|Reviews for 50 Shades of Gomez|
| Mystique84 chapter 3 . 2/19
This chapter. I like it. ANOTHER! (smash computer)
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/6/2013
One of the best that I have read. Keep writing!
| YourQueen chapter 6 . 11/4/2013
| Eryn chapter 11 . 7/27/2013
Your writing is quite good, but there are several areas in which your research is lacking.
First of all, never use 50 Shades of Grey as a guide for writing BDSM. The author has admitted that she did very little research, and it shows. Many of the BDSM practices she writes about are not safe, and occur under conditions of dubious consent.
Safe breath play avoids the neck area, specifically pressure on the trachea, which can be crushed easily. Tracheal damage can cut off the flow of oxygen to the brain for dangerous amounts of time, leading to permanent brain damage or death.
Again, your writing is excellent, and I look forward to reading more of it. But when writing about things like BDSM, it's helpful to do some research beforehand.
| Little Obsessions chapter 1 . 7/24/2013
This is good. I think you capture the character well. There are some errors in expression and grammar but nothing close reading wouldn't solve :)