|Reviews for Naruto: A New Song|
| Trace Reading chapter 13 . 11/22/2014
I really don't get why everyone portrays Anko as a perpetually violent sociopath. It's an act she puts on to scare chuunin hopefuls, not her default personality. Nobody who relaxes by performing TEA CEREMONY is all that unhinged.
| Kurokawa Kazunari chapter 16 . 10/17/2014
Try adding some Tayuya Naruto fluff, like a moment during training or when they are trying to sleep or eat or something. It's a good story so far but they haven't had any fluffy moments yet, most of the story was of them establishing a friendship with Tayuya showing only a like for Naruto in a way so she doesn't have to be near or next to someone else with Naruto only shows concern and friendship.
My advice is add some fluff.
| Musubi Kazesaru chapter 16 . 10/14/2014
Good chapter, I had this put away to read for a while and finally got to it. You're doing the training fairly well, though Naruto's chosen technique seems a bit too simple.
| Goatius chapter 16 . 10/14/2014
Loving the story, keep it up!
| justsomerealguy chapter 12 . 10/10/2014
Damn I was kinda hoping it would be a Naru/Tayu/Sasu team. Just so Tayuya would be forced to work with Duckass...but alas it did not happen. Anyway go Team Hebi!
| SSJ3 Kyuubi Gohan chapter 16 . 10/5/2014
All rodents big and small, fear Tayuya's wrath.
| Guest chapter 16 . 10/4/2014
When will Naruto learn the Shadow Clone Jutsu!?
He needs it if he is ever going to be able to pull off the Rasenshurikan!
| firetemplar415 chapter 16 . 10/4/2014
awwww it was getting good!
| fellow chapter 16 . 10/4/2014
| ShadowedNara chapter 16 . 10/4/2014
Great chap mate :) this chapter was a touch slower, but it was a nice relaxing read, so can't wait for the next one where there's likely to be a little more action ;) Interesting twist you added there with Iwa's participation in Nami no Kuni, and looking forward to how it all plays out. Also, I'm eager to read about Tayuya's past, so there's a lot to look forward to :D
As with suggestions or comments, not much to say, there were a couple of errors here or there with the writing, but nothing major, so keep it up :)
As for your reply, compared to many stories out there, your writing is really decent. I read your Bleach story over the course of the previous week and a bit in between Uni, and I'm quite impressed with how far along your writing has come since the start of your other story. You really have come a long way :D I know if I read back to the way I wrote in my first story, compared to how I wrote in my second, there's quite a vast difference, and I actually can't believe how badly I used to write. But alas, I'm going slightly off topic here lol, so any ways, great chap, can't wait for the next one. Sorry for this essay of a review, it's become a pretty bad habit of mine xD I'll stop typing now, really I will :D
| RikudoNaruto1 chapter 16 . 10/4/2014
love the chapter also i really like how you changed up zabuzas and hakus role in wave and the involvement of iwa.
Its tree climbing time for team crazy! hopefully anko style lol
| ShadowedNara chapter 15 . 9/26/2014
Hey AlternateVick, great chapter! Seriously, this story is crazy good, and I read most of it in one sitting :D I apologise for not posting a review until the last chapter, you deserved a well written one after each chapter any ways, but I was completely focused on reading that it just slipped my mind! :D
I love the direction your story is heading; not in the usual plot direction of canon, but sort of in that general direction with a few of your own twists and turns, and it's been great so far :D Naruto's OOC personality doesn't detract from it at all (thought you should know), and I really like your Naruto :)
I'll say that I'm slightly, if only a little, disappointed that there hasn't been much NaruTayu, but I understand that they are still in fact twelve, so not much would be happening regardless. But still, you've got me reading in anticipation for when those fluffy moments do eventually come, and I can't wait :D
Before I end, I just wanna say that your writing is great; never any errors, grammar and punctuation is spot on; everything just flows so nicely, so keep it up! I enjoy your humour as well, and that part about the Arma-beaverdillo (not sure if I got that right lol) brought a big smile along with a few chuckles :D
Any ways, keep on writing mate, I'm really enjoying the story so far, and can't wait for your next chapter ;)
| Trace Reading chapter 8 . 9/25/2014
Past tense of spin is spun, not span.
Span is usually used in conjunction with distance or length (such as "the forest spanned several square miles" or "over the span of twenty years", or to refer to the supported part of a bridge (as in "he slid down one of the cables and alighted on the span"), often alternatively described as a deck, though that usually indicates the surface of the bridge rather than the bridge itself.
| RyoshiMorino chapter 15 . 9/22/2014
This is way better than the first wave arc, I'm looking forward to the next chapter! The updates are coming so fast!
| Quick-n-Popular chapter 15 . 9/21/2014
An awesome chapter. I like how you've constructed this alternate version of the Naruto storyline. Tayuya is awesome and it's a treat to see how you made her.
Please update soon!