It was amazing and I loved it please make more!

I’m sorry, but, if you ask me, chocolate is ALWAYS better than a relationship.
I’ve never been in one, but...

So kawaii! Love it! \\w/

'Mello what's better than chocolate?' looks at Mello, 'Nothing.' 'WHAT ABOUT ME!?'

I love this so much omg.

I laughed so hard because he gave it up easily AFTER 10 MINUTES THATS EASY OKAY

Well, I'm not saying it's awful but there's lots of room for improvement. The story moved way too fast and Mello was wayy out of character. The start was great but maybe if you made it a short multiple chartered story instead of rushing into it, then it would've been better.
Keep working, you'll get there :)

*fangirl squeal* so cute! So romantic! Wierd thing is i actually have an ex-boyfriend named Blake... he didnt cheat on me though.

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# poisoned sweetness

Omg I love your stories they are so sweet!
Especially the one you made if BB I loved that too.
Did you do a L,Near,or Matt one yet if so that will make me happy!:)

omgomgomg you always amaze me with your brilliant storys!

you should do an after-part thingy when mello is about to die, I can be all badass and save him