|Reviews for Zach's Life|
| Ghostwriter chapter 1 . 7/18/2013
It looks like a good story, but the parts where Avery speaks and then Zack speaks should be separated. For example, instead of "Zach oh Zach where are you his beautiful wife Avery who was half Latina and half white she is tall stands at 5'6 with long legs who usually wear's Victoria Secret leggings and a random tea-shirt. Zach calls down to her Aves can you help me get up I am stuck I can't reach my wheelchair." it should be something like the following:
["Zack, oh Zack! Where are you?" Avery asked. She was half Latina and half white, was five-six was wearing a t-shirt and Victoria Secret leggings."
"Aves, can you help me get up? I can't reach my wheelchair and I'm stuck!" Zack called down to her.]
I would advise getting someone to look over your work to help with formatting, etc. As I said, this looks like a good story and you should keep it up. Catch ya on the flip side.