|Reviews for Cumming out (this is a pun)|
| Jackson Daidoji chapter 1 . 6/1/2015
I will admit.. This was, fact, VERY smutty, but I feel it was missing something... Perhaps it was the fact
there was no backstory or quick begining story to start us off. At first, I thought it was Tea or Yami doing the talking in the begining, and it took me longer than it should have to figure out it was Devlin. Next, there was the location problem. WHERE ARE THEY? Duke's place? Taylor's?
But, despite all that, I enjoyed the story. Keep it up, and you just might write books.
| ilovevocaloid93 chapter 1 . 6/11/2014
2 simple things.
1. This one-shot needs more text. At least 1,000 words or more.
2. Separate your quotations and sentences.