|Reviews for Not In Love|
| Pichooi chapter 1 . 7/25
Loved it! Sprung!
| thefierydeath chapter 1 . 8/15/2013
Lol this story totally kicked me into Rocketshipping mode.
| Tawny chapter 1 . 8/3/2013
HAHA I know what you mean about the James/Jessie or James and being a severe flamboyant gay. (Can CHOOSE) But, this was done very well!
| To the TARDIS chapter 1 . 7/30/2013
| JC chapter 1 . 7/29/2013
Really good! Continue writting great stuff... :)
| videogamenerd101 chapter 1 . 7/28/2013
[[James, who was cowering from Jessie under the table, deeply envied Meowth, who he had just seen retreat to the recliner.] "who" should be "whom".
[No one could ever know that James had strayed from his sexuality and had maybe fallen in love with Jessie,] I think you can tell what's wrong here.
[James tried to suppress a shiver.,] I think you can tell what this one is, too.
["No, no, you'll just wake Pikachu. I have my own." Misty took her red sack off her back and bent down to dig for her favorite yellow sweatshirt, adorned with a big purple Starmie on the front. It was an ugly sweatshirt, but Misty loved it. Ash had given it to her for one of her birthday presents this year, saying it reminded him of her because of the Starmie and because it was yellow. Misty had winced slightly at the sight of the thing, but as soon as Ash made her try it on, she fell in love with the soft cotton fabric.] This isn't a grammar mistake, but I figured I'd point it out. You put a lot of emphasis on the fact that Ash had given it to Misty and all, and because you put so much emphasis on it but it doesn't have anything to do with the plot, it ended up turning out to be slightly weakening. So I suggest taking out some of it from that chunk so it doesn't seem like it's so important.
Haha, I really liked this. Jessie and James were IC to me, so don't worry about that. It was hilarious when Ash and Misty saw Jessie and James kissing and all. xD
This seems great! I hope you update soon! (This isn't a one-shot, right?)
| nyislandersgirl chapter 1 . 7/28/2013
Oh my gosh, this turned out so perfectly XD Jessie and James were perfectly in character, so you don't have to worry about that. I felt so bad for James in the beginning, omg. Jessie is so much more abusive than Misty XD
I love how Ash was SO convinced that James was gay, and Misty didn't think so at all. And then Ash backtracks and says "well maybe he's bi" XD When they found James making out with Jessie in the bushes, I almost lost it. That was so, so funny. And all of Misty's nicknames for Ash (Ashton, Ashy, lol.)
I loved this one! It really did come out so great :D
Also, I don't know if you noticed this, but you accidentally put your one shot at the end of this story :P