Reviews for Cumming out (this is a pun)
catspats31 chapter 1 . 10/22/2017
While the writing quality of your story is great, please note this part of the Content Guidelines:

"Please note FanFiction does not accept explicit content, Fiction Rating: MA, and the rating is only presented for reference."

Please remove all detailed descriptions of physical interaction of sexual or violent nature in the story if you want it to remain on this site, or upload it to a site where the "Fiction MA" content is permitted such as AdultFanfiction.
Jackson Daidoji chapter 1 . 6/1/2015
I will admit.. This was, fact, VERY smutty, but I feel it was missing something... Perhaps it was the fact
there was no backstory or quick begining story to start us off. At first, I thought it was Tea or Yami doing the talking in the begining, and it took me longer than it should have to figure out it was Devlin. Next, there was the location problem. WHERE ARE THEY? Duke's place? Taylor's?

But, despite all that, I enjoyed the story. Keep it up, and you just might write books.

Jackson Daidoji
ilovevocaloid93 chapter 1 . 6/11/2014
2 simple things.

1. This one-shot needs more text. At least 1,000 words or more.
2. Separate your quotations and sentences.