." LOL, would you believe my French teacher's parents? :D
Uh oh, looks like John got himself into a situatoin he certainly didn't intend. I really like that the inscription on the front has some meaning for us as the readers, but John still doesn't know what he's getting himself into... I really like the thought of John finding out about the Holmes past through something like this. It's not exactly like Sherlock's going to go all sentimental for no reason and just tell him, and this is soemthing that he really needs to know. It'll be interesting to see how all of this pans out, just what happens from here...
| Aiko Isari chapter 3 . 8/4/2013
I sense a Charlie in the vicinity...
Flowers wouldn't fit under his jacket.- Ahahaha, oh Sherlock, you prideful sod. Also flowers wilted. Perhaps this will never wilt. Also, the sympathetic looks must be annoying to him, but hilarious to everyone else.
bright summer day- The perfect day to be locked up in the house with the curtains closed.
"I see."- Basically, it's like Sherlock's deprivation of his body while on cases, only less likely to get her sick or in any potential pain.
airtight bubble- I can imagine this. Thanks Eddy, it's a fabulous image. I'm sure Charlie would love it.
pastel pink hue- Urgh, I can imagine. There some pinks that should remain on art and not on children.
perhaps I… yes-That was the most eloquent thing I have ever heard. Nice one. Awkward bugger.
"I'm sorry."- Oh that line was even more awkward for him. I wonder how many times he's had to utter it. *claps slowly* He meant it this time, because, you know, he wouldn't say the words if he didn't mean them. He's Sherlock that way.
new bookplate - Aww... that's the nicest thing I think he's ever done. Head canon that this is Charlie's favorite thing to read forever... GO.
:D I really liked this short story here. Kudos!
| Aiko Isari chapter 2 . 8/2/2013
All children grow up, except one.-That line always freaked me out as a kid for some reason. Guess I wasn't ready to grow up then. Thanks for scaring me Eddy.
This was fear. - I like the way you draw the distinction you make between death and fear.
horribly mangled- It sounds more like someone's torture scene instead of a comparison to fear. Awesome word choice right here.
these antics just yesterday.-It's amazing how yesterday isn't today. Especially after death, that hits rather hard.
A musty, comforting smell billowed up- This description here is probably my favorite for this chapter. The way you describe it here is like... wow. Just wow.
Argh... Peter is Sherlock. I cannot unsee the image because now I'm wondering where Wendy and his Lost Boys were. Thanks Eddy. I'll have to read the third one so I can be cheerful again. I love the word choices in this though. They are nice and powerful, and sharp. I can appreciate them a lot. Thank you Eddy.
P.S. I am happy and sad that Charlie and Peter Pan has been taken care of.
| Aiko Isari chapter 1 . 8/2/2013
Oh Sherlock. I don't know if I should feel bad for him or be laughing at his defensiveness. "I COLLECT BOOKS,OKAY?" Geez, dude, don't blow a fuse. You need those.
I love how Sherlock is shown here to have NO BODY REGULATION WHATSOEVER. Not getting up until eleven, rarely eating on a case, and this dude WONDERS how he manages to get sick.
Something about John's comments on mistakes were kind of entertaining, considering people don't just normally become friends after they move in together. It usually happens after they're friends. So they are currently in this awkward stage of... um, what do I say or how I interrupt thoughts and they're stuck with each other and quibbling over murder details. It's hilarious.
Aw... Sherlock. that was awkward and cute and very sad. His mother was depressed at the time, so that must have meant a lot. His awkward thank you kind of made things worse and it just leaves John to walk out and sit there like: Um... mutual embarrassment.
It was cute and hilarious. And sad. But you know, Eddy enjoys giving us those feels.
Maybe that is going to be Sherlock's first gift to Charlie: a copy of Peter Pan! COULD I WRITE IT? COULD I?
agitated staccato- FOr some reason, I liked this description more than the others. I just wanted to tell you that.