Reviews for Shoton of Konoha
Guest chapter 25 . 9/11
HOLY SHIT, you added Hinata to the pairing! THANK YOU!
Guest chapter 2 . 9/3
1000 years of death crystal version you got to make an omake of that
Guest chapter 2 . 8/27
I like Shōton it's one if my favourite kekkei genkai but couldn't you have made his crystals a different colour it doesn't sound very manly when there pink
Tsukoblue chapter 25 . 8/27
Please update this great story soon
Anon E. Moose chapter 1 . 8/24
What instantly stood out and I have to comment on:
The clothes cliché.
Seriously, Tenten lectures Naruto on clothes fitting for ninja? TENTEN?
Who wears a pink dress that stands because of color AND style?
When everybody else also does not give a damn and isn't hindered either?
AND our "traditional" definition of ninja does not even exis in theit world?
Really? Bad start.
MGStarFire chapter 9 . 8/19
let me guess Naruto won't do anything about Kabuto the same as Kankuro.
He should have gone to the Hokage and have the suna siblings investigated.
And now he's just gonna leave Kabuto be, i really don't like it when authors put stuff in their story just to change it slightly and don't follow through
MGStarFire chapter 4 . 8/19
you're following canon too closely
samuraipanda85 chapter 25 . 8/14
A couple of chapters back I reviewed about how I am torn on the inclusion of the Uzumaki clan and I couldn't exactly pinpoint why. Now I can, there are just too many OCs.
And it's hard for me to be critical of that. I don't want to discourage you or any other author from creating new characters and giving them depth, which you most certainly have done. The kind of lore and back story you have given to the Uzumaki clan is commendable, and I'd love to see it become one of those staples in other fanfics. But it has to be said that we didn't start reading this story because of good OCs, we started reading and kept reading because of your portrayal of Naruto and his friends.
I'm interested in the lesbian couple, and I'd love to see more of the kick as princess, but I'm here for Naruto.
Actually, you know what? The problem isn't the number of OCs, it's how quickly you introduced them back to back.
If we had let our heroes and Kushina get through the chunin exams, then had an arc introducing and surrounding the lesbIan couple as a sort of ongoing journey of Naruto's to find his scattered family, then an arc involving rescuing/protecting/finding the princess, that would be a formula for this story that I would follow for years. One major OC per arc, without ever confining Naruto to only 25% of a chapter.
One last thing, this is still one of the best Naruto fics out there, best written at least. You keep up the good work and I and a lot of other people will keep reading.
See you in the next chapter.
gwb620 chapter 24 . 8/10
Oh man I laughed so hard I couldn't breath! XD
Naruto-kun257 chapter 25 . 8/7
Another chapter which Naruto is shown only a few times...it's story about him, right? So why you do this?

I scroll Sasuke's fight, I hate him and I want to see Naruto's fights.

Next thing is OCs...too many them! And still you add new ones, your fic lost much of what was in the beginning. It's not rant, I just have the feeling.

Situation with Maiyuri saving Naruto was really strange...it should be Naruto who save princess :D

And as thor94 said, hope for Naruto to win against Gaara, ALONE :)
thedarkwolf95 chapter 25 . 8/5
I know you don't like harems, but you may want to make an exception to that for this fic, reading the initial chapters up to 15 seem to hint that stormy rebel was heading on that route, plus it allows haku, sakura, yugito, and hinata to be with naruto, as haku and sakura have clear feelings for him
christopherrhaydon chapter 25 . 7/30
UPDATE ASAP;)! WILL TSUNADE RETURN TO THE VILLAGE? AWESOME CHAPTER!
Alister131 chapter 25 . 7/28
Hey nice story so far. I'm really enjoying how it's going. I don't have any criticism for it. Just don't stop here.
sagar hussain chapter 25 . 7/16
Awesome chapter
Narku the ultimate fusion chapter 9 . 7/15
Damn I was really hoping naruto would've taken the card from kabuto the moment he mentioned his Shoot, or even have him killed for knowing about the old fuzz ball. I am really enjoying these chapters so far I regret not taking a look at this before, I can't wait till I'm all caught up
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