|Reviews for The Crown of Peace|
| teacupchild chapter 6 . 11/11/2013
Finally here, i need to learn a bit on FF. I'll PM you about Egypt. :D
| teacupchild chapter 7 . 11/11/2013
Sorry, I think I'm trolling your reviews so I'm skipping one to this one.
1) I'm kinda confused with the relationship of Luanne and Marik. They seem to exploit each other but the contract also in a way is to help one another. I like how Luanne is trusting Marik easily but how are you plotting her to expose him?
2) Expressions, you tend to jumble to expression in the sentence. It's okay, just complicates and I had to double guess. Sometimes too long of a chapter make you lose track. I've written a book, I know.
3) Bring Odion back. He needs to be there again for Luanne. Love the story, sorry it's underrated but you can always email me, PM when I get my account. TATA!
| teacupchild chapter 5 . 11/11/2013
Wait you have already updated... telescopes are fun. Pretty idea there.
| teacupchild chapter 4 . 11/11/2013
It's a trap Luanne, don't go! Nice entrance for Marik. *Goes to find my Ray Ban sunglasses* Update please!
| teacupchild chapter 3 . 11/11/2013
I'll just pretend I know lots about politics. I remember the news all. I love the country as well! I think I should have an account so that I can give you tips on Egypt. I've been there. hehe.
| teacupchild chapter 2 . 11/11/2013
Odiah... interesting, I think I know who it is and you should keep your notes to a minimal. trust me. :)
| teacupchild chapter 1 . 11/11/2013
There is tears in my eyes by remembering YGO scene. This is an amazing adaption of Ishizu and Marik bonding as siblings. Well done!
| 4fireking chapter 1 . 10/21/2013
Wow. That. was. different, but. totally. good. I. like. the. premise of it all. Hi. You. might. already. know me. My. name. is 4fireking. I'm not what you say to be an inexperienced writer but I'm not an experienced one either. I wrote 94 stories. Some of them are good while the others...not so good. And I make a lot of mistakes in the writing process. I was wondering if maybe you can review one of my stories that you think is the best. Also, I'm looking for someone to help me come up with ideas for my OC stories. You can look at my profile and pick which one you'd like to work on. Unless you don't like OC stories. That's cool. Not many people on this sight do. But a review to tell me where I went wrong would help. Thank you. I didn't want to PM this to you because it would look like I'm trying to scam you. Besides, people in this sight write better when their stories are ravely reviewed.
| Ataahua chapter 1 . 9/3/2013
Yay sibling cuteness! I like your take on the scene where we see Marik give Ishizu that necklace made of flowers... And I know the feeling of working full time and being irritated when I see views on my stories, but no reviews/hardly any. It's discouraging. Onto chapter one. :)
| The Duelist's Heiress chapter 2 . 7/29/2013
My only only only complaint is this: PoV switches every which way, with the 1st person PoVs give useless and/ or random bits of exposition, is irritating...
There are several typos and places that don't quite flow right as a result but those are easy fixes.
Love the attention to detail in your 3rd person PoV stuff.
Looking forward to your next update.
| The Duelist's Heiress chapter 1 . 7/29/2013
Squee you posted it! And thanks for the Ishtar sibling cuteness right off the bat!