Reviews for Frozen Child
herpderp chapter 15 . 5/26
Okay, this is a good idea for a story. And for the most part I liked it but, you're grammer, punctuation, spelling, and overall usage of the wrong words irks me to no end. Not to mention that your plot is very predictable, and at the same time the consistency of Swiss cheese. Okay, you introduce interesting characters, but only mentioned them in the beginning and end, killed off the two closest people to Jack, I can actually get that part though. But he didn't properly grieve them, everyone was completely out of character, and their dialog was just stating the obvious. That is pretty annoying to me. You misspelled Jack's name, it's Overland not Overlander. You don't even know how to preview your writing before publishing it obviously, or you wouldn't have all these errors. You need to work on your spelling and commas as well. You tend to have sentence fragments instead of full comprehendable sentences you use apostrophes instead of quotation marks half of the time. You're characters are bipolar as well, okay one minute Jack is a cowering, helpless little boy, the next he's beating the bogeyman up. Do you see the problems here?
Guest chapter 9 . 4/23
Zyenna chapter 16 . 4/5
This was really sad but good. I cried a little when Jacks dad died. I do have one question though. If Jack replaced Old Man Winter when he passed the. Who's gonna replace Jacks dad? That's the only thing you left wide open here...
Chise Sakamoto chapter 1 . 4/15/2014
This is one of my favorite stories!
Chise Sakamoto chapter 15 . 4/14/2014
I love it! It's awesome and perfect and cool and awesome!
Make war not love. war is fun chapter 15 . 2/6/2014
cute story
Sebby-chan3000 chapter 15 . 1/15/2014
luv it
Roses Wrath chapter 3 . 10/21/2013
Looks good so far! :D
Joanny-chan chapter 1 . 9/17/2013
This story is wonderful, sorry if I am reviewing on chapter one, but I just read it and went back to the first page. Anyway as I was saying, in my opinion I think this story should have a sequel, I am just saying this since I just read it. Anyways good story keep up the good work and I hope you did write a continuation for this story, if you do, you will know who is your first reader might be! _
Lousia Rose chapter 14 . 9/10/2013
For how long?
vampireharry the 2 chapter 15 . 9/9/2013
I love the ending!
Phantom Trainer chapter 15 . 9/8/2013
this was awesome and i was glad to share in the journey with you. *bows in a fancy manner*

Until next time,
Phantom Trainer.

Phantom OUT!
Lokithenightfury chapter 15 . 9/8/2013
Aww, it's over? Too bad, that was an awesome story! Can't wait for what you'll cook up next! ;)
ParisPhantom chapter 15 . 9/8/2013
Well all great things must come to an end :( but I loved this story all the way from the beginning to the end. I can't wait till you next story and well till then...Ta! ;)
vampireharry the 2 chapter 14 . 9/7/2013
Yay, good things have happened! Jack's fine and Pitch will be frozen for a good long while, happy day! I can't wait to see how Jack (and the polar bears too, I guess) will change the Guardians' lives, both day-to-day and overall!
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