Probably because of the frequent paragraph breaks, this chapter was very disjointed. It felt like a dream sequence or Danny’s thoughts rather than a narrative. That may have been your intention, but it was a bit uncomfortable for me personally to read. Still wonderfully written, of course, but some paragraphs with more than a sentence would be nice. :/

This is really cool! I look forward to more!

Oh wow. I really really like this chapter. The way you're bringing the Winchesters into this one is really well done. And their take on these ghosts, since they aren't actually killing anyone (thanks, of course, to Danny) is something I haven't seen before. But it's kinda fun. For them. Right now. Before they realize they're wrong. But, you know.

I just yeah, really liked all of the interactions in this chapter and the SAUSAGES IN THE FRIDGE aha those were the best. And Danny's voice was great too as he narrated this chapter.

Interesting bringing in their criminal record, too! That will bring a different spin on things.

Really great job getting into Danny's brain here and really setting up the mood he's in and the way the rest of the town functions. The descriptions are great and I love this new feel you're bringing to the show.

Also. AHAHAHA. The Winchesters and Jehovah's Witnesses. That's the funniest thing to imagine... XD

Huh oh, Sam's going to be mad that Danny ditched her. lol

I like how the story are phrased, never too revealing, mysterious, and terrifying at the same time. Keep it up! :D

Woot! New chapter!
So the Winchesters are scoping out the town for the angels? Or is this just more of their nosiness making itself known?

I find the little texts at the end amusing XP

Your writing style is interesting. At first it seems very florid, but then you surprise me with something like a line dedicated only to "Ah. Shit." And I end up snorting my chocolate milk. This story is very well written.

What's going on between Sam and Danny?

And is that Dean and Sam(Winchester) who just pulled up to FentonWorks?

Ohmigod...did the Angels blow up Vlads portal? And by extension, kill Vlad?

Your story is awesome. I love how well you portray the characters. It's a creative plot idea and I can't wait to see where it goes. I love the idea of the angels intervening. Please update soon!

I like the little phone call things at the end and I live this story.

I am wondering if other supernatural characters will make there was into this as well?

Looking forward to the next chapter!

Murakami no Kitsune

OHMYGOODNESS.

What is this?

What have you done.

This. Oh. What. No. But. Wow. I. Hnnnnnnng.

Hahaha. Wow. Okay. Yes. Love the background info on the Amity Park ghosts from Heaven's point of view.

But. You... just killed Vlad. And now they're going to go after Danny and the Fenton's portal.

D8

Jeeez, you certainly know how to write a great chapter that escalates the problem and the situation and the emotions. Loved it.

Fave line: Who knew that inventing a toaster that created a pattern into the bread without burning anything was such a big deal? / Danny was more than a little amused at the fact they'd been recognized for a toaster instead of, you know, the whole clean energy from an otherworldly portal in their basement thing they had going on.

But honestly, the entire thing is great. Your narration is so funny and witty and snarky and in character. It's so lovely to read.

But wow. Seeing the wolves explode. Perfectly understandable when they try to eat an angel, but still. That's a new one. That signals lots of trouble.

And oh. Danny finding it but needing to make someone else call the body in. :'( Dagger right to the heart there. Wow.

Oh whoa. Okay. Like I had to just take a moment to sit back and try to collect myself. This is intense stuff.

I really liked how you had the angels searching for the reality gauntlet and its gems. Smart tie-in to when they're trying to find the weapons of heaven in the show.

But seeing an angel not able to sense the wolf ghost and get taken down by it (especially that the wolf was able to claw through his spiritual form and wings! which was the coolest image I've seen in a long time in a story even though it was horrible for the poor unsuspecting angel!) was rough.

You're setting up a fantastic story.

And the extra "scene" there at the bottom with Danny's emotional state being portrayed through texts is coming across so loud and clear without many words. Awesome.